Poems from a Pensive Poet
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Comment from Sankey
This was a wonderful poem and I hope a lot of folks read it and I am sure it will go well for the contest. I found a couple of places you might want to fix. to read a fav'(r)ite book.
I found the peace I('d) known before,
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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This was a wonderful poem and I hope a lot of folks read it and I am sure it will go well for the contest. I found a couple of places you might want to fix. to read a fav'(r)ite book.
I found the peace I('d) known before,
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review. I'm glad you noticed the two spags. I really appreciate the lovely six stars.
Beth There are couple of chapters on my book you haven't reead but one has already stopped. The last one I put on today.
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OK will look.Tom is so unfair with the lack of notifications.
Comment from Cass Carlton
This is a highly commended effort deserving of a six
It is unpretentious with short verses summing up a revisit to childhood with all the sweet, innocent thoughts and memories of her grandparents and the part they played in her life. The rhythm and rhyme scheme ae not exact, but it doesn't detract from the piece at all. A charming read. Well written with a reminder that most mental problems can be countered with a dip into the years of childhood and its peace. Well done cheers Cass
favorite book. there is room within the rhyme scheme to use this word fully without abbreviating it
I stroked him gently.
there is an "r" missing from stroked
Id found the peace I've known before
Only a suggestion buthow do you feel about changing this line to" I've learned to leave all cares behind"
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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This is a highly commended effort deserving of a six
It is unpretentious with short verses summing up a revisit to childhood with all the sweet, innocent thoughts and memories of her grandparents and the part they played in her life. The rhythm and rhyme scheme ae not exact, but it doesn't detract from the piece at all. A charming read. Well written with a reminder that most mental problems can be countered with a dip into the years of childhood and its peace. Well done cheers Cass
favorite book. there is room within the rhyme scheme to use this word fully without abbreviating it
I stroked him gently.
there is an "r" missing from stroked
Id found the peace I've known before
Only a suggestion buthow do you feel about changing this line to" I've learned to leave all cares behind"
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and comment and suggestions and for seeing the error. I like the suggestion for the line so I changed it. I really appreciate the six stars.
Beth
Comment from lancellot
Okay, I guess if I enter this contest, I will be trying win second place, because you've taken the number one spot, and you did it before you kissed the morning dew.
I am thoroughly impressed. I found myself smiling as I read, while wondering can she keep this perfection up. And you did.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Okay, I guess if I enter this contest, I will be trying win second place, because you've taken the number one spot, and you did it before you kissed the morning dew.
I am thoroughly impressed. I found myself smiling as I read, while wondering can she keep this perfection up. And you did.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Wow! That is high praise. It really appreciate the review. I enjoyed remembering all the things I enjoyed growing up. It's hard to win those contest where the committee does the voting.
Beth I really appreciate the six stars.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(pintafore s/b pinafore) Delightful--thankssssss for taking me on this wonderful trip--flows beautifully in fine rhyme--rife with fresh imagery. Cheerssssss. LIZ
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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(pintafore s/b pinafore) Delightful--thankssssss for taking me on this wonderful trip--flows beautifully in fine rhyme--rife with fresh imagery. Cheerssssss. LIZ
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the beautiful stars. I hope I managed to get it promoted before you read it. The first two in read it got on 2 cents. I love you comments.
Beth
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I didn't even notice the payrate--it doesn't matter if the story is good!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
How true these words are! This is a great and powerful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest writing prompt. I hope this poem does well in the contest. I enjoyed it so much. Great good luck to you!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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How true these words are! This is a great and powerful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest writing prompt. I hope this poem does well in the contest. I enjoyed it so much. Great good luck to you!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review. I got delayed in getting it promoted. I'm sorry it wasn't worth anything when you read it.
I'm thrilled with the stars,
Beth
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from Ben Colder
Enjoyed this poem. You bring to life the days I can also remember and it is good to think when peace was at our finger tips.
Well done and I hope do well in the contest. You have my vote. Out of six
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Enjoyed this poem. You bring to life the days I can also remember and it is good to think when peace was at our finger tips.
Well done and I hope do well in the contest. You have my vote. Out of six
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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I can't see to promote this thing. You reading to quick. I can't seem to get it up on th charts.
Beth
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I was on my way off this thing when I saw your write come across and decided to review it before calling it a night.
Hope you win the contest.
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I was trying to get this promoted but my computer was giving me fits. I do appreciate what you said about it. Beth
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Thank you for the good wishes. This is one the committee votes on. It is hard to win those.
Beth