Resplendent rays
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 nature poem about the sun rays early morning bring a special radiance to the flowers that seem to make them dance in the warm morning light.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 nature poem about the sun rays early morning bring a special radiance to the flowers that seem to make them dance in the warm morning light.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Sandra, thank you, these are never my strong suit.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your words fit smoothly with the beautiful image, Mystery Author. That image looks to be a forsythia to me. Great job with the contest prompt. Your syllable count is correct per line. Your message brings much hope at this scry time worldwide. Yes, the sun rising is the start of a new day and hopefully all will be better than the day before. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Your words fit smoothly with the beautiful image, Mystery Author. That image looks to be a forsythia to me. Great job with the contest prompt. Your syllable count is correct per line. Your message brings much hope at this scry time worldwide. Yes, the sun rising is the start of a new day and hopefully all will be better than the day before. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Jan, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Author,
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with very nice imagery of the nature.
Haiku normally doesn't is capitals other than proper nouns,
has only two grammatically connected lines, and doesn't use personification.
Example below:
bright sun rose today
with resplendent golden rays--
yellow flowers bloom
The choice is always yours.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Hello Author,
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with very nice imagery of the nature.
Haiku normally doesn't is capitals other than proper nouns,
has only two grammatically connected lines, and doesn't use personification.
Example below:
bright sun rose today
with resplendent golden rays--
yellow flowers bloom
The choice is always yours.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Robert, thank you, I learned something new today...I dropped the caps.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a short and sweet Haiku and an excellent contest entry. Your words are well chosen and the picture of flowers is an ideal complement to the poem. Thanks for sharing this one.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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This is a short and sweet Haiku and an excellent contest entry. Your words are well chosen and the picture of flowers is an ideal complement to the poem. Thanks for sharing this one.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Susan, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from zanya
A wonderful Nature 5-7-5 to cheer our hearts and raise our spirit s - a lovely moment in the natural world - perhaps we are even more aware of such moments now
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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A wonderful Nature 5-7-5 to cheer our hearts and raise our spirit s - a lovely moment in the natural world - perhaps we are even more aware of such moments now
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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zanya, I thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from richie b
Your poem gives imagery to a beautiful morning. Flowers
dance as all of nature responds to the energy of the sun.
Your haiku is light and refreshing.
Peace,
Richie b.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Your poem gives imagery to a beautiful morning. Flowers
dance as all of nature responds to the energy of the sun.
Your haiku is light and refreshing.
Peace,
Richie b.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Richie, I do thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Enoima Okon
Impressive! Did you noticed your beautifully use of words? You called the sun 'our' (giving it the human family), you tagged it as 'golden' (and usually,the colour of the sun is golden), the use of resplendent ( bright and beautiful) and 'ray'(bright too). With all these features of the sun, the flowers couldn't help but dance ( rejoicing) cos it's gonna come out more beautiful. I love every detail.
Eno
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Impressive! Did you noticed your beautifully use of words? You called the sun 'our' (giving it the human family), you tagged it as 'golden' (and usually,the colour of the sun is golden), the use of resplendent ( bright and beautiful) and 'ray'(bright too). With all these features of the sun, the flowers couldn't help but dance ( rejoicing) cos it's gonna come out more beautiful. I love every detail.
Eno
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Eno, I am very appreciative of your reading eye and attention to the selected words.
Comment from RodG
What is a more splendid way to start the day but SUNSHINE on flowers. "Resplendent" is a great choice of words, an adjective I don't see very often .I also like how you personified the flowers dancing. Rod
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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What is a more splendid way to start the day but SUNSHINE on flowers. "Resplendent" is a great choice of words, an adjective I don't see very often .I also like how you personified the flowers dancing. Rod
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Rod, thank you very much. I delight that the word selection resonated for you.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like the association of property upon the celestial body - our sun - that makes the plants grow under its blessing rays. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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I like the association of property upon the celestial body - our sun - that makes the plants grow under its blessing rays. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Iza, thank you, you caught the subtle nuance I intended. Very cool.
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You are welcome and good luck with the contest.
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You are welcome and good luck with the contest.
Comment from samandlancelot
I love the flowers' response to the rising sun with resplendent golden rays. No matter their style of dance, I love that they're dancing.
Excellent entry for the Nature 5-7-5 contest.
Patricia
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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I love the flowers' response to the rising sun with resplendent golden rays. No matter their style of dance, I love that they're dancing.
Excellent entry for the Nature 5-7-5 contest.
Patricia
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Patricia, I am so pleased that you found the poem worked for you.. thank you!