Betrayal
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Comment from BethShelby
This sound like a great story and I know you are an excellent writer so I'll try to keep up with this one as you post it. I'll try to go back and read the two chapters I missed. Looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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This sound like a great story and I know you are an excellent writer so I'll try to keep up with this one as you post it. I'll try to go back and read the two chapters I missed. Looking forward to more.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, Beth! I would love it if you would the other two parts, but I'd love it more if you would follow the story as and when you can. I'm so pleased you enjoyed what you read. Sending you a warm hug, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from tfawcus
Presuming the toe-rag-ex, Colin, is one and the same as Grant's unscrupulous half-brother, you've lit the fuse to ignite some spectacular fireworks.
Some of my reading on this site is more out of a sense of duty than pleasure, but that's certainly not the case here. Can't wait for the next instalment!
Three things to check:
I don't think 'cheer-up' has a hyphen
I'm pretty sure that a Chinese take-away has a capital letter
I think you need more than a comma here... "It was a good act, she'd even managed to turn on the water-works. "
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Presuming the toe-rag-ex, Colin, is one and the same as Grant's unscrupulous half-brother, you've lit the fuse to ignite some spectacular fireworks.
Some of my reading on this site is more out of a sense of duty than pleasure, but that's certainly not the case here. Can't wait for the next instalment!
Three things to check:
I don't think 'cheer-up' has a hyphen
I'm pretty sure that a Chinese take-away has a capital letter
I think you need more than a comma here... "It was a good act, she'd even managed to turn on the water-works. "
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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What a lovely compliment, Tony, thank you so much. Two of the three points you picked up on, I wasn't sure of, the hyphen, and the capital letter for the Chinese take-away. The third point was an awful run-on! Thank you so much for pointing each of those out, I'm going to change them right away.
I'm so pleased you are enjoying this story, those six stars are a bonus on top of all your lovely comments, thank you, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from lyenochka
You did a terrific job with portraying Tania's justified rage. And how good it is that she has a friend like Monica to support and direct her thinking to investigate how this happened. It seems that Grant's half-brother was Tania's ex-boyfriend? I hope they can get proof soon!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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You did a terrific job with portraying Tania's justified rage. And how good it is that she has a friend like Monica to support and direct her thinking to investigate how this happened. It seems that Grant's half-brother was Tania's ex-boyfriend? I hope they can get proof soon!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Helen, that is so nice of you to say that. It's hard to get the temper angle just right. Your words are very encouraging. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my new book. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from RShipp
Lorna silently agreed. What she had just witnessed convinced her that Tania was not a thief. 'Shall I get Margaret to send the next applicant in?' (I am surprised that Lorna is in the girl's corner. I hadn't expected that.)
'The rotten swine! After all the work you put into this, I've a good mind to go and give that ego-inflated, blockhead, a piece of my mind!' Monica, sat with a comforting arm draped... (Just what a consoling friend would do and say.)
The 'ex' is a great twist!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Lorna silently agreed. What she had just witnessed convinced her that Tania was not a thief. 'Shall I get Margaret to send the next applicant in?' (I am surprised that Lorna is in the girl's corner. I hadn't expected that.)
'The rotten swine! After all the work you put into this, I've a good mind to go and give that ego-inflated, blockhead, a piece of my mind!' Monica, sat with a comforting arm draped... (Just what a consoling friend would do and say.)
The 'ex' is a great twist!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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You will soon learn why Lorna is silently backing Tania. Nuf said!
Thank you for yet another wonderful review, my friend. Now you are all caught up. I'm so pleased you are enjoying my new book, thank you for your support, it means a lot. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
A brilliant start to this new story of yours Sandra, this is a wonderful start to this story, obviously Grant's half brother is a thief and a deceiver, and poor Tania is deeply hurt by the interview, that she's completely confused by the whole thing. But I'm sure that's as far as it goes. Wonderful story, Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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A brilliant start to this new story of yours Sandra, this is a wonderful start to this story, obviously Grant's half brother is a thief and a deceiver, and poor Tania is deeply hurt by the interview, that she's completely confused by the whole thing. But I'm sure that's as far as it goes. Wonderful story, Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments about this chapter, Roy, I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading it. She has Monica. She'll help her sort this out. Warm hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra. xxx
Comment from l.raven
HI Sandra, well either she's was married to Grants brother...and Grant never met her...and he stole her work...or the ex has been selling her work around town as his own...slimeball...
but Grant was out of line...he should've checked things out before accusing her of anything...
had it been me...I would've said...hey dickhead...and I mean that from the size of your balls saying I would steal someone else's work...then I would have walk out...I can get a little testy sometimes...
well lets see how long it takes Grant to contact Tania...or to figure out how long he should continue wearing a condom...
this is so far my best chapter...not that I don't love them all...very well written my amazing friend...awesome story...truly keeps you interested...bring it on sweet girl...bunches of love coming your way...Linda xxoo
say hi to Ian for me...and Graham too...xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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HI Sandra, well either she's was married to Grants brother...and Grant never met her...and he stole her work...or the ex has been selling her work around town as his own...slimeball...
but Grant was out of line...he should've checked things out before accusing her of anything...
had it been me...I would've said...hey dickhead...and I mean that from the size of your balls saying I would steal someone else's work...then I would have walk out...I can get a little testy sometimes...
well lets see how long it takes Grant to contact Tania...or to figure out how long he should continue wearing a condom...
this is so far my best chapter...not that I don't love them all...very well written my amazing friend...awesome story...truly keeps you interested...bring it on sweet girl...bunches of love coming your way...Linda xxoo
say hi to Ian for me...and Graham too...xxoo
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
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LOL, My wonderful Linda, you are so funny! Tania and Grant have more to say to each other, and there is no giving way on either side. Thank you so much for this amazing review, I'm over the moon you thought it was a good chapter. I've only just managed to read it all in one go! The other times, I was just falling about laughing. I can't help but love my sweet American friend. You are amazing. Thank you so much for the six stars, I wish I could give you a six for the review. Sending you loads of hugs and love, my friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
Remember me to my hero Nero, and hugs to you all. xxxx
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can't wait to hear what Grant has to say...and just your replies are all I need beautiful girl...this is the chapter that makes every one want to know what happen ???...OK!!! until next time...sending bigger hugs back at you...much love...and a great big smile...I will tell him...Linda xxoo
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Sandra, the plot is thickening, but where it's going is still anyone's guess. Something is definitely amiss. Good job that Tania has a good friend in Monica. It's well written, but for now I'm just following along seeing where you are taking us. Well done, my friend. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Awe, Sandra, the plot is thickening, but where it's going is still anyone's guess. Something is definitely amiss. Good job that Tania has a good friend in Monica. It's well written, but for now I'm just following along seeing where you are taking us. Well done, my friend. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you, dear Ulla, for all those stars, and another of your wonderful reviews. I really appreciate all your support. You're a good friend. Warm hugs! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The pieces ar coming together. I really really like this story and I can't wait to see how Grant settles this issue with is half-brother, who by the way, is a scoundral. And that's being nice. I really am enjoying reading this. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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The pieces ar coming together. I really really like this story and I can't wait to see how Grant settles this issue with is half-brother, who by the way, is a scoundral. And that's being nice. I really am enjoying reading this. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you so very much for the six lovely stars, and the fabulous review, Barbara. There are a few surprises coming ... for someone. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Pantygynt
You have the makings of a great plot here. Plots are my Achilles heel. I get at them through my characters, eventually. You seem to be able to dream them up from nowhere. This was a great chapter. And there is the significance of that corner that got torn off. I wonder where that will lead.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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You have the makings of a great plot here. Plots are my Achilles heel. I get at them through my characters, eventually. You seem to be able to dream them up from nowhere. This was a great chapter. And there is the significance of that corner that got torn off. I wonder where that will lead.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the six stars, Jim, you've made my day. I'm up to chapter 22, and as I get to a certain point and realise I need something to be shown in the earlier chapters, I can go back and slip it in. It's the first time I've done it this way. So I'm keeping my fingers crossed. Thank you for that very complimentary review, my friend. I think your characters are doing very well with the plot. Don't for one minute forget who allows those characters to come up with those plots, though. You are excellent at it, my friend. Thanks again for this lovely review. Warm hugs. Sandra xx
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
I do believe this is going to be one of your best books, Sandra. A mystery in a love story. Grant is notably attracted to Tania and is shocked that she would take credit for another's work. Grant was shocked at her reaction. Well done, Sandra. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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I do believe this is going to be one of your best books, Sandra. A mystery in a love story. Grant is notably attracted to Tania and is shocked that she would take credit for another's work. Grant was shocked at her reaction. Well done, Sandra. Nancy:)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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What a lovely thing to say, Nancy, thank you so much. I'm so pleased you are enjoying this book. It was a challenge to write something totally different. I'm sending you a humongous hug for the six stars, dear friend, and the lovely review. Lots of love, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx