Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

Sandra:

I am always amazed at what some people will pay others to do for them, as in their dirty work, and the number of people willing to do anything for a price. It is indicative of the world we live in, isn't it? Seems like there will be more trouble ahead for Monica, Tania, and the men who love them.

Rdfrdmom2

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021

I know what you mean, but that is what it's like these days, as you rightly said. Thank you so much for this lovely review, there will be problems, but the girls have some excellent protection with these men. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hello Sandra, a close relationship taking place - and on a private island WOW! This is a chapter full of expectations. ' I expect the hours I've been sleeping in the hospital, and at home, has helped.' have helped!
''I'm glad to see you looking more revived this morning,' - you can't look MORE revived, revived is final. Perhaps something like '"I'm glad to see you looking more like your old self again" or similar. "This is the nearest place to paradise I've ever been." - I would drop the word 'place'. Regarding Jeff's suggestion to Monica - "A little thing like starting out on your own will be a doddle." - I would drop the '"A little thing like' - it trivializes the importance and difficulties encountered in starting out on
a new business. Just an opinion.
You covered a lot of ground in this chapter and it is a great read - looks like two romances now underway - Well done and warm regards, love Dorothy xxx

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021

Thank you so much for this really helpful review, Dorothy. I've taken on board your excellent sugestions and made the changes. I really appreciated that, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed this part. Yes, there will be two romances! :)) Warm hugs, and lots of love. Sandra xx

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Sandra just what I needed at 1245 am can't sleep ha ha so thought I would do an early morning FS look in
Your story is coming along with several angles now
Sorry I have not sent reviews but am keeping up
Good story
Cheers Chrisxx

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021

Hi, Chris, thank you so much for reading this part. I hate it when I find it hard to get to sleep. I clock watch and the time just stays still. I'm glad you came on and read this part, and that you are still reading the others. Have a wonderful day, my friend. I hope you can get to sleep soon! :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Sally Law

Exceptional

This chapter is fan and has it all: intrigue, mystery, romance and a steamy kiss. I'd say this is promising. Shadow is new to me and like the suspense that mysterious personal creates. He definitely has eyes. Superb, once again.
Sending you my best and six star fish from the Bahamas!
Sal XOs...

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021

Aw, thank you, Sally. Shadow, another of Grant's ex-SAS team, has just come onto the scene and will be a big help spying on Colin and his mother. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Romance is just what the doctor ordered when things get tough! lol. Thank you, my friend, for the lovely six stars. I really appreciated them. Sending you a warm hug, have a lovely week. :)) Sandra xx

reply by Sally Law on 29-Mar-2021

Thank you for catching me up with Shadow! How fun and covert this is! 00Sandra!! Blessings dear, Sal XOs...

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

I like your style of telling the story. It combines description of feelings, actions and conversations... It makes the reader easy to follow...

A suggestions opening a business shows the close relationship of two person. Perhaps this may lead to something in the future chapters...

I enjoy reading this chapter.

Thanks for sharing.



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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021

Thank you for reading this part, Chan, and for your lovely review. Jeff and Monica are getting closer, so it looks like a bit of romance is in the air!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-An excellent chapter, Sandra,
that shows us the situation
with Tania and Monica.
-It is nice to see Tania enjoying
her time in paradise, and Grant
is taking good care of her.
-But that doesn't mean there
isn't anything going on regarding
Colin and the trial, and with Monica.
-She is naturally concerned about both.
-I like the beginning of the second
section with Jeff and Monica.
-Their relationship is blossoming,
but there are also issues to deal with.
-I like how you introduce what these
are gradually, like talking about
having her own business, which
she has been considering for a while.
-The big punch comes with the picture
Jeff shows her.
-I don't think you want to mess with him;
he sounds creepier than Colin and
his mother together!
-The tension is building, and
Jeff is setting the plan in motion.
-It sounds like a big confrontation
is ahead, but I have a feeling
the Shadow and others are
going to be prepared!
-Well done, my friend.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021

Thank you so very much for this lovely review, and all the detail you have put into it. Yes, there is more going on that Jeff needs to find out about. I can't say anymore because that will give away what's in the next part!! Lol. Thank you for the six stars, my friend, I really appreciated them. Warm hugs, have a lovely day. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by Pam (respa) on 28-Mar-2021

You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and the review, Sandra. I am sure Jeff is going to have a big role, along with some of his cohorts, like the Shadow. Nothing like a bit of mystery!

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

I knew it! I knew it! Not just the brewing love affair, but that Colin's mom would try to get to Tania through Monica. Her life is probably in my jeopardy than her girlfriend at the moment because she's accessible - well, not if Jeff can help it, but -

Another fast-moving chapter leading to the "dirty deeds" lying in wait. Can't wait to see what our mystery man has in mind and how it will be foiled (or at least I hope).

Smiles to you, Sandra. Here's hoping you have a wonderful day. Smiles and hugs - Carol

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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Carol, for your lovely review. Monica has Jeff to watch over her for, and I think she'll enjoy his company!! lol. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx