FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "Labor Day.""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love this! You are so right a woman is never re-tired is she, the beds still need clean sheets, the house still needs cleaning and meals need to be prepared! But all women have the ace card! They live the longest! Love your dialogue, very clever and inventive, love Dolly x
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I love this! You are so right a woman is never re-tired is she, the beds still need clean sheets, the house still needs cleaning and meals need to be prepared! But all women have the ace card! They live the longest! Love your dialogue, very clever and inventive, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Sep-2018
Comment from kahpot
Yes, very well written and we can just imagine the wife and hubby having this conversation, a very thoughtful and humorous read, very well done and by the look of the photo they have both re-tired****kahpot
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Yes, very well written and we can just imagine the wife and hubby having this conversation, a very thoughtful and humorous read, very well done and by the look of the photo they have both re-tired****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Sep-2018
Comment from BeasPeas
LOL! True, a man can RE-tire but a woman never can. She's still stuck waiting on everyone, cooking and cleaning. Interesting dialogue between he/she. I wonder if he got the job. Marilyn
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LOL! True, a man can RE-tire but a woman never can. She's still stuck waiting on everyone, cooking and cleaning. Interesting dialogue between he/she. I wonder if he got the job. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Labor Day", is a well-written and entertaining piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Labor Day", is a well-written and entertaining piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
Comment from Dean Kuch
Maybe "Hubby" is more of a people person than a factory worker type, Rhonnie. If that's the case then there's always WalMart greeter jobs available.
"Howdy, folks, and welcome to WalMart. We sure are happy to have ya!"
See?
I got my spiel down to a science, heh-heh-heh.
Good Labor Day posting.
Thanks for sharing.
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Maybe "Hubby" is more of a people person than a factory worker type, Rhonnie. If that's the case then there's always WalMart greeter jobs available.
"Howdy, folks, and welcome to WalMart. We sure are happy to have ya!"
See?
I got my spiel down to a science, heh-heh-heh.
Good Labor Day posting.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
Comment from LindaMarie
Ahahahahahah yes! Thank you for this. It was a good read and a good chuckle. It was cute to picture the environment the conversation occurs in as well.
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Ahahahahahah yes! Thank you for this. It was a good read and a good chuckle. It was cute to picture the environment the conversation occurs in as well.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
Comment from tfawcus
Nothing like the threat of a bit of housework to get hubby moving in the opposite direction! Love the humour of the dialogue here! Doesn't sound like either of them are too keen on 'Labor' Day! LOL
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Nothing like the threat of a bit of housework to get hubby moving in the opposite direction! Love the humour of the dialogue here! Doesn't sound like either of them are too keen on 'Labor' Day! LOL
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha. That should tell him. I enjoyed your fun poem, rhonnie. There was good flow an the 'retired' word was put to good use. Thanks for sharing. Take care. Jan
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Haha. That should tell him. I enjoyed your fun poem, rhonnie. There was good flow an the 'retired' word was put to good use. Thanks for sharing. Take care. Jan
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
(")Well...I have. There's an ad in today's paper. - opening quotes
"Oh(,) yes. You will(!)"
all day(,) every day."
I'm RE-tired?(") -remove period before question mark and add end quotes :)
(")Hello...eh...I'm interested in that job you got." - opening quotes
What a cute spin you've taken on Labor Day, Rhonnie. I like it. So realistic and lifelike, LOL. Great banter and good dialogue. A few nits, I've listed above, and you'll have an excellent piece. I already made pasta salad, choco chip cookies, and prepped the roasted brussel sprouts for dinner later. I'm whooped! Haha. Vacation? Day off? What's that? LOL. Nice job with this penning ... keep em coming!
Janelle
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(")Well...I have. There's an ad in today's paper. - opening quotes
"Oh(,) yes. You will(!)"
all day(,) every day."
I'm RE-tired?(") -remove period before question mark and add end quotes :)
(")Hello...eh...I'm interested in that job you got." - opening quotes
What a cute spin you've taken on Labor Day, Rhonnie. I like it. So realistic and lifelike, LOL. Great banter and good dialogue. A few nits, I've listed above, and you'll have an excellent piece. I already made pasta salad, choco chip cookies, and prepped the roasted brussel sprouts for dinner later. I'm whooped! Haha. Vacation? Day off? What's that? LOL. Nice job with this penning ... keep em coming!
Janelle
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
Comment from Raul1
Getting a job in Labor Day is the poem I think is intended to mean. I don't know. Anyway, it has its own humor on dialogue. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
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Getting a job in Labor Day is the poem I think is intended to mean. I don't know. Anyway, it has its own humor on dialogue. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
