To Mend This Broken Land
A Shakespearean sonnet for these times ...54 total reviews
Comment from sammielwf
Diane,
I got up this morning and while having a quiet cup of coffee, with my wife...with our two Springers curled up at our feet.
I opened up my Fan Story page to see that you had this new writing posted.
My wife and I read it together and we found ourselves in strong agreement.
Fear, darkness, rage, thoughts of what divides us,
makes us different, and lack of personal trust in mankind and in government.....need to be defused by diplomacy.....talking.....sharing....listening.
We loved To Mend This Broken Land....
and you have my first sixer on this glorious Sunday.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Diane,
I got up this morning and while having a quiet cup of coffee, with my wife...with our two Springers curled up at our feet.
I opened up my Fan Story page to see that you had this new writing posted.
My wife and I read it together and we found ourselves in strong agreement.
Fear, darkness, rage, thoughts of what divides us,
makes us different, and lack of personal trust in mankind and in government.....need to be defused by diplomacy.....talking.....sharing....listening.
We loved To Mend This Broken Land....
and you have my first sixer on this glorious Sunday.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Sammielwf! (I just now realized that your moniker = Sammiel and wife! Yes?)
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
So very pleased my words resonated with you and your wife and you did not find them trite or maudlin.
Such unsettling times...
Wishing you a beautiful week!
Thank you!
diane
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Diane,
Good guess as to the Sammielwf moniker-but nope...that's not it. I like that story line and when I share this with Terry- she will say...okay let's roll with that!
However- since so many Fan Story reviews have asked what the sammielwf stands for- I should write a tale about it. The actual story is quite amusing and would definitely get a laugh or two..
Sammielwf
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Hah!
Looking forward to it!
Take Care!
diane
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
What an exceptional poem!! I really like what you've expressed as well as the expert way you've stayed within the sonnet guidelines.
I really like the last two lines: "With hope renewed, I'll offer you my hand. With trust regained, we'll mend this broken land."
Thank you for writing such an outstanding piece!
Susan
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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What an exceptional poem!! I really like what you've expressed as well as the expert way you've stayed within the sonnet guidelines.
I really like the last two lines: "With hope renewed, I'll offer you my hand. With trust regained, we'll mend this broken land."
Thank you for writing such an outstanding piece!
Susan
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Susan,
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
So very pleased my words resonated with you!
Such unsettling times; I truly wish I had the power to stem the rancor and division...
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Dawn Munro
The Shakespearean sonnet is one of my favorite formats for poetry, and I've read no finer use of it than this -- your volta makes me shudder, although understanding is truly what might help the world to heal.
In my experience though, 'breaking the dark rancor's grip' is an impossibility, at least for any human.
Stunning poem!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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The Shakespearean sonnet is one of my favorite formats for poetry, and I've read no finer use of it than this -- your volta makes me shudder, although understanding is truly what might help the world to heal.
In my experience though, 'breaking the dark rancor's grip' is an impossibility, at least for any human.
Stunning poem!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Good Morning, Dawn!
I am so very honored by your exceptional rating and bookmarking of my offering.
Such unsettling times.
I truly do wish to understand, and most of all, heal...
Thank you!
Wishing you a beautiful week!
diane
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Thank you -- I hope you have a wonderful week too. It was very much my pleasure!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Unfortunately this seems to be the political climate paguing most countries! You have expressed it so very well in a heart-wrenching way. Indeed a very well written poem. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Unfortunately this seems to be the political climate paguing most countries! You have expressed it so very well in a heart-wrenching way. Indeed a very well written poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Seshadri!
So very pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Colin John
Hi, a very heartwarming poem and very well written about the present political situation in the USA, and the continuing conflict between the two sides. Women as well make up part of this confusion not just men, Harris and Pelosi come to mind when at the previous elevation never accepted the result, doubt they would want to hold anyone's hand except their own. Cheers Colin
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hi, a very heartwarming poem and very well written about the present political situation in the USA, and the continuing conflict between the two sides. Women as well make up part of this confusion not just men, Harris and Pelosi come to mind when at the previous elevation never accepted the result, doubt they would want to hold anyone's hand except their own. Cheers Colin
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Colin,
Thank you for stopping by.
I wouldn't classify my sonnet as being "heartwarming," but that's an interesting perspective.
Thank you!
diane
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A call for togetherness then, it was excellent.
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Sounds good to me, Colin!
Take Care!
diane
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And you Diane.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I read this one aloud, Diane. Your meter is perfect. My favorite line is
"If only I could walk with you a piece"
Everyone has good in them. You have to truly believe that. Then, your heart opens up to their perspective and that walk helps to dispel misunderstanding.
This land is so broken. Your poem offers hope.
Just a note--is there supposed to be a photo in the bottom right hand corner? Mine just has a blank square.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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I read this one aloud, Diane. Your meter is perfect. My favorite line is
"If only I could walk with you a piece"
Everyone has good in them. You have to truly believe that. Then, your heart opens up to their perspective and that walk helps to dispel misunderstanding.
This land is so broken. Your poem offers hope.
Just a note--is there supposed to be a photo in the bottom right hand corner? Mine just has a blank square.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Good Morning, dear Debbie!
So pleased my words resonated with you.
Did a bit of editing just now ...
I am sorry the bottom photograph does not appear on your computer; it does on mine - and on my iPhone.
Wishing you a beautiful Sunday!
Thank you!
diane
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This happened once before with my computer. There were times that I could not see Fan Story artwork. I changed from Safari to Chrome and that fixed my problem. Wish my tech son-in-law was coming for Thanksgiving.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
The picture held my heart as I read this heartfelt poem, full of hope and faith that someday we can bring it together. Excellently done rhyme and flow for the sonnet contest
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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The picture held my heart as I read this heartfelt poem, full of hope and faith that someday we can bring it together. Excellently done rhyme and flow for the sonnet contest
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Barb,
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
And Happy Thanksgiving!
diane
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an interesting piece, because the subject matter is unusual in the sonnet form. The poem is well written, but I would like to see spaces in between the stanzas.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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This is an interesting piece, because the subject matter is unusual in the sonnet form. The poem is well written, but I would like to see spaces in between the stanzas.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Susan,
Thank you for stopping by.
Sonnets usually deal with unrequited love, etc, but they can also deal with themes of social concern.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a plea for unity in a very troubled, and divided America. We watch as your country fights it out between the two presidents, one won't leave, the other is waiting. Our country isn't much better, I sometimes wonder if they know what they're doing.
You've penned a lovely sonnet, Diane, with a message all ought to heed. I think it should do very well in the contest. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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This is a plea for unity in a very troubled, and divided America. We watch as your country fights it out between the two presidents, one won't leave, the other is waiting. Our country isn't much better, I sometimes wonder if they know what they're doing.
You've penned a lovely sonnet, Diane, with a message all ought to heed. I think it should do very well in the contest. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Sandra,
I am pleased my offering resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about the current situation in the world where there exist no trust between fellow men. Some are not honest in what they do and blame the ones who find the truth.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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A very well-written sonnet about the current situation in the world where there exist no trust between fellow men. Some are not honest in what they do and blame the ones who find the truth.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello Sandra!
Much appreciation!
Thank you!
diane
