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To Mary, With Need to Understand

A rhymed offering for these troubling times...

73 total reviews 
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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Diane,
It sounds as if your poor friend is living in pure terror. We keep masks by the door in case of unexpected company. How kind of you to think of your friend. Being thoughtful needs no apology so do not feel you committed an error.
Your poem is a personal apology to your frightened friend whose loneliness has contributed to her fear.
Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Hello Mary,
    My friend's daughters have impacted her level of fear.

    Thank you for your thoughtful review!
    diane
Comment from Ulla
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Diane, I'm shocked, and I'm saddened that it has come to this. I'm really thinking of what to say next. Not about your poem, which is wonderfully written, but about your friend's extreme behaviour. Fear can cause paralysing, I do know that, but normally that's in the short term. I say no more before I dig myself in too deep. I'm so sorry. Ulla xx

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Hello Ulla,
    Human nature, what it is, doesn't surprise me. Fear can really have a debilitating effect on people.

    Thank you for your thoughtful review!
    diane
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This is a timely poem about the fear that grips some of us. I have a neighbor who hasn't left the house in over a year. I appreciate the creativity of your poem and your commentary about the nature of fear. I also like the final stanza of your poem, "I'm sorry I stopped by today...And now I truly feel alone."
Lorraine

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Hello Lorraine!
    Emphasis on "some of us." I refuse to live in fear.
    So pleased you appreciated my presentation.

    Thank you!
    diane
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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To Mary, With Need to Understand
by Mrs. KT

Hello, Diane,

Excellent poem about loneliness and our pandemic crisis. I thank God every day that in 2018 I moved to live with my daughter, her husband, and baby. Before that I lived alone for 11 years. I can't imagine how my life would be shelters at home alone...I think God watches over me, even if I am not a perfect christian.

Well done my friend

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Hello Gypsy,
    Such chaotic and fearful times ...

    Thank you!
    diane
Comment from Susan Larson
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I will say your friend could have been a bit more gracious in her refusal to see you. However, I think the bigger point of your poem is the fear factor. Your author's note might very well work themselves into another poem.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    You are correct, Susan, when you write that "the bigger point of your poem is the fear factor." Fear is insidious. I refuse to live by its tenets...

    Thank you!
    diane
Comment from royowen
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Yes, indeed, people can be living in their minds and feeling unwelcome feelings and thoughts, and more importantly the damage those thoughts can have in a relationship. You have expressed this most eloquently Diane. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : "placed the flowers on (the) porche's floor" (you left out "the" definite article) flowers can be one syllable as in hour or bower.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Hello Roy!
    Much appreciation for your thoughtful review.
    Regarding "flowers:" I appreciate your suggestion; however,
    Flour is one syllable, flower is two. A syllable is the sound of a vowel that is created when pronouncing an A, E, I, O, U, or Y. Flour is pronounced: fl-ow-r. The O and U make one vowel sound, ow. The remaining sound is made by the R, which is not a vowel. Since there is only 1 vowel sound from the vowels "ou", there can be only 1 syllable in flour but two in flower.
    www.howmanysyllables.com/english_grammar/questions?

    "Flower" = Flow/er ... in Michigan, too! :)

    Thank you again!
    diane
reply by royowen on 08-Feb-2021
    Not in the recording studio Diane. The two syllables are drawn together. , I don?t think grammar sacrificed for meter is good, but so many do it.
Comment from Gloria ....
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Superb poem, Diane. You have gently illustrated the silent aspect of the virus that is parting friends, perhaps from fear alone, but the reason doesn't really matter because the outcome remains the same. It takes a big heart to live through these trying times, and not be damaged, but you have done just that and through the power of flowers, and in this case, daffodils that are so lovely.

It was my distinct pleasure to read and review your fine poem today. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Hello Gloria!
    I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
    I'll return with tulips the next time, but I'll phone first! :)

    Wishing you a beautiful week!
    Thank you!
    diane
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear diane, you have named it. This virus is not our enemy. It IS fear. I am so glad to see you quote from 'Life of Pi' by Yann Martel, because he says it so very well.
I am so sorry to hear about your friend Mary, we can only hope that she will read his post, and turn herself around.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Thank you, Suzanna,
    Fear is insidious.
    I refuse to entertain it these days...

    Take Care!
    Thank you!
    diane
Comment from Leann DS
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How terribly sad! I understand the fear that many people have regarding the COVID-19 virus, but it is heartbreaking the length they will go to try to protect themselves, relinquishing relationships and joy and normalcy. it is sad that you and your friend could not have enjoyed a few minutes together separated and masked, several feet apart outside on the porch or in the yard. That must've been crushing for you. For your friend also. Hugs.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Thank you, Leann!
    I'll return in a few weeks with tulips, but I'll phone first! :)

    Thank you!
    diane
reply by Leann DS on 10-Feb-2021
Comment from Poetofheart2013
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What a beautiful and
touching and sweet poem. Wonderful
heartwarming emotions
and feeling left me with
good feeling. I really
enjoyed reading it.
Keep up good work!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
    Hello Poetofheart2013!

    Much appreciation!
    Thank you!
    diane
reply by Poetofheart2013 on 07-Feb-2021