Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Till Death Do Us Part -Chapter 7"A Wartime Romance
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Comment from Sheridan1
You are having a good time bringing back the sixties with its ups and downs.
Little things: Would Cathy notice the price of gas, or would Gramps say it's gone up or down? Or does she notice because she is worried about $$?
Some of the dialogue sounds like real people talking. Some sounds stilted. We often talk more simply, without explaining and then expand if someone asks for detail. We don't speak like we write, unless we are being extremely careful. Billy's story is a young person's story - and an exciting one - but are the words magnificent? Perhaps let the reader know this is Cathy's opinion.
The stories of this era are important and this chapter is a glimpse into that time - of the war that many people have forgotten. Glad you are working on this!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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You are having a good time bringing back the sixties with its ups and downs.
Little things: Would Cathy notice the price of gas, or would Gramps say it's gone up or down? Or does she notice because she is worried about $$?
Some of the dialogue sounds like real people talking. Some sounds stilted. We often talk more simply, without explaining and then expand if someone asks for detail. We don't speak like we write, unless we are being extremely careful. Billy's story is a young person's story - and an exciting one - but are the words magnificent? Perhaps let the reader know this is Cathy's opinion.
The stories of this era are important and this chapter is a glimpse into that time - of the war that many people have forgotten. Glad you are working on this!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 7 of Love Long Distance. We appreciate your comments here. Your suggestion about the gas mention was a good one, and it has been expounded on a bit. As for the others, Cathy does express some thoughts about Bill's childhood writing. We feel that is enough. Also, yes, they do all talk that way! Again, though, we thank you for the suggestions and hope you continue to follow along. Chapter 8 is already in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is just a beautifully written story. It draws the reader deep into the heart of each character and holds then utterly captive from start to finish. The addition of the prose and poetic writing throughout is probably the one of the most innovative ways I have seen to develop characters into something more than simple descriptive phrases - it makes them come to life. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it with me.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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This is just a beautifully written story. It draws the reader deep into the heart of each character and holds then utterly captive from start to finish. The addition of the prose and poetic writing throughout is probably the one of the most innovative ways I have seen to develop characters into something more than simple descriptive phrases - it makes them come to life. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it with me.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Hi Monica!
Such an AWESOME 6-star rating and review! THANK YOU SO MUCH! We are HONORED! So glad you enjoyed Chapter 7 of Love Long Distance and find it beautiful. Also, that the characters have come to life for you. HURRAH! Wishing you a wonderful day! Chapter 8 is in the works and coming soon.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
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My pleasure! I can't wait so hurry on up you two LOL.
Comment from Joyce Crowe
very well written. good character development. I love Grandpa. The events flow smoothly and I felt very connected to the characters.You have us good descriptive details. there is also good connection betweneent the characters and the events in the story.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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very well written. good character development. I love Grandpa. The events flow smoothly and I felt very connected to the characters.You have us good descriptive details. there is also good connection betweneent the characters and the events in the story.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Hi Joyce!
We love Grandpa too! Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME 6-star rating and review. We are HONORED! We are so glad you enjoyed this chapter. Your comments are great! It means so much to us that the good connection between the characters is coming through. Chapter 8 is already in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful Sunday.
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I'm a multi-published romance author, so believe me when I tell you this is very good. I loved the way you showed me more of Billy's character through his story. And perhaps a bit of foreshadowing? I hope to read t he earlier chapters tomorrow, on a Sunday reading binge.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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I'm a multi-published romance author, so believe me when I tell you this is very good. I loved the way you showed me more of Billy's character through his story. And perhaps a bit of foreshadowing? I hope to read t he earlier chapters tomorrow, on a Sunday reading binge.
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Hi Darlene!
We are HONORED you think so highly of this chapter, and we are also pleased that you want to read the previous chapters. Thank you SO MUCH for the shiny 6-star rating & review. Your comments are great and your question about foreshadowing is an interesting one. We'll just say, it's a possibility. Wishing you a wonderful Sunday! We are already working on Chapter 8!
God Bless,
Bill & Cathy