Comment from damommy

Exceptional

I really thought she had a chance for freedom. She should have hit him on the head, but she missed. I like this plan that Grant's thought up. Now, if he can come up with the right question.

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much my lovely American sister, for another wonderful review and the shiny stars. Once I've won the lottery, I'm coming for a visit and bringing some of Mildred's Cornish scones. :)) Grant's plan is almost ready, he's just got to find a good question. Thank you, my sweet friend, and sister. Love you lots. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by damommy on 17-Jan-2021

I pray you win the lottery, and I'd love some of Mildred's scones. What a pleasant thought. Love to you.

Comment from Mistydawn

Exceptional

I hope Grant comes up with an idea and I hope he does it fast before its too late.Your story is well-written, very interesting, suspenseful. You had me on the edge of my seat, cheering Tanya on, hoping she'd get away. I look forward to reading more.

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much for this amazing review and all the lovely stars, Misty. I'm so pleased you got into this part, I think you'll really enjoy the next one!! Sending you a warm hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by Mistydawn on 17-Jan-2021

I'm sure I will, I always do.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

I'm positive Grant can come up with the perfect question. He has too. I like the plan he's devised. I am very worried about Tania. I like this story.

I'm guessing we'll be nearby so that when he comes dashing out to his car, we'll be able to follow ... right?' (that is an extra word and not needed)

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much, dear Barbara, for the gift of those lovely stars, and the lovely review. I'll sort that word out, thank you for that as well. I don't know about Grant finding the question, but someone might. :)) lol. Have a lovely day, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

I'll keep a close watch on my rating when I review you this week!!

Comment from RetroStarfish

Excellent

This is a great, action packed chapter. I like how you balance the dramatic struggle between Tania and Colin, with the calculated planning by Grant and his crew. I especially like the ending.
You have some wonderful descriptive images here:
.It was as if a snake with needles attached to its underbelly had made its home in her hair.' And, '...the saltiness stinging her swollen eye.'
Sometimes, for my taste, there is a little too much of Tania trying to psych herself up.


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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so much for your lovely review, and pointing out what you liked. I'll take another look at the part with Tania and will tone it down a bit. Sometimes it's difficult to gauge it just right. Thanks again, have a nice day. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Exceptional

This is definitely a cliff-hanger Sandra. Poor Tania is taking a beating and suffering badly. Grant better come up with a viable query soon. You have Grant and team totally mystified.

Ralf

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much for those lovely stars, Ralf, and the wonderful review. He's working on the question as we 'chat'. LOL It's got to be a good one. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Pantygynt

Exceptional

Tremendous action sequence to open the post. It was well done and certainly deserved its warning triangle. The ending too was good leaving your readers to try and dream up a good query from him. An excellent post.

Some observations:
'I'm left to believe he's managed to get them from Tania.' - Would 'I'm expected to believe be better than 'left'? He doesn't believe it as we find out in the next paragraph but it is what Colin expects.

'He picked up a pen and began tapping it on the desk. The silence that followed hung heavily in the room as each man was wrapped up in his own thoughts.' - Good paragraph that builds the tension well.

'Which is fortunate.I don't want him to be...' Space needed after 'fortunate.''

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much, Jim! I was having palpitations while posting this one. I was sure I'd be told I'd gone to far, but so far it's been nicely received. You have really made my day with the six stars. :))
The part about... 'I'm left to believe he's managed to get them from Tania.' - Would 'I'm expected to believe be better than 'left'? ...
I used 'left' because Grant knows the only way Colin could have those plans is if he'd forced Tania to give them to him. Colin doesn't know Grant has met Tania ... yet. As I'm writing this, I can see what you are seeing as well. I'll have another look at it. Thank you, my wonderful friend. I'm so pleased you liked this part. Warmest hugs. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This Chapter 17 of the Fiction is very interestingly and expressively portrayed about a fight for a life thru a nice taletelling, forwarded by a balanced plot development, thru' realistic dialogues and ends with a curious ending; well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so much, ALCREATOR for another lovely review. I really appreciate you reading my work. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Ric Myworld

Exceptional

It's like getting my Sunday fix. Your smiling face on the page offers reassurance the ruthless kidnapping is only make believe. But it doesn't stop me from wanting to beat the heck out of Colin. :-) Thanks for sharing.

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Aw, Ric, you make me so happy! Thank you so much for this amazing review. You have no idea how my heart has been thumping wondering if I'd gone a bit OTT with this one. Thank you and a humongous hug for the six stars, but mostly for your lovely, warm words. Sending you lots of hugs, and love, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from BethShelby

Exceptional

Wow! This chapter is brutal. We put our characters through a lot of pain sometimes. The reader identifies with the character so completely that we almost feel the pain while reading. I'm hoping the plan Grant has concocted with be successful.

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thank you so very much, Beth! I've been worried about whether I'm gone too rough. You have really made my day, my friend!! Thank you so very much for this amazing review, and all those lovely stars. You are so very kind. Now I can breathe again! Lol. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx