Abigail
A Little life that Almost Was47 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
It is so sad when someone so young dies. I couldn't understand a father or any parent not crying at such a time. Wonderful artwork
Sorry for your losses.
I think you have to erase new as a second adjective for moon. A full moon and a new moon are opposites. A new moon means the night is moonless.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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It is so sad when someone so young dies. I couldn't understand a father or any parent not crying at such a time. Wonderful artwork
Sorry for your losses.
I think you have to erase new as a second adjective for moon. A full moon and a new moon are opposites. A new moon means the night is moonless.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Ah, thank you for reading, your in-depth review, all the stars, and great suggestion. I changed that.
irish
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You are most kindly welcome on all accounts, Irish.
Joan
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an absolutely beautiful poem. It has excellent rhyme and rhythm and wonderful imagery. It tells a poignant story, too. The poem combined with the picture is heart melting.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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This is an absolutely beautiful poem. It has excellent rhyme and rhythm and wonderful imagery. It tells a poignant story, too. The poem combined with the picture is heart melting.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Mary! I am humbled. All the stars, and your kind comments!
Thanks again, irish
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You are welcome. I'm like a dragon ... I horde the stars and don't give them lightly. Yours is well deserved.
Comment from Jim Wile
What a lovely, sad, beautiful poem about a beautiful little girl. I'm sure her death is a haunting memory for everyone who knew her. But you give us hope that we'll be together again with loved ones after we part with the living. A beautiful picture as well.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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What a lovely, sad, beautiful poem about a beautiful little girl. I'm sure her death is a haunting memory for everyone who knew her. But you give us hope that we'll be together again with loved ones after we part with the living. A beautiful picture as well.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Jim, for reading, your kind comments, and all the stars!
irish
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An intriguing poem. There is warmth, dreaminess, and perhaps a bit of a surreal feeling about it. The poem flows well. The short lines add to the quick movement. The picture makes for a good presentation. The images are clear. The author's notes complete the picture. However, even open-ended it works well.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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An intriguing poem. There is warmth, dreaminess, and perhaps a bit of a surreal feeling about it. The poem flows well. The short lines add to the quick movement. The picture makes for a good presentation. The images are clear. The author's notes complete the picture. However, even open-ended it works well.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you for reading, your great comments, and all the stars! I opted for the 6-7 syllable count for a better flow.
Cheers, irish
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You are welcome.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Stunningly touching, Irish. How sad to know about the loss of a child. The end of a life that has not yet begun. This is beautiful, my friend. I'm honored to have read it! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Stunningly touching, Irish. How sad to know about the loss of a child. The end of a life that has not yet begun. This is beautiful, my friend. I'm honored to have read it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you, John, for reading, your kind comments, and all the stars.
Still feel that loss, a wound that never heals.
irish
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It's very hard losing a child. I lost a son when he was only 37 days old. He was born with a heart condition and died during heart surgery. That was about 40 years ago. I learned to live with it, but it still hurts. I understand. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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It's very hard losing a child. I lost a son when he was only 37 days old. He was born with a heart condition and died during heart surgery. That was about 40 years ago. I learned to live with it, but it still hurts. I understand. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Barbara, I appreciate you reading and understand your loss.
Comment from royowen
This is so sad, I'm glad I stayed alive for my girls, they need a dad in their formative, a dad's job is to protect their family, and build a hedge of love, protecting not only physically but emotionally, protecting their precious innocence until they mature, love has a loosening grip. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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This is so sad, I'm glad I stayed alive for my girls, they need a dad in their formative, a dad's job is to protect their family, and build a hedge of love, protecting not only physically but emotionally, protecting their precious innocence until they mature, love has a loosening grip. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Roy, appreciate your reading, all the stars, and your comments.
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Most welcome