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Comment from royowen
I think you've got an excellent prologue to your story here dear Barbara, I look forward to developing a literary relationship to your characters, well dine Barbara, well dine, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I think you've got an excellent prologue to your story here dear Barbara, I look forward to developing a literary relationship to your characters, well dine Barbara, well dine, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your continued support.
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Most welcome
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara,
I see we are in for a new treat. The questions you posted are great - but I can't help but wonder if it wouldn't be better for the reader to discover the major plot points?
To me, that is half the fun in starting a new book - can I see where the thing is going? Can I ascertain who the main players are? AND, can I determine what the writer wants me to learn?
Looking forward to the new book,
~patty~
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Hi, Barbara,
I see we are in for a new treat. The questions you posted are great - but I can't help but wonder if it wouldn't be better for the reader to discover the major plot points?
To me, that is half the fun in starting a new book - can I see where the thing is going? Can I ascertain who the main players are? AND, can I determine what the writer wants me to learn?
Looking forward to the new book,
~patty~
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I think you'll find many more twists and plots added to this one. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nina Dorman
Hi there,
I think this is a very good book idea with a lot of tension and conflict just from these notes. It'd be interesting to see how much college or official training McKenzie has and whether this affects her work. (Was she ready to take over the business on her own? Will there be someone or something that helps her improve quickly? I.E. a journal, friend, book, or love interest) I'm very interested to read how you present the characters, tone, and settings. Best of luck with your book!
Nina
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Hi there,
I think this is a very good book idea with a lot of tension and conflict just from these notes. It'd be interesting to see how much college or official training McKenzie has and whether this affects her work. (Was she ready to take over the business on her own? Will there be someone or something that helps her improve quickly? I.E. a journal, friend, book, or love interest) I'm very interested to read how you present the characters, tone, and settings. Best of luck with your book!
Nina
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cole King
Seems like an enjoyable setting and characters. I like the choice to have Mac own dogs since she has trust issues. Dogs are extremely loyal so it would seem she does want companionship, but only from those she knows will not betray her. I am wondering if the dog breeds were picked for their utility? Also, maybe add to the background information something about a threat, or a note, or some kind of sign that the same killer that killed her parents is after Mac. Overall, seems really good.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Seems like an enjoyable setting and characters. I like the choice to have Mac own dogs since she has trust issues. Dogs are extremely loyal so it would seem she does want companionship, but only from those she knows will not betray her. I am wondering if the dog breeds were picked for their utility? Also, maybe add to the background information something about a threat, or a note, or some kind of sign that the same killer that killed her parents is after Mac. Overall, seems really good.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from 24chas
Hey Barbara, I look forward to reading this story. Sorry about your illness and hope you feel better. Only one minor nit. In your notes for Mac, you said: She will over compensate to hide those issues. Overcompensate is one word.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Hey Barbara, I look forward to reading this story. Sorry about your illness and hope you feel better. Only one minor nit. In your notes for Mac, you said: She will over compensate to hide those issues. Overcompensate is one word.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I will correct that. Thank you.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Why aren't you in bed?? I'll let you off this once, because you have two dogs in the story! LOL
This sounds very exciting, Barbara, I'm so pleased you have another story started. I look forward to reading it. :)) Sandra xxx
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Why aren't you in bed?? I'll let you off this once, because you have two dogs in the story! LOL
This sounds very exciting, Barbara, I'm so pleased you have another story started. I look forward to reading it. :)) Sandra xxx
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I actually did lie down for about an hour. Will do it off an on during the day. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from SLMorrical
This looks like an interesting book to read. I look forward to reading the chapters. It seems when someone has a murder affect them they become a cop or PI. Very well done.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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This looks like an interesting book to read. I look forward to reading the chapters. It seems when someone has a murder affect them they become a cop or PI. Very well done.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a very good set up for your upcoming stories, Barbara. I know it will be one that avidly pulls us in and keeps us coming back for more of this tale. Well done!
Melissa
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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This is a very good set up for your upcoming stories, Barbara. I know it will be one that avidly pulls us in and keeps us coming back for more of this tale. Well done!
Melissa
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
