Once Upon a Dream
A perfect illusion.49 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Life can be tough, to keep one's head up is pretty hard, and there are so many things that can "bug" us, but the chances are the good things are just around the corner. Beautifully written Monorhyme, you've done well, well done, blessings Roy
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Life can be tough, to keep one's head up is pretty hard, and there are so many things that can "bug" us, but the chances are the good things are just around the corner. Beautifully written Monorhyme, you've done well, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from AnnieDawn
This Mono Rhyme fits as all the lines rhyme nicely. It is a unique style and has blended well for the contest. It is nice to see some variations once in a while and this one was refreshing. Thanks for sharing.
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This Mono Rhyme fits as all the lines rhyme nicely. It is a unique style and has blended well for the contest. It is nice to see some variations once in a while and this one was refreshing. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Barry Childs
I love this and it's unique style. I found it very sad at the end, It was a clever twist. I do hope you come second in the competition. First is reserved! Stay safe and well.
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I love this and it's unique style. I found it very sad at the end, It was a clever twist. I do hope you come second in the competition. First is reserved! Stay safe and well.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Very poignant and touching poem, beautifully presented. Your Notes are also very well written and quite poetic!
Suggestions/spags:
I could only soley verbalize,
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I could only solely verbalize,
we were same team,
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we were on the same team,
Very dramatic, well conceived and expressed.
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Very poignant and touching poem, beautifully presented. Your Notes are also very well written and quite poetic!
Suggestions/spags:
I could only soley verbalize,
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I could only solely verbalize,
we were same team,
-->
we were on the same team,
Very dramatic, well conceived and expressed.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed this, although the rhyme is not exact (not sure if that matters). The disillusionment is complete, the world overturned, the feelings well expressed. Good wishes for the contest.
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I enjoyed this, although the rhyme is not exact (not sure if that matters). The disillusionment is complete, the world overturned, the feelings well expressed. Good wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I am amazed to read this form of poetry. I am not a poet and have not come across so many forms available on this site.
I enjoyed reading the poem on dreams. simple words. Smooth flowing. All I can say is that it is never too late to set another goal or to dream a new dream. Good luck in the contest!
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I am amazed to read this form of poetry. I am not a poet and have not come across so many forms available on this site.
I enjoyed reading the poem on dreams. simple words. Smooth flowing. All I can say is that it is never too late to set another goal or to dream a new dream. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written monorhyme poem about the illusion of happiness can hold us captive like in a dream until we realize all is not the way it seems, and we wake up to be devastated and heart broken.
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A very well-written monorhyme poem about the illusion of happiness can hold us captive like in a dream until we realize all is not the way it seems, and we wake up to be devastated and heart broken.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Alli Johnston
This poem makes me wish I had been more interested in poetry at a younger age. Work like this would have helped me through such awful heartbreak. Beautiful work, best of luck in the contest
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This poem makes me wish I had been more interested in poetry at a younger age. Work like this would have helped me through such awful heartbreak. Beautiful work, best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love the repetition of this illusion, and it acts as an enchanting refrain: "
Why did you flee? My heart screams.
Now I see you will only exist once upon a dream." Thank you for sharing, and good luck with the contest.
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I love the repetition of this illusion, and it acts as an enchanting refrain: "
Why did you flee? My heart screams.
Now I see you will only exist once upon a dream." Thank you for sharing, and good luck with the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
