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Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "My beautiful Cahore"Words to pass on to my children
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
'this enchanted village
forever I'll hold it's magic
opened my eyes to nature
became my spiritual teacher'
This reminds me so much a tiny village near Whitby called Staithes that I stay at about once a year. The magic of the cliffs, the silent beauty, you have captured this seemingly effortlessly, truly magical, well done and good luck in the competition love Meia x
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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'this enchanted village
forever I'll hold it's magic
opened my eyes to nature
became my spiritual teacher'
This reminds me so much a tiny village near Whitby called Staithes that I stay at about once a year. The magic of the cliffs, the silent beauty, you have captured this seemingly effortlessly, truly magical, well done and good luck in the competition love Meia x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, I appreciate your welcome review and comments. I am glad it resonated with your about the village you have stayed in. Mary
Comment from Mustang Patty
Such a beautiful descriptive poem! I believe my favorite lines were 'roaring loudly as each white horse
tumbles and unfurls its majestic wave'
In my mind's eye, I could envision the rolling waves you described so wonderfully.
The poem flows well with each word precisely place for maximum affect.
Great job!
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Such a beautiful descriptive poem! I believe my favorite lines were 'roaring loudly as each white horse
tumbles and unfurls its majestic wave'
In my mind's eye, I could envision the rolling waves you described so wonderfully.
The poem flows well with each word precisely place for maximum affect.
Great job!
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, I appreciate your welcome exceptional review and comments. Mary
Comment from patcelaw
Mary, the way you have described this place make one feel peace. I enjoyed the read very much. Your words are wonderful and the presentation iw beautiful. Patricia
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Mary, the way you have described this place make one feel peace. I enjoyed the read very much. Your words are wonderful and the presentation iw beautiful. Patricia
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Patricia I appreciate your welcome review and comments. Mary
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem and a very beautiful place you describe in your poem. Near the ocean and the mountains is some of my favorite places too.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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A very well-written free verse poem and a very beautiful place you describe in your poem. Near the ocean and the mountains is some of my favorite places too.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Sandra I appreciate your welcome review and comments. Mary
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Jackarrie,
You paint a vivid and lovely picture of this Irish village. I especially enjoyed this passage:
the wild sea crashing against the cliffs
roaring loudly as each white horse
tumbles and unfurls its majestic wave (such great imagery)
Your descriptions of the flowers, the lambs, the waves... all so lovely.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi Jackarrie,
You paint a vivid and lovely picture of this Irish village. I especially enjoyed this passage:
the wild sea crashing against the cliffs
roaring loudly as each white horse
tumbles and unfurls its majestic wave (such great imagery)
Your descriptions of the flowers, the lambs, the waves... all so lovely.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thanks Kim for an excellent review, I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
How a village could open eyes to Nature and become spiritual teacher, so naturally sometime, is the verbatim of the theme of this freely flown free verse in unrestricted rhymes, offer stunning word visual imagery making is a masterly work that I liked and enjoyed.
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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How a village could open eyes to Nature and become spiritual teacher, so naturally sometime, is the verbatim of the theme of this freely flown free verse in unrestricted rhymes, offer stunning word visual imagery making is a masterly work that I liked and enjoyed.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for your excellent review and such great comments I am delighted with, Mary
Comment from Thal1959
A very nice free verse. It does not bear some of the usual traits of a free verse like a repeated word or phrase to give the "impression" of rhyme, or a strategic use of punctuation to render it the semblance of a meter. But all free verses do not need these, I am just commenting. It seems the eloquence of the expressions makes them disposable. There are only two small things I wish to mention - very small.
" it, we never tire of" is a bit clumsy having the word "it" followed by a comma. I presume the idea is that the "it" you are speaking of refers to the preceding line, "a hypnotic effect" It (the hypnotic effect), we never tire of. But again, it just comes off a little clumsy.
Lastly. "forever i'll hold it's magic" The "I" in I'll should be capitalized, and I believe the word "it's, should not be with an apostrophe... "it's" is a contraction of "it is" Thanks for posting.
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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A very nice free verse. It does not bear some of the usual traits of a free verse like a repeated word or phrase to give the "impression" of rhyme, or a strategic use of punctuation to render it the semblance of a meter. But all free verses do not need these, I am just commenting. It seems the eloquence of the expressions makes them disposable. There are only two small things I wish to mention - very small.
" it, we never tire of" is a bit clumsy having the word "it" followed by a comma. I presume the idea is that the "it" you are speaking of refers to the preceding line, "a hypnotic effect" It (the hypnotic effect), we never tire of. But again, it just comes off a little clumsy.
Lastly. "forever i'll hold it's magic" The "I" in I'll should be capitalized, and I believe the word "it's, should not be with an apostrophe... "it's" is a contraction of "it is" Thanks for posting.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for reviewing my free verse poem, I agree with your suggestions and have rectified it. Much appreciated Mary
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Thanks for understanding.