Ma's Mirror
Heredity tells44 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club entry read well, Nancy. Great job with the syllable
count per line and the message. I love the way your picture
shows your mother at the two different ages. I believe she
has a great life filled with many stories. Yes, the family
resemblance is hard to overlook among individuals when
one knows about them.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Your club entry read well, Nancy. Great job with the syllable
count per line and the message. I love the way your picture
shows your mother at the two different ages. I believe she
has a great life filled with many stories. Yes, the family
resemblance is hard to overlook among individuals when
one knows about them.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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YOu are right about that. Thanks for reading.
Comment from robyn corum
Nancy,
It meant me getting a few years under my belt for me to completely understand that older people are still REAL people who used to be young and who still feel like those same young people under all those layers of wrinkles and weakened muscles. *smile*
I love looking at those old pictures. It's sad that our kids and grandkids couldn't have known us when we were a bit younger. ha Thanks!
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Nancy,
It meant me getting a few years under my belt for me to completely understand that older people are still REAL people who used to be young and who still feel like those same young people under all those layers of wrinkles and weakened muscles. *smile*
I love looking at those old pictures. It's sad that our kids and grandkids couldn't have known us when we were a bit younger. ha Thanks!
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thanks, seeing my mother's face inf the mirror can be a bit of a surprise in the morning!
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely senryu poem and picture. Over time, we do resemble our moms if not in features, in our behavior, too. Hope you were blessed on Mother's Day.
One comment about the middle line - it has 8 syllables. Perhaps just remove the "Til" - as it doesn't add much more info.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Lovely senryu poem and picture. Over time, we do resemble our moms if not in features, in our behavior, too. Hope you were blessed on Mother's Day.
One comment about the middle line - it has 8 syllables. Perhaps just remove the "Til" - as it doesn't add much more info.
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Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you! I don't know how I missed that!
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You're welcome. We all miss little stuff like that - surprisingly even for these short forms!
Comment from royowen
I think you've written the perfect tribute to your mother, and recognised the gift of life given by both God and your mum, without whom it wouldn't be possible bless you Nancy, Roy
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I think you've written the perfect tribute to your mother, and recognised the gift of life given by both God and your mum, without whom it wouldn't be possible bless you Nancy, Roy
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Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thanks. I appreciate your kind words. It is true, we are gifted
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Most welcome
