Comment from fimarie78

Excellent

I really like this. The analogy of the seagulls call and the salty tears was good and affinity was the perfect word choice. I also love the word ambience. (even that was in your notes) I shall think of this when I next hear a seagull.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017

Thank you for for the review review and kind words.

Gypsy blessings

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Lovely.
I guess it is safe to assume that the melancholy protagonist in this well presented and constructed haiku feels a likeness to the crying gulls because they themselves feel like crying too.
Beautiful presentation, sensational word economy.
Breathtakingly beautiful...


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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017

Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.

Gypsy hugs

reply by Dean Kuch on 07-Feb-2017

You're more than welcome, darlin'.
Outstanding...

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

This is a beautiful haiku.
The sound of seagulls is beautiful. I don't live as close to the water as I used to when I lived in Victoria. I miss the sound of the seagulls.
Your satori is perfect.
Doug will be very happy

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017

hehehe I hope so. I want them to have a happy day. They are a lovely couple.
I wish I lived near the ocean .... one day I will.

Tara hugs

Gypsy
Haiku Instructor
Haiku Society of America


Buddha Blessings

reply by Lu Saluna on 07-Feb-2017

If you want to live by the ocean, you will make it happen one day.
Hugs
and good night.