Comment from winnona

Excellent

Beautifully written poem.The words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. The artwork and background color completed it well.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Thank you, winnona. I'm really happy that you thought the words flowed well and that the presentation was effective. Thanks for supporting my poetry efforts today.

Best,
jeni

Comment from Maureen Sky

Excellent

Good job using the criteria of the poem, etc. Creative and unique, for sure. Picture and color of text all compliment what you were trying to convey here. Nicely done.

M. Sky

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Hi, M!

I'm glad you thought this work creative and unique, and that you enjoyed the presentation. Thanks for supporting my poetry efforts.

Best,
luna

reply by Maureen Sky on 01-Feb-2017

Thanks so much.

Comment from Alex Biasin

Excellent

I thought this was really good.
The rhymes worked well and the poem had good pacing throughout.
I liked the story within the poem, it had enough there to get the imagination racing and paint a vivid picture within the mind.
I enjoyed reading this. Well done.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Dear Alex,

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed the rhyming and rhythm. Also happy that you enjoyed the story within the poem and were able to get some imagery from it. Thanks for stopping by today, I hope to see you again soon.

Best,
luna

Comment from sue133

Excellent

I like it very much. It was not an easy task and you have delivered an interesting topic and succeeded with the etheree restrictions. Well done and good luck for the competition. Susan

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Hi, Susan!

I'm happy that you stopped by today. That's great that you enjoyed the poem and thought I succeeded with my task. I hope you stop by again soon and I thank you for your support today.

Best,
luna

Comment from Justine Rose1

Excellent

Very cool . The shape poem is amazing and the story quick and gripping. The only distraction was the imperfect rhyme go and owes. good job. Look forward to more.
Justine

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Dear Justine,

Thank you for stopping by! I'm really thankful that you enjoyed the poem and found the story quick and gripping (I like that!) I'm sorry that the one rhyme threw you off a bit.

I look forward to your return. Thanks for your support of my poetry portfolio today. Happy Hump Day!

Best,
luna

Comment from Badger_29

Excellent

Yes, I loved it!, So pleasurably symmetrical, I can see that you have to get very creative with your wording to fir the format. I believe that you succeeded quite well, and this became a triangle of forces, which turned into two against one. Very mystical and magical, you have transported the reader to another time and place with wonderful strong verbs, nouns, and adjectives. My favorite new word, cyan.
Thanks so much for sharing !
Blessings,
Brother Badger

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Brother Badger!

So you have a favorite new word, that's so cool! Again, your review is heartwarming. I'm so happy I was able to transport you to another time and place. That is my goal, and I'm happy that I succeeded in your eyes.

Best,
Sister Luna

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Jeni, this is a very dificult poem to write but you have done it very well and your words do touch me. Very well done. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Thank you, Ullla, I'm happy that you thought I wrote this poem well and were touched by my words. Thank you for being here today in support of my writing efforts.

Best,
jeni

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Clever way to write a difficult style of poetry. You do this so well. You make it look effortless, though I know it's not. Very good.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Tom, I thank you for the complimentary review (I'm blushing) and I'm happy that you enjoy my work. Thank you for stopping by today to support my writing.

Best,
jeni

Comment from crybry67

Excellent

Hi, Jeni. Well that sounds like a check of a plan to me. Lol

I really like the alliteration you used, especially the first three lines. Wonderful, grabs attention.

Blessings....Christy

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Thanks, Christy, for stopping by!

I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem and that it grabbed your attention. That is my goal. Thank you, dear friend, for your most lovely support.

love,
jeni

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Like your magic beteen Milliner the magician and the Dream Mater only you could come up with a fantasy poem like this.
Smiles

Gert

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Thank you, Gert, I appreciate the compliment. I'm glad you liked the magic between the characters.

Take Care Now,
jeni