FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Push!""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
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Comment from Harry Smith
Great picture selection for a prefect write that the reader really enjoyed. This story was full of imagery and emotions and it was told is such a passionate way
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Great picture selection for a prefect write that the reader really enjoyed. This story was full of imagery and emotions and it was told is such a passionate way
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is a lovely entry for the mother's day poetry contest and best of luck with this very original work. I enjoyed it and noticed no errors, it is a work I'd recommend to other readers for review, Ana.
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Hello, this is a lovely entry for the mother's day poetry contest and best of luck with this very original work. I enjoyed it and noticed no errors, it is a work I'd recommend to other readers for review, Ana.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
Comment from karenina
I was with you right to the end....my kiddos always found a reason to delay that love honor and cherish part when it came to yard chores and taking out the trash...but hey, eventually they did get around to it....when I PUSHED! (HAH!)
Karenina
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I was with you right to the end....my kiddos always found a reason to delay that love honor and cherish part when it came to yard chores and taking out the trash...but hey, eventually they did get around to it....when I PUSHED! (HAH!)
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
Comment from Artasylum
What a lovely tribute to your mom and how does it happen that such a wonderful child stayed so wonderful (that is a miracle.) A lovely and very spiritual read. thanks. yours, diana
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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What a lovely tribute to your mom and how does it happen that such a wonderful child stayed so wonderful (that is a miracle.) A lovely and very spiritual read. thanks. yours, diana
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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THANK YOU, Artasylum: For reading my poem, for liking my poem, and the five star review. God loves you. I love you too.
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Ditto, Kiddo!
Comment from Katya
Very strange and interesting. I have never seen a poem quite like this one before. The alternation between lifeless conventionalism and vivid sincere imagery is quite startling.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Very strange and interesting. I have never seen a poem quite like this one before. The alternation between lifeless conventionalism and vivid sincere imagery is quite startling.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Katya: I'm grateful that you liked my poem. Thank you for the five star review. I tried my best here.
Comment from meeshu
this is well written, rhonnie. you've taken a very pragmatic approach to the miracle of birth. unusual in poetry, I applaud you in bucking the norms.......meeshu
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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this is well written, rhonnie. you've taken a very pragmatic approach to the miracle of birth. unusual in poetry, I applaud you in bucking the norms.......meeshu
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you, meeshu: I chose the most unusual approach here that I could imagine. I tried to make it as unique as, Mom.
Thank you for the five star review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem for mother's day. We do not know how much a mother sacrifice for her children until we have our own children and can truly relate with what a mother's role is.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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A very well-written poem for mother's day. We do not know how much a mother sacrifice for her children until we have our own children and can truly relate with what a mother's role is.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Sandra: I really put a lot of thought in designing this poem. I'm glad that you liked it. Thank you for the five star review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Your poem is a true winner here. What a delight. I enjoyed the conversation and humor between mother and son as she recalls birthing him:
"Whole bottom sore. Had three before.
I want my son. I'm back for more."
"This kid will be smart. He's got a big head.
He'll be a genius. I might be DEAD! OW!"
I noticed taht you use a lot of commas instead of periods and that you placed commas in the wrong place. I suggest reading the rules on commas.
I love the PUSH and the recollections. The grateful son is cheery at the end,
"I'll be right on it, Mom. If you say so...it's off to work I'll go.
See you at dinner. You're a true winner."
Fun, fun, fun. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Your poem is a true winner here. What a delight. I enjoyed the conversation and humor between mother and son as she recalls birthing him:
"Whole bottom sore. Had three before.
I want my son. I'm back for more."
"This kid will be smart. He's got a big head.
He'll be a genius. I might be DEAD! OW!"
I noticed taht you use a lot of commas instead of periods and that you placed commas in the wrong place. I suggest reading the rules on commas.
I love the PUSH and the recollections. The grateful son is cheery at the end,
"I'll be right on it, Mom. If you say so...it's off to work I'll go.
See you at dinner. You're a true winner."
Fun, fun, fun. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you Sis Cat: It took me a while to complete and turn this poem out. I had to work at it. Thank you for liking my work. Thank you for the five star review.
Comment from Sherman541
Very different way to honor your Mother, but interesting. Very nicely done, though I am not sure how you managed to know what your mother actually went through, but you very nicely wrote about a mother and her son. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
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Very different way to honor your Mother, but interesting. Very nicely done, though I am not sure how you managed to know what your mother actually went through, but you very nicely wrote about a mother and her son. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from A. Troutman
I love the use of dialogue. This gives me an idea of what childbirth is like in a truly beautiful way and the bond between mother and son. I love the use of rhyme in this. Well done!
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I love the use of dialogue. This gives me an idea of what childbirth is like in a truly beautiful way and the bond between mother and son. I love the use of rhyme in this. Well done!
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
