Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

Sandra,
This story is full of suspense. I like the foreshadowing of the approaching storm. Your punctuation and grammar are really good. A suggestion to use 'more and more curious',
instead of curiouser and curiouser; an adjective with two or more syllables usually uses 'more' in front of it.
Your chapter is spelling, you've planted a few clues, and I can't wait to read more.
Blessings and hugs,
Good luck in the contest,
Cindy

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 Comment Written 18-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Cindy, for your lovely review. I'm so pleased you like the way it's going. What I love most about your review is you said my punctuation and grammar are really good, now that put a huge smile on my face. At the beginning of my novel-writing on here, I would have reams of errors pointed out! I must be taking it in now. Thank you my friend. I do appreciate you loads. :)) Sandra xx

The 'curiouser and curiouser' is more a phrase often used in UK English. It became famous with Lewis Carroll's 'Alice in Wonderland' back in 1865. I just love the sound of it. Basically, it's more like saying something is increasingly strange. I'll see how many think I should change it. I might have to change it. Thanks for mentioning it, though, it's always good to get people's thought on things. xxx

reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 18-Apr-2021

I stand corrected, Sandra. If it was used in a book, I would keep it for literary effect.
Have a wonderful Sunday
Hugs,
Cindy

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021

Thank you, Cindy, you, too! :)) xx