Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Fanciful Fairies"a place to gather my poetic forms
42 total reviews
Comment from nancyrabbrose
You have painted a magical picture with a feeling of beauty and peace. I like the way your poem tells us to just go to sleep. The illustration is well designed to enhance your poem's presentation. Good for you. How nice to think of fairies.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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You have painted a magical picture with a feeling of beauty and peace. I like the way your poem tells us to just go to sleep. The illustration is well designed to enhance your poem's presentation. Good for you. How nice to think of fairies.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Dear nancy,
Thank you for your lovely words concerning my poem. I'm happy that you enjoyed it and thank you for your kind attention to my work efforts.
peace,
luna
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
The Alliterisen...what a complex style and you have done so well with it! A brilliant poem about a super subject, I always have believed that fairies in the form of sprites do exist albeit in parallel existence or even so small we cannot see them....a magical poem and as always I love your work Luna, kindest regards and well done, Meia :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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The Alliterisen...what a complex style and you have done so well with it! A brilliant poem about a super subject, I always have believed that fairies in the form of sprites do exist albeit in parallel existence or even so small we cannot see them....a magical poem and as always I love your work Luna, kindest regards and well done, Meia :)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Hi, Meia,
I, too, believe that fairies exist, whether on this plane or on an alternate. Thank you for your kind words of review.
love,
luna
Comment from MissMerri
Very beautiful Luna. I have never heard of this form before but I loved the effect of the alliteration in each line. You chose a perfect theme for this too. It fits so well. It was delightful to picture the "dozen demure fairies" flying around laughing and having fun. What a fun poem to read. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Very beautiful Luna. I have never heard of this form before but I loved the effect of the alliteration in each line. You chose a perfect theme for this too. It fits so well. It was delightful to picture the "dozen demure fairies" flying around laughing and having fun. What a fun poem to read. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your lovely words of review, MissMerri. I appreciate it very much; also your support of my poetry efforts.
peace,
jeni
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Alliterisen poem. We can see fairies at work in our lives everywhere when we open up our eyes to find them. This is another format I did not try yet.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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A very well-written Alliterisen poem. We can see fairies at work in our lives everywhere when we open up our eyes to find them. This is another format I did not try yet.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Dear Sandra,
I'll bet you'd rock this form! I think you should give it a try. I too believe that if we open up our eyes that we can see much we didn't realize was there all the while.
peace,
jeni
Comment from winnona
Beautifully written , Your well-chosen words flowed line to lne combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Very well chosen artwork and back ground color completes the piece well.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Beautifully written , Your well-chosen words flowed line to lne combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Very well chosen artwork and back ground color completes the piece well.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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dear winnona,
Thank you for your kind thoughts on my poem. I'm glad that you liked the artwork and background color as well, thanks for letting me know. Appreciate your time today, my friend.
peace,
jeni
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi jeni,
I know nothing about poetry except I know what I like when I read it. And I thought this was a fun-fantasy read. Loved the light-heartedness in this one. It left a smile on my face. Thanks for another good read! hugs,
Alan
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Hi jeni,
I know nothing about poetry except I know what I like when I read it. And I thought this was a fun-fantasy read. Loved the light-heartedness in this one. It left a smile on my face. Thanks for another good read! hugs,
Alan
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Dear Alan,
Well, I'm just glad that this poem left a smile on your face. If I can accomplish that, I call it a win. Thanks for your lovely words of review.
peace,
jeni
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You are welcome, Jeni! Still smiling
Comment from Dean Kuch
Lovely, Jeni, and thank you for introducing me to yet another form of poetic expressionism...as if I wasn't confused enough about the myriad of forms of poetry already available "out there," LOL.
This is an alliteration lover's wet dream, if you'll pardon the expression.
And while I AM indeed an alliteration lover, I will refrain elaborating on the second part of that statement.
You know, out of decency and a sense of good taste.
Well done!
Dean
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Lovely, Jeni, and thank you for introducing me to yet another form of poetic expressionism...as if I wasn't confused enough about the myriad of forms of poetry already available "out there," LOL.
This is an alliteration lover's wet dream, if you'll pardon the expression.
And while I AM indeed an alliteration lover, I will refrain elaborating on the second part of that statement.
You know, out of decency and a sense of good taste.
Well done!
Dean
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Dean, for the kind review. I'm left wondering, however, when it was that you possessed a sense of good taste or decency! hehehee
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Hahaha...you've got a point, Jeni.
Comment from joeruptak
I really don't understand this whole concept
I don't know whether you made any mistakes or not
I can only tell you how I feel
it made me feel lighthearted and happy
and to me this is what you were trying to accomplish
good job and thank you for the pleasant moments
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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I really don't understand this whole concept
I don't know whether you made any mistakes or not
I can only tell you how I feel
it made me feel lighthearted and happy
and to me this is what you were trying to accomplish
good job and thank you for the pleasant moments
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Well, yeah, this is exactly what I was trying to accomplish, so to heck with the rules of the form and I'm glad that you let me know how the poem made you feel. In the end, that's what counts to us all. Thanks again.
peace,
Luna
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You can't beat a good bit of alliteration in a poem and this one delivers in abundance.
In the final line though the comma really shouldn't be there after the exclamation mark as this signifies a deliberate long stop, followed by another pause. Sleep should also be capitalised.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Hi there,
You can't beat a good bit of alliteration in a poem and this one delivers in abundance.
In the final line though the comma really shouldn't be there after the exclamation mark as this signifies a deliberate long stop, followed by another pause. Sleep should also be capitalised.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Dear GMG, thanks for picking up on those nits for me, they're fixed. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from F. Wehr3
I believe I've read something similar to this piece before. I was entertained by your alliteration, and the subject of fairies (I'm a Fantasy writer). Very well done!
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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I believe I've read something similar to this piece before. I was entertained by your alliteration, and the subject of fairies (I'm a Fantasy writer). Very well done!
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Russell! I'm happy you enjoyed this. Thanks for your support of my writing efforts this morning.
