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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Mikey;
I did see your club, and I was tempted to join. My use of meter sucks, and I do better with structured poetic forms. Maybe I should start my own club? I'm at a loss as to what to do.
I think I will wait until the New Year to start a new project. I'm participating in next month's NaNoWriMo and finishing the first draft of the novel, 'The Waiting Room,' which I'm posting here.
Your poem is lovely. I think you did a great job of taking inspiration from the picture prompt. I loved the presentation, though I thought a few of the words were misaligned, maybe that was your intention.
Thank you for sharing, and your willingness to organize a club,
~patty~
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Hi, Mikey;
I did see your club, and I was tempted to join. My use of meter sucks, and I do better with structured poetic forms. Maybe I should start my own club? I'm at a loss as to what to do.
I think I will wait until the New Year to start a new project. I'm participating in next month's NaNoWriMo and finishing the first draft of the novel, 'The Waiting Room,' which I'm posting here.
Your poem is lovely. I think you did a great job of taking inspiration from the picture prompt. I loved the presentation, though I thought a few of the words were misaligned, maybe that was your intention.
Thank you for sharing, and your willingness to organize a club,
~patty~
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Yes, the misaligned words are intentional. It's a free verse thing. Words like "breeze" sometimes we'll set it out a bit to give the feeling of a breeze. Or we put words in certain spots to line them up in a certain way. It does bug the heck out of some people though. LOL
The clubs are informal. You can join and just read the discussions to start with. You don't have to participate in the challenges or anything. So, you can just watch. :))
Thanks a million, mike
Comment from Sanku
you know I like these kind of poems because they tease my brain.like a maths problem I try to unravel it and sometime go off on a .
tangent
A rather cynical start. the purple moon and clouds and their twisted reflections(the title is very apt for the pic) conjures up the image of love fanciful or heavenly.So a love that transcend heaven and earth is an idea one can take to the other world to kickstart your life after.
to the persona love is just a common element of our life and a myth like the myth that heaven exists about the clouds.
we all know the plain facts about clouds (i liked those lines very much -the lucky ones getting just the right amount and others getting overwhelmed ,there can be layers of meaning to that)
In spite of his cynical attitude he is not averse to her warm embrace, though he can't differentiate between her sighs and giggles .
After all that he is frank enough to say (I think a bit sheepishly) that true love is blue.
Thank you for this exercise.(I like the idea of free verse club)
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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you know I like these kind of poems because they tease my brain.like a maths problem I try to unravel it and sometime go off on a .
tangent
A rather cynical start. the purple moon and clouds and their twisted reflections(the title is very apt for the pic) conjures up the image of love fanciful or heavenly.So a love that transcend heaven and earth is an idea one can take to the other world to kickstart your life after.
to the persona love is just a common element of our life and a myth like the myth that heaven exists about the clouds.
we all know the plain facts about clouds (i liked those lines very much -the lucky ones getting just the right amount and others getting overwhelmed ,there can be layers of meaning to that)
In spite of his cynical attitude he is not averse to her warm embrace, though he can't differentiate between her sighs and giggles .
After all that he is frank enough to say (I think a bit sheepishly) that true love is blue.
Thank you for this exercise.(I like the idea of free verse club)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Hi, Sanku
I always look forward to your interpretations and insights. You are on the money and often find things I hadn't thought of. :))
You should join the club. It's informal and there's no obligation to participate in any of the challenges unless you wish to. So, you can read the discussions and see what we're doing and then join in if and when it suits you. Thanks a million. mike
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Nicely done M. Just enough poetic device to satisfy my need for those affirmations in free-form poetry but nothing that interfered with the flow of the words and thoughts. I love the roads this writing sent my brain skipping down. No one can know just what this means to you, but I thought you might appreciate seeing where it led my mind to wander.
The thought of love, and the use of the word, is as common as those white doves and as intangible as religious belief. (A great visual for both, BTW). The minute we dive wholeheartedly into romantic love the whole picture changes. What we think we want from love might not be what eventually satisfies us. What we think we expect might delightfully surprise us in its separate reality. Love is what we feel, not what we offer. We offer ourselves and hope that it is enough to make others "feel loved." We are the rock that creates the ripples in the hope that, on reflection, it creates a beautiful new picture that is appreciated by another. Regardless of the feelings it engenders in others, a person's love is their reality.
Ta Da.
Thanks for the great read this morning with my coffee.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Nicely done M. Just enough poetic device to satisfy my need for those affirmations in free-form poetry but nothing that interfered with the flow of the words and thoughts. I love the roads this writing sent my brain skipping down. No one can know just what this means to you, but I thought you might appreciate seeing where it led my mind to wander.
The thought of love, and the use of the word, is as common as those white doves and as intangible as religious belief. (A great visual for both, BTW). The minute we dive wholeheartedly into romantic love the whole picture changes. What we think we want from love might not be what eventually satisfies us. What we think we expect might delightfully surprise us in its separate reality. Love is what we feel, not what we offer. We offer ourselves and hope that it is enough to make others "feel loved." We are the rock that creates the ripples in the hope that, on reflection, it creates a beautiful new picture that is appreciated by another. Regardless of the feelings it engenders in others, a person's love is their reality.
Ta Da.
Thanks for the great read this morning with my coffee.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Wow, Wendy, That is a wonderful interpretation and insightful write on the topic. I agree and we are totally on the same page. I think you should take what you've written and write a longer piece based on what you've said. It's so concise and exceptional really. Bravo. I'm delighted my little ramblings got this kind of response. I just may write another one. LOL mike
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a poem of questioning the existence of true love either earthly or Heavenly.
Some of us wish for a consuming love and hope that that love may be found in the here after.
I like the purple wording and the choice of script it adds to the dreamy quality of the poem
Keep wrting
dp
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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This is a poem of questioning the existence of true love either earthly or Heavenly.
Some of us wish for a consuming love and hope that that love may be found in the here after.
I like the purple wording and the choice of script it adds to the dreamy quality of the poem
Keep wrting
dp
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much. Great insights. Very well put. Thanks so much, mike
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You are so very welcome, Mike.
Joan
Comment from Pantygynt
I have become convinced that the most important poetic device is not rhyme or metre or alliteration or indeed any of the many listed. They are all there for a purpose and that purpos is to create an image, visual, olfactory or or gustatory in the mind of the reader. It is imagery or rather the creation of imagery that is the purpose of all poetry.
Free verse has the advantage over all other genres in that it can draw on any of the devices out there in order to create the desired image without any of the lesser devices becoming dominant.
This is the first poem of this freeversers' club that i have seen and it sets an undeniably high standard, drawing on several of the standard devices to create an image of something that is essentially abstract -- love.
Let me kick this club off with a six star award for this fine piece of free verse.
At the moment I have a backlog of personally generated free verse awaiting posting, but who knows? I could well end up joining this club sometime in the not too distant future.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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I have become convinced that the most important poetic device is not rhyme or metre or alliteration or indeed any of the many listed. They are all there for a purpose and that purpos is to create an image, visual, olfactory or or gustatory in the mind of the reader. It is imagery or rather the creation of imagery that is the purpose of all poetry.
Free verse has the advantage over all other genres in that it can draw on any of the devices out there in order to create the desired image without any of the lesser devices becoming dominant.
This is the first poem of this freeversers' club that i have seen and it sets an undeniably high standard, drawing on several of the standard devices to create an image of something that is essentially abstract -- love.
Let me kick this club off with a six star award for this fine piece of free verse.
At the moment I have a backlog of personally generated free verse awaiting posting, but who knows? I could well end up joining this club sometime in the not too distant future.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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So true. I must say though that learning the formal forms and tools are what have made the difference in me just scattering words on a page and writing ACTUAL poetry. It's a MUST to have the tools just like it is with a sonnet.
I'm delighted you find this worthy. Yours is an opinion I value highly. The club is an informal enterprise, so joining doesn't obligate you to DO anything. You're welcome to join and just peruse the discussions, joining in when it suits you and perhaps a challenge or contest if you have a notion or as time permits.
Delighted with a great review and all the glitter too. mike
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I will definitely bear it in mind. I think you are quite right in that one needs to master the formal stuff before you can write the free verse effectively. It's like jazz. You have to be a competent musician and understand harmony before you can play good jazz.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a lovely poem as usual, Mike. I particularly like the images of the white doves at a funeral and the feathery gloved clouds.
I also like your use of colors: love is blue? I didn't know that. ;)
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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This is a lovely poem as usual, Mike. I particularly like the images of the white doves at a funeral and the feathery gloved clouds.
I also like your use of colors: love is blue? I didn't know that. ;)
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Yep, Love is blue. :))
According to my high school girlfriend, the breeze is silver. Go figure, but I think she was right.
So pleased you enjoyed. Thanks for your encouragement, it means a lot. mike
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A beautiful free verse with a little rhyme scattered through. Each verse floats along on this lovely lilac cloud. You've done free verse emotions beautifully with this one mikey.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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A beautiful free verse with a little rhyme scattered through. Each verse floats along on this lovely lilac cloud. You've done free verse emotions beautifully with this one mikey.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Ahh, thanks so much, Valda. You are so encouraging. I may just have to write another one. Thanks a million, mike
Comment from apky
Hullo Friend,
I've been away last week and still will have little time to review all that I have in my messages box.
So this is my little apology to let you know I'm a bit indisposed at the moment and can't give the kind of comprehensive review I normally do for your chapters and posts. We have a very dear family friend who has been hospitalized and operated on, so I spend most days at the clinic and sorting out business paperwork.
I know it's a fake five stars, more or less. Please accept.
All the best,
Apky (Akinyi)
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Hullo Friend,
I've been away last week and still will have little time to review all that I have in my messages box.
So this is my little apology to let you know I'm a bit indisposed at the moment and can't give the kind of comprehensive review I normally do for your chapters and posts. We have a very dear family friend who has been hospitalized and operated on, so I spend most days at the clinic and sorting out business paperwork.
I know it's a fake five stars, more or less. Please accept.
All the best,
Apky (Akinyi)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much. You are doing better than I do by a long shot. LOL mike
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A vety well-written free verse poem about this beautiful purple picture. I cannot find any spags or improvements to your fabulous poem. I already joined and you will see my attempt soon. I hope to do a good job. I did not do free verse in a while. Lol.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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A vety well-written free verse poem about this beautiful purple picture. I cannot find any spags or improvements to your fabulous poem. I already joined and you will see my attempt soon. I hope to do a good job. I did not do free verse in a while. Lol.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Free verse is the best, you can't make a mistake. LOL mike
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Reflections Change Upon Entry" is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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"Reflections Change Upon Entry" is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Ahh, you're so very kind and your words encourage. Thanks a million, mike
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mike, as always, you're very welcome.
Best wishes, bless you and take care,
the Duchess