Consider the Oyster
A 20-syllable poem for the contest45 total reviews
Comment from meeshu
excellent Tony, so well crafted AND anatomically correct. I am entertained and informed at the same time. a natural for the contest....good luck
...meeshu....
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excellent Tony, so well crafted AND anatomically correct. I am entertained and informed at the same time. a natural for the contest....good luck
...meeshu....
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Meeshu. I appreciate your kind words and good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from damommy
A wonderful way to show how beauty comes from the oyster's misery. It has learned how to take that pain and be productive.
I think you have a winner here. Good luck.
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A wonderful way to show how beauty comes from the oyster's misery. It has learned how to take that pain and be productive.
I think you have a winner here. Good luck.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Yvonne. I appreciate your confidence and good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
It takes someone of your skill to write something as short as this with rhyme and metre - even a touch of anapaest - that also states a biological fact into the bargain. This is a very clever entry that should do well in the coming contest.
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It takes someone of your skill to write something as short as this with rhyme and metre - even a touch of anapaest - that also states a biological fact into the bargain. This is a very clever entry that should do well in the coming contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Jim. I appreciate your confidence! These competitions are all a bit of a lottery! All the best, Tony
Comment from Mark Valentine
"wraps pearl round its pain" is such a pithy pearl itself. Much more artistic than the trope about making lemonade out of lemons. This one looks like a winner to me - good luck!
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"wraps pearl round its pain" is such a pithy pearl itself. Much more artistic than the trope about making lemonade out of lemons. This one looks like a winner to me - good luck!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Mark. I appreciate your confidence and good luck wishes. Not familiar with the lemonade trope, but I do remember a song called "Orange juice sorry you made me cry"! All the best, Tony
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The time-worn lemonade saying is "When life hands you lemons, make lemonade". Your poem has the same basic meaning, but expressed much more elegantly.
Comment from rama devi
Excellent short poem. Eloquent, meaningful and inspirational. I love the medley of P and R sounds in the last line - rolls off the tongue read aloud. Ditto on the F in line two and W in line three. Exquisite voicing. Fluid flow. Fine presentation.Should prove a contender! Good luck.
People fated to long-terms suffering would find this comforting. The grace thrives within.
Brilliant work! Wish I had a six.
Warmly,
rd
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Excellent short poem. Eloquent, meaningful and inspirational. I love the medley of P and R sounds in the last line - rolls off the tongue read aloud. Ditto on the F in line two and W in line three. Exquisite voicing. Fluid flow. Fine presentation.Should prove a contender! Good luck.
People fated to long-terms suffering would find this comforting. The grace thrives within.
Brilliant work! Wish I had a six.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, RD. As always, I appreciate the way in which you make explicit the phonetics, which were for the most part applied unconsciously. A virtual six is like an unpicked flower! Thanks, too, for the good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
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Thanks for your lovely response, dear Tony. Fun simile for the virtual six. I love your keen sense of the music of words.
Warmly, rd
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is very good Tony. An unusual, rather unique little poem that I think will do well in the contest. Great accompanying picture and I wish you good luck. Regards Dorothy
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This is very good Tony. An unusual, rather unique little poem that I think will do well in the contest. Great accompanying picture and I wish you good luck. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Dorothy. I appreciate your confidence and good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written twenty syllable poem. The oyster go through much grinding and discomfort to produce a pearl. We need pain and discomfort to make our souls beautiful.
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A very well-written twenty syllable poem. The oyster go through much grinding and discomfort to produce a pearl. We need pain and discomfort to make our souls beautiful.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your comments and summary. All the best, Tony
Comment from royowen
Isn't nature absolutely wonderful Tony, who would have thought that God would use a humble oyster to create the great metaphor, "pearl of great price" to reveal the kingdom of God, well done, blessings, Roy
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Isn't nature absolutely wonderful Tony, who would have thought that God would use a humble oyster to create the great metaphor, "pearl of great price" to reveal the kingdom of God, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Roy. I appreciate your observations and blessings. All the best, Tony
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Most welcome, Tony.
Comment from Dan-C
I enjoyed your pome very much. I think the line "wraps pearl around its pain." is a great metaphor for how some people who live with pain everyday and keep going live their lives.
Thank you for sharing,
Dan
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I enjoyed your pome very much. I think the line "wraps pearl around its pain." is a great metaphor for how some people who live with pain everyday and keep going live their lives.
Thank you for sharing,
Dan
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Dan. I appreciate your comments about the metaphor. All the best, Tony
Comment from Halfree
Talk about the use of imagery, you hit it out of the park with this posting. "Consider the oyster." Yes I know that same "consider" has been used in poetry over time. But this "consider" was quite well used. A very good posting,what more need to be said?
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Talk about the use of imagery, you hit it out of the park with this posting. "Consider the oyster." Yes I know that same "consider" has been used in poetry over time. But this "consider" was quite well used. A very good posting,what more need to be said?
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Halfree. I appreciate your positive comments. All the best, Tony