Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Dreamwalking"a place to gather my poetic forms
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Comment from winnona
A well-written poem. I think you have mastered the challenge of this poetry form. Your well-chosen words flowed well line to line creating the message of the poem for the reader. This is a beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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A well-written poem. I think you have mastered the challenge of this poetry form. Your well-chosen words flowed well line to line creating the message of the poem for the reader. This is a beautiful poem.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Thank you winnona, I appreciate your read and your kind review.
Comment from Lu Saluna
Hi Luna,
This is a beautiful poem. You write such magical and enchanting poetry, it really grabs. I wonder if you mind if I make a suggestion. It would personalize it slightly and make is sound even better, more inviting.
"Upon the Moon, you'll stand to be
whatever in some dream you see"
"Now this could mean a rich tycoon
you'll stand to be, upon the moon."
If you changed it to read like this (minor change):
"Upon the Moon, you'll stand by me - (by me)
whatever in some dream you see"
"Now this could mean a rich tycoon
you'll stand by me, upon the moon." - (by me)
It is only a thought and suggestion, you are the poet. Just a thought to make it an invitation of sorts.
The poem is beautiful as it is whatever you decide :-))
Best wishes always, Lu
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Hi Luna,
This is a beautiful poem. You write such magical and enchanting poetry, it really grabs. I wonder if you mind if I make a suggestion. It would personalize it slightly and make is sound even better, more inviting.
"Upon the Moon, you'll stand to be
whatever in some dream you see"
"Now this could mean a rich tycoon
you'll stand to be, upon the moon."
If you changed it to read like this (minor change):
"Upon the Moon, you'll stand by me - (by me)
whatever in some dream you see"
"Now this could mean a rich tycoon
you'll stand by me, upon the moon." - (by me)
It is only a thought and suggestion, you are the poet. Just a thought to make it an invitation of sorts.
The poem is beautiful as it is whatever you decide :-))
Best wishes always, Lu
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Lu, I'll keep your suggestion in mind as I plan to revisit the poem to revise some. I appreciate your review!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written swap quatrain. We can do about anything in our dreams that is impossible in real life. We just have to slide down the moonbeam before we wake up again.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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A very well-written swap quatrain. We can do about anything in our dreams that is impossible in real life. We just have to slide down the moonbeam before we wake up again.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Sandra. You know that I appreciate the time you take to read and review my work. I thank you once again.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You describe the nighttime reverie beautifully in this well penned piece. I used to wonder why I would wake up so tired some days (years back) and then took some classes in dream / angel therapy. It helped me to become aware during waking hours of what I was being taught through the night :) - not when I wake up tired I know it is due to last night's workout LOL. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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You describe the nighttime reverie beautifully in this well penned piece. I used to wonder why I would wake up so tired some days (years back) and then took some classes in dream / angel therapy. It helped me to become aware during waking hours of what I was being taught through the night :) - not when I wake up tired I know it is due to last night's workout LOL. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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We're on the same page here! I've done a great deal of dream'/angel therapy myself and I feel you're exactly right. When I wake up really, really, tired it's because I've had an adventure and learned something the night before.
Love,
Jeni
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Ahhh .... our angels brought us together :). Truly a blessing.
Comment from fimarie78
Your well chosen image set the scene well for this lovely poem. There is something special about the moon and the way it changes. I am guessing you also believe this, since your muse is Luna.
I like your writing style. Rhyming couplets, but still so much meaning within.
Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Your well chosen image set the scene well for this lovely poem. There is something special about the moon and the way it changes. I am guessing you also believe this, since your muse is Luna.
I like your writing style. Rhyming couplets, but still so much meaning within.
Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your very kind review. Yes, I've been taken by the moon all of my life, as I am a Cancer, and a Moonchild. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from robyn corum
hahahaha! I do like the fact that we CAN climb out of those dreams and nightmares and come back to real life. That's a GOOD thing. Thanks for the fun poem, Luna. Have a super day!
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hahahaha! I do like the fact that we CAN climb out of those dreams and nightmares and come back to real life. That's a GOOD thing. Thanks for the fun poem, Luna. Have a super day!
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Hi Robyn, thank YOU for the read and the gracious review.
You have a great day as well!
