God Omnipotent Deeds
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Comment from January L'Angelle
This is beautiful! Equating water with life because God gave the water... brilliant! I loved this story. It was well penned and the imagery was splendid. Well done. Respectfully, -January L.
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This is beautiful! Equating water with life because God gave the water... brilliant! I loved this story. It was well penned and the imagery was splendid. Well done. Respectfully, -January L.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
Comment from Spitfire
You should be writing scripts for young children to perform before adults. Speaking of water, when I dined in Europe, the waiter didn't automatically give it to patrons. You had to order it.
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You should be writing scripts for young children to perform before adults. Speaking of water, when I dined in Europe, the waiter didn't automatically give it to patrons. You had to order it.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Alcreator: nice story for Daniel and Samuel to witness of God's living life water. We do need to be watchful of what we use. Are you using these for children's stories? Stay well. Stay on psalm 91 praying ground.
flylikeaneagle
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Alcreator: nice story for Daniel and Samuel to witness of God's living life water. We do need to be watchful of what we use. Are you using these for children's stories? Stay well. Stay on psalm 91 praying ground.
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
Comment from Victoria Grace
I love this piece!! Great job. I needed to read something like this right now. Your wording is beautiful. I love the simplicity/clarity in the narrative, in contrast to the power of the messages. I also love the metaphor of water and life. It's so true, and the lesson resonated with me deeply. Great job, and good luck friend!!
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I love this piece!! Great job. I needed to read something like this right now. Your wording is beautiful. I love the simplicity/clarity in the narrative, in contrast to the power of the messages. I also love the metaphor of water and life. It's so true, and the lesson resonated with me deeply. Great job, and good luck friend!!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
Comment from faith bosire
God's teachings are always important to remember and keep close to the heart
You reminded me that so congratulations I loved your openness and great work. God bless you
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God's teachings are always important to remember and keep close to the heart
You reminded me that so congratulations I loved your openness and great work. God bless you
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I gave you some suggestions you can use them through out the entire post. It tends to be a little wordy.
"This is no miracle of Nature, but a deed of God," Samuel continued saying. (Just to tighten up your
writing. God," continued Samuel. If he continued, we know he's still talking.)
"But, father, why did this disaster cause upon or happen with or at our land overnight?" Daniel asked his father. (Again, you already addressed 'father'. We know who he's speaking to, you don't need the rest, change it to 'asked Daniel'.)
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I gave you some suggestions you can use them through out the entire post. It tends to be a little wordy.
"This is no miracle of Nature, but a deed of God," Samuel continued saying. (Just to tighten up your
writing. God," continued Samuel. If he continued, we know he's still talking.)
"But, father, why did this disaster cause upon or happen with or at our land overnight?" Daniel asked his father. (Again, you already addressed 'father'. We know who he's speaking to, you don't need the rest, change it to 'asked Daniel'.)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Alcreator Litt Dear,
Nice piece of Spiritual Fiction having lucid wording, smooth flow, and beautifully depicting God's teachings through dialogues of Samuel and Daniel.
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Hello Alcreator Litt Dear,
Nice piece of Spiritual Fiction having lucid wording, smooth flow, and beautifully depicting God's teachings through dialogues of Samuel and Daniel.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You touched on a point that many question why God allows bad things to happen to good people. I enjoyed reading your post. I like how you stated that things are 'not a miracle of nature, but a deed of God. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
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You touched on a point that many question why God allows bad things to happen to good people. I enjoyed reading your post. I like how you stated that things are 'not a miracle of nature, but a deed of God. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, yes the lessons God teaches us can come in many different ways, and when we hear these lessons it benefits all man kind, a wonderful read on values, thank you for sharing****kahpot
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Excellent, yes the lessons God teaches us can come in many different ways, and when we hear these lessons it benefits all man kind, a wonderful read on values, thank you for sharing****kahpot
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This story is thought-provoking and conveys wisdom. I like the way the father taught the child that water IS life, for we cannot survive without it. The child wants to do his part.
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This story is thought-provoking and conveys wisdom. I like the way the father taught the child that water IS life, for we cannot survive without it. The child wants to do his part.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2019