Twin sisters
Very different lives55 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This piece of faultless comic verse paints a brilliant picture of these two twin sisters with very different life styles but an overwhelming curiosity for just a taste of the others life style. The ending is like the punch line of a joke it follows perfectly logically what has gone before yet you don't quite see how it will end.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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This piece of faultless comic verse paints a brilliant picture of these two twin sisters with very different life styles but an overwhelming curiosity for just a taste of the others life style. The ending is like the punch line of a joke it follows perfectly logically what has gone before yet you don't quite see how it will end.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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So glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much. Jen x
Comment from Shanbreen
This is a good poem about, I guess, what one would call non-identical twins. While it's a good poem (rhyme and all) , it still reads a bit like prose to me. It's a recital rather than a story where there is an expectation of how it is going to end.
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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This is a good poem about, I guess, what one would call non-identical twins. While it's a good poem (rhyme and all) , it still reads a bit like prose to me. It's a recital rather than a story where there is an expectation of how it is going to end.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from Swampfox1
Very, very well thought out poem and I did enjoy reading it and I did not find a single mistake. The side by side comparison of the twin sisters and how they are direct opposites just puts interest right there at the beginning. How could one not be interested with one sister being a nun and the other sister being a whore. Wow. The first and last stanzas totally rock. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Have a great day.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Very, very well thought out poem and I did enjoy reading it and I did not find a single mistake. The side by side comparison of the twin sisters and how they are direct opposites just puts interest right there at the beginning. How could one not be interested with one sister being a nun and the other sister being a whore. Wow. The first and last stanzas totally rock. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Have a great day.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thanks Swampfox. I love your review. You really got it. Some didn't.
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you're welcome and thanks
Comment from peculiar2011
Good Poem. I'm a twin, so I understand. I like the similarities and differences which makes them the alter ego of the other.
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Good Poem. I'm a twin, so I understand. I like the similarities and differences which makes them the alter ego of the other.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Many thanks, much appreciated
Comment from sunnyday1
LOL! I loved this little poem . I have known many sets of twins and have often found them to be as different as chalk and cheese . This poem really highlights that doesn't it . A delightful read . Best of luck in the competition
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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LOL! I loved this little poem . I have known many sets of twins and have often found them to be as different as chalk and cheese . This poem really highlights that doesn't it . A delightful read . Best of luck in the competition
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your great review
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows how similar and how different twins can be. It also shows that we all long for parts of our lives to be different sometimes even though we like our lives.
I never understand how prostitutes can enjoy their life with no true love in it.
Hope you do well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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This shows how similar and how different twins can be. It also shows that we all long for parts of our lives to be different sometimes even though we like our lives.
I never understand how prostitutes can enjoy their life with no true love in it.
Hope you do well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thanks. I'm sure prostitutes don't enjoy their life. This was just a bit of fun.
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You're welcome. It was an interesting poem.
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fun write with an unusual tale to tell of twins and their different vocations. Both would learn a different skill, but both would learn about life the hard way, love Dolly x
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A fun write with an unusual tale to tell of twins and their different vocations. Both would learn a different skill, but both would learn about life the hard way, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thanks for the review Dolly. Much appreciated.
Comment from Hitcher
A nun and a whore... talk about identical twins being unidentifiable in the real world, ha ha. You could see why both would on occasion covert the others life, if only for a day : ) Good luck with this one!
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A nun and a whore... talk about identical twins being unidentifiable in the real world, ha ha. You could see why both would on occasion covert the others life, if only for a day : ) Good luck with this one!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much Hitcher. I really appreciate your rview.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is a good entry for the competition. A well-told story in the lines of your poem. It is sad that both of them ended up so different, but that is the real hook of the poem. Nice publishing choices with the picture. and nothing jarred.
Thanks for sharing your story, whicn is one I'd recommend, cheers, Ana.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Hello, this is a good entry for the competition. A well-told story in the lines of your poem. It is sad that both of them ended up so different, but that is the real hook of the poem. Nice publishing choices with the picture. and nothing jarred.
Thanks for sharing your story, whicn is one I'd recommend, cheers, Ana.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Ana.
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Many thanks Ana.
Comment from meeshu
nicely done, a good story to tell with your poem. plenty of contrast and a fluid form that makes read in almost a limerick pace. good luck..........meeshu
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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nicely done, a good story to tell with your poem. plenty of contrast and a fluid form that makes read in almost a limerick pace. good luck..........meeshu
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Meeshu.