Separate Pools
A commentary on the recent school shooting in Michigan.51 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
AMEN! I hate guns but I will fight for people's rights to own a gun, but never for children or teenagers to have free access to guns. I don't understand some parents. Why have guns accessible to children? And from reports the parents knew in advance this child had problems.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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AMEN! I hate guns but I will fight for people's rights to own a gun, but never for children or teenagers to have free access to guns. I don't understand some parents. Why have guns accessible to children? And from reports the parents knew in advance this child had problems.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Yes, and now they are trying to act like they are not responsible.
Comment from mermaids
You have written a poem that reflects the modern world and current events. Your smooth poetic flow of words and lines adds strength to your theme. A poem that should be read by all.
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You have written a poem that reflects the modern world and current events. Your smooth poetic flow of words and lines adds strength to your theme. A poem that should be read by all.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Hitcher
We have just heard this story on the news here in NZ. The parents have apparently been found and arrested, caught hiding out in a warehouse. The mind struggles to comprehend what the parents were thinking when they got him a gun... like seriously!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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We have just heard this story on the news here in NZ. The parents have apparently been found and arrested, caught hiding out in a warehouse. The mind struggles to comprehend what the parents were thinking when they got him a gun... like seriously!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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To live and rejoice in the antics of the little homicidal monster they created.
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That is a very scary thought friend, very scary!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I'm sure you know the parents are now in jail--where they belong--with their son. Details of news reports make it crystal clear that they could have
prevented this tragedy. Your poem is very well-written and certainly timely.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I'm sure you know the parents are now in jail--where they belong--with their son. Details of news reports make it crystal clear that they could have
prevented this tragedy. Your poem is very well-written and certainly timely.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Janice. It appears that in this case, justice may actually take place.
Comment from jenintorre
Wow! This is sensational. I love the concise style of writing.Your poem is straight to the point with no words wasted. Such a tragedy that should not have happened.
Best wishes. Jen.
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Wow! This is sensational. I love the concise style of writing.Your poem is straight to the point with no words wasted. Such a tragedy that should not have happened.
Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Jen. I wanted to make it rhyme, but I also wanted to hit home the seriousness of the theme.
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You did a good job
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The signs of being unstable should have been recognized in this case. Prayers are needed for the families who are involved. This case is active so I will not say too much, other than it is such a tragedy.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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The signs of being unstable should have been recognized in this case. Prayers are needed for the families who are involved. This case is active so I will not say too much, other than it is such a tragedy.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Rosemary. Your comments are welcome and appreciated.
Comment from Pantygynt
I heard of something like this on the radio this morning. The parents were charged with something I had never heard of before. I think it was 'involuntary manslaughter' because they had bought the gun. Dereliction of parental duty is what I would call it.
Weren't there more than one victim? If so that last line should read "victims' blood..." with the apostrophe after the 's'.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I heard of something like this on the radio this morning. The parents were charged with something I had never heard of before. I think it was 'involuntary manslaughter' because they had bought the gun. Dereliction of parental duty is what I would call it.
Weren't there more than one victim? If so that last line should read "victims' blood..." with the apostrophe after the 's'.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Of course you are correct, as usual. Yes this is a very sad statement on our gun happy society.
Comment from Kooky Clown
I liked this poem and the subject is so difficult to comprehend for me as we don't have the same problem with guns here in the UK thank goodness.
I still can't get my head round why anyone should want a gun. I don't know why people go shooting and call it fun. We have shoots here where birds are reared just so people can go out and shoot them for sport, I think this is horrible. But I liked you poem well done.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I liked this poem and the subject is so difficult to comprehend for me as we don't have the same problem with guns here in the UK thank goodness.
I still can't get my head round why anyone should want a gun. I don't know why people go shooting and call it fun. We have shoots here where birds are reared just so people can go out and shoot them for sport, I think this is horrible. But I liked you poem well done.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I did not know that you were not from the US. Your pen name sounds and seems so American.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This is soooooo good. A timely poem considering the attention to guns these days. I was impressed as I read through both the poem and author notes, for your center of attention was gun responsibility, not gun control.
Your poem was a creative expression of the horrific loss of life, not because of guns, but because of whose hands the gun is possessed by, particularly those having mental issues.
- Your first stanza was strong, expressing the lackadaisical attitude of the parents of the young killer;
- The second stanza expresses the devastating results and the same lackadaisical attitude of the teen (thanks to the parents);
- Your last line, along with the title, created the imagery needed for those that are dumb-witted and lackadaisical.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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This is soooooo good. A timely poem considering the attention to guns these days. I was impressed as I read through both the poem and author notes, for your center of attention was gun responsibility, not gun control.
Your poem was a creative expression of the horrific loss of life, not because of guns, but because of whose hands the gun is possessed by, particularly those having mental issues.
- Your first stanza was strong, expressing the lackadaisical attitude of the parents of the young killer;
- The second stanza expresses the devastating results and the same lackadaisical attitude of the teen (thanks to the parents);
- Your last line, along with the title, created the imagery needed for those that are dumb-witted and lackadaisical.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Wow! Thank you for a spot on description of my poem and its intended message.
Comment from Sugarray77
Well said, Nomi! I thought you did a superb job handling this theme within your rhyming verse. I also support gun responsibility!!! Your form is perfectly crafted and a good form for this one.
Melissa
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Well said, Nomi! I thought you did a superb job handling this theme within your rhyming verse. I also support gun responsibility!!! Your form is perfectly crafted and a good form for this one.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Melissa, you are appreciated.