The Ides of March
The taming of the lion, the lamb springs forth45 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
This is a lovely even the odds poem. I love the line prancing forward from under winter's clutch. The metaphors in this poem are amazing. You also chose a beautiful image to complement your writing. Best luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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This is a lovely even the odds poem. I love the line prancing forward from under winter's clutch. The metaphors in this poem are amazing. You also chose a beautiful image to complement your writing. Best luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Therese, thank you so much for the validation!
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Oh, how clever. What a great way to use the old adage, "March comes in like a lion and goes out like a lamb." Why don't we have a similar saying for September, transitioning from summer to fall, I wonder? Good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Oh, how clever. What a great way to use the old adage, "March comes in like a lion and goes out like a lamb." Why don't we have a similar saying for September, transitioning from summer to fall, I wonder? Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Smiling back! Thank you for the review and comments.
Comment from June Sargent
Well, you certainly made it look easy - this format can be quite challenging. You've done a great job of describing the changing of the seasons seamlessly. And the artwork is perfect. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Well, you certainly made it look easy - this format can be quite challenging. You've done a great job of describing the changing of the seasons seamlessly. And the artwork is perfect. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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June, as always, I do thank you!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
I so enjoyed reading your Even-the-Odds poetic offering. You have captured the month of March creatively.
However, the form requires that the first word and the last word are to be synonyms. "Robust" and "on" are not synonyms.
Bringing this to your attention now, as you will be disqualified from the contest if your poem is not edited.
Hoping that I have not offended. Please let me know when you have edited the synonyms and I will readjust the rating!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Hello Mystery Writer,
I so enjoyed reading your Even-the-Odds poetic offering. You have captured the month of March creatively.
However, the form requires that the first word and the last word are to be synonyms. "Robust" and "on" are not synonyms.
Bringing this to your attention now, as you will be disqualified from the contest if your poem is not edited.
Hoping that I have not offended. Please let me know when you have edited the synonyms and I will readjust the rating!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Okay I'm a bit daft synonymy of what?
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Hello!
So... your first word is "Robust." Your last word -at the end of your poem = "on." Those two words are not "synonyms"= words that mean the same.
If you look in the example, "Fairies" begins the poem, and "Sprites" ends it.
In your poem Robust would work, if for example, you ended it with "strong" as strong is a synonym for robust.
I just now looked at your new edit, and Big cat and purrs are not synonyms. A big cat can purr, but purrs is not the same thing as "big cat."
diane
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Good Morning!
"Bounding" and "hop" work well!
Best Wishes!
diane
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It certainly took your kind guidance to get through the Irish thick skull of mine :) I do so appreciate your honest efforts to assist, Hugs Back!
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My pleasure!
I was so afraid I had offended.
This format is tricky!
Best wishes!
diane
Comment from Mr.write_4u
That's a great job. I think I'm going to try and tackle this one as well. I like how yours reads. I do believe though, that the first and last lines are supposed to be synonyms. Good luck with this poem.
Happy writing,
Larry
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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That's a great job. I think I'm going to try and tackle this one as well. I like how yours reads. I do believe though, that the first and last lines are supposed to be synonyms. Good luck with this poem.
Happy writing,
Larry
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Correcting action being implemented.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A great image that's
perfect for the contest.
-The syllable count is good,
and the imagery is effective.
-A good word choice in the beginning.
-There is a lot to like in your
poem, like "gales of March" and
"prancing forward....winter's clutch."
-A good ending with the lion and lamb.
-A very good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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-A great image that's
perfect for the contest.
-The syllable count is good,
and the imagery is effective.
-A good word choice in the beginning.
-There is a lot to like in your
poem, like "gales of March" and
"prancing forward....winter's clutch."
-A good ending with the lion and lamb.
-A very good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Oh! thank you so much! I learned something vital here, Big cat purrs done.
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You are quite welcome, and I am glad it was helpful.
Comment from Bill Schott
This even and odd poem, The Ides of March, works the syllable requirement and presents a hardy leap of spring from the winter harshness to the relatively mild demeanor we enjoy. Nice.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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This even and odd poem, The Ides of March, works the syllable requirement and presents a hardy leap of spring from the winter harshness to the relatively mild demeanor we enjoy. Nice.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Bill thanks, however, but a big gaffe on my part has been corrected
Comment from Natalie Goodwin
This is a beautiful poem. I especially liked the lines "The lion is tamed,
The lamb leaps on." I also liked the description of March as an "intruder
of the stillness bespoke of Spring prancing forward from under winter's clutch." You also did well with the syllable count pattern. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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This is a beautiful poem. I especially liked the lines "The lion is tamed,
The lamb leaps on." I also liked the description of March as an "intruder
of the stillness bespoke of Spring prancing forward from under winter's clutch." You also did well with the syllable count pattern. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Natalie, thanks however,but a big gaffe on my part has been corrected
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like this visual :"The lion is tamed,
The lamb leaps
on!" it's expressing the joy and playfulness of the new season. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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I like this visual :"The lion is tamed,
The lamb leaps
on!" it's expressing the joy and playfulness of the new season. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Iza, thanks, however a big gaffe on my part has been corrected
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Ides of March is a fine entry for the even the odds lion and lamb contest. The syllable count is right. The presentation is nice. The meaning as I understand it is sometimes bad people pretends to be nice. Good job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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The Ides of March is a fine entry for the even the odds lion and lamb contest. The syllable count is right. The presentation is nice. The meaning as I understand it is sometimes bad people pretends to be nice. Good job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Gyspy, thank you,