The Sliding Board Caper
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Comment from Bill Schott
This sevenelle poem, The Sliding Board Caper, has the described set up and creates a humorous scene of Dad finding out there's a considerable bump on the slide. Fun.
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This sevenelle poem, The Sliding Board Caper, has the described set up and creates a humorous scene of Dad finding out there's a considerable bump on the slide. Fun.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Bill.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is funny. Fathers love to entertain their children. Good luck in the contest. I know there is no contest, but I need to stretch the review. Even more.
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This is funny. Fathers love to entertain their children. Good luck in the contest. I know there is no contest, but I need to stretch the review. Even more.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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I know what you mean. Sometimes, if I'm comfortable with the person I'm reviewing, I write blah, blah, blah. Thanks, Thomas.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
What a wonderful memory! And I flew t hrough the poem, not a single bump on the form. I flew through the poem the way your dad flew off the slide, hehe. Well done.
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What a wonderful memory! And I flew t hrough the poem, not a single bump on the form. I flew through the poem the way your dad flew off the slide, hehe. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for a delightful review. Thank you.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH wow I love the story and the telling, it worked so well with the CC repeaed ines as you told a wonderful story using excellent rhyme and flow. Loved it
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OH wow I love the story and the telling, it worked so well with the CC repeaed ines as you told a wonderful story using excellent rhyme and flow. Loved it
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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When I went back in later years, the slide wasn't as big as I remembered it being. hahaha. It was a fun time.
Comment from tfawcus
Great story, Yvonne! The Sevenelle is the perfect vehicle for telling it, with the repeating line at the end reinforcing the humour. What lengths we dads will go to, to keep our little ones entertained! LOL
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Great story, Yvonne! The Sevenelle is the perfect vehicle for telling it, with the repeating line at the end reinforcing the humour. What lengths we dads will go to, to keep our little ones entertained! LOL
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Isn't that the truth. The slide isn't as big now that I'm grown. Thanks, Tony.
Comment from judiverse
This sounds like fun. The days of gliding down a slide are long-gone for me. Going down a slide with an apple in your moth doesn't sound like a good idea, especially if there's a bump in the middle. This shows what dads will do for their kids. You did excellent work with your rhyme and flow in this. An interesting poetic form. judi
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This sounds like fun. The days of gliding down a slide are long-gone for me. Going down a slide with an apple in your moth doesn't sound like a good idea, especially if there's a bump in the middle. This shows what dads will do for their kids. You did excellent work with your rhyme and flow in this. An interesting poetic form. judi
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Judi. It's always been a favorite memory. Funny how the board isn't as tall as I remembered it. 8-)
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You're very welcome. When you're a little one, things just look bigger to you. judi
Comment from Heather Knight
You mean you thought he had swallowed the apple? Sorry if I'm been thick...
Anyway, it's always a pleasure to read your poems. I wish I could rhyme like you.
Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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You mean you thought he had swallowed the apple? Sorry if I'm been thick...
Anyway, it's always a pleasure to read your poems. I wish I could rhyme like you.
Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Awww, thank you. No, the apple flew out of his mouth. He did it, I realized later, on purpose to make me laugh.
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That makes a lot more sense. Thanks for explaining.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Yvonne, with your sevenelle. You lines flow smoothly with great rhymes, internal rhymes of ride/slide, the dialogue is an added bonus, there is some touches of alliteration, the picture is a great pairing with your well-chosen words, and the overall poem created a memorable image for me. Your repeated lines, as required, fit in seamlessly. Thanks for sharing a fun memory. Jan
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You did a great job, Yvonne, with your sevenelle. You lines flow smoothly with great rhymes, internal rhymes of ride/slide, the dialogue is an added bonus, there is some touches of alliteration, the picture is a great pairing with your well-chosen words, and the overall poem created a memorable image for me. Your repeated lines, as required, fit in seamlessly. Thanks for sharing a fun memory. Jan
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for a wonderful review, and also for finding me the perfect picture.
