Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Seasons"a place to gather my poetic forms
51 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Lovely poem Lune about the changing seasons and what each one brings. Told well in good aabb rhyme scheme. Both rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout the poem. You mention the Amish farmers so I assume you are American. Great picture of the night sky with The Plough visible. It is viewable at the moment - I saw it last night in the clear winter sky. Lovely poem covering the 4 seasons well. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Lovely poem Lune about the changing seasons and what each one brings. Told well in good aabb rhyme scheme. Both rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout the poem. You mention the Amish farmers so I assume you are American. Great picture of the night sky with The Plough visible. It is viewable at the moment - I saw it last night in the clear winter sky. Lovely poem covering the 4 seasons well. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Oh, yes, Dorothy, I'm an American and live deep in the heart of Amish country. I'm glad you liked this and thank you for the review.
Comment from Sis Cat
I am glad you wrote this haiku-inspired seasonal poem. I love your imagery:
"Waddling to the blooming pond,
momma leads ducklings, brand new bond.
Daffodils blooming, growing tall,
their beauty loved by one and all."
I can see and feel this. I also feel the earth turning around the sun, changing seasons.
You wrote a cyclical poem that goes from Old Man Winter to "Rebirth as far as I can see."
Thank you for celebrating the seasons in this fine poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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I am glad you wrote this haiku-inspired seasonal poem. I love your imagery:
"Waddling to the blooming pond,
momma leads ducklings, brand new bond.
Daffodils blooming, growing tall,
their beauty loved by one and all."
I can see and feel this. I also feel the earth turning around the sun, changing seasons.
You wrote a cyclical poem that goes from Old Man Winter to "Rebirth as far as I can see."
Thank you for celebrating the seasons in this fine poem.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Sis Cat. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this and appreciate your kind words.
Comment from LIJ Red
An even syllable count, basically iambic rhyming quatrains with many valid images,
this poem looks like a five-star effort to me. I visited Amish country back in the 1980s, when I worked for Lancaster's biggest-Armstrong.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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An even syllable count, basically iambic rhyming quatrains with many valid images,
this poem looks like a five-star effort to me. I visited Amish country back in the 1980s, when I worked for Lancaster's biggest-Armstrong.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Well, that's just where I live...in Lancaster County; smack dab in the middle of the amish country. It's peaceful, but I'm born and raised in "Baltimore City, and lived in Center City Philapa for four years. I'm a city gal.Gimme the concrete jungle.
Comment from suep
I enjoyed your poem that took me on a journey through the seasons. Nice rhyming and flow. I especially enjoyed 'Waddling to the blooming pond,/momma leads ducklings, brand new bond'. Also 'Orion's high now in the sky,/he means that fall is passing by'. Orion is my favorite constellation and I like your choice of artwork. Enjoyable read. Nice work! :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I enjoyed your poem that took me on a journey through the seasons. Nice rhyming and flow. I especially enjoyed 'Waddling to the blooming pond,/momma leads ducklings, brand new bond'. Also 'Orion's high now in the sky,/he means that fall is passing by'. Orion is my favorite constellation and I like your choice of artwork. Enjoyable read. Nice work! :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Dear suep. I love that Orion is your favorite constellation, perhaps we could talk about him sometime. I apppreciate your very gracious review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Luna
Why wouldn't I like your poem about the change of seasons
Each change of how you describe a season is so clear which makes me feel a beautiful new sight to behold.
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Luna
Why wouldn't I like your poem about the change of seasons
Each change of how you describe a season is so clear which makes me feel a beautiful new sight to behold.
Gert
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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/Thank you gert, why did I say before that the poem would probably be one you wouldn't like?
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Smiles Luna
What' not to like about the way seasons change, That is why Stan and U love to live in Vermont
Comment from winnona
Another beautiful well-written poem. Your well-chosen words flowed well lie to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for th reader. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Another beautiful well-written poem. Your well-chosen words flowed well lie to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for th reader. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thanks for your pretty and complimentary review, winnona; I enjoyed reading it.
Comment from nomi338
Seasons, you just gotta' loveem. That is unless you live in the desert that is mostly Southern California, around Los Angeles. To have a temperature in the high seventies on December 25th is a common occurrence. You quickly lose the meaning of seasons, it is pretty much just one day after another. I sometimes stand in shirtsleeves and shorts and look up at the snow capped mountains and smile. To me seasons is just a word. Your poem however is well written, melodic and a joy to read.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Seasons, you just gotta' loveem. That is unless you live in the desert that is mostly Southern California, around Los Angeles. To have a temperature in the high seventies on December 25th is a common occurrence. You quickly lose the meaning of seasons, it is pretty much just one day after another. I sometimes stand in shirtsleeves and shorts and look up at the snow capped mountains and smile. To me seasons is just a word. Your poem however is well written, melodic and a joy to read.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Man Nomi, and you know what? We''ve got climate change to ruin what used to be your home. We live in the noth part of PA and so far have gotten only rain. With all those glaciers collapsing and melting, 'we need ti make our own choices, now. NOW out
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Orion's high now in the sky,
he means that fall is passing by.
Old Man Winter will soon descend ~
bears hibernate 'til winter's end.
This ending gave me shivers. What a wonderful poem as ever Jeni. You truly are an amazing writer as I don't get writing shivers often! Well done. Loved. Kindest regards Meia :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Orion's high now in the sky,
he means that fall is passing by.
Old Man Winter will soon descend ~
bears hibernate 'til winter's end.
This ending gave me shivers. What a wonderful poem as ever Jeni. You truly are an amazing writer as I don't get writing shivers often! Well done. Loved. Kindest regards Meia :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Dear Meia, I'm putting your suggestions with the others and we'll see sometime today. Your words are beautiful and very complimentary. I've never in my life had someone tell me that I gave them shivers. Thank you for this.
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you are an excellent writer Jenni. Don't evr question that, you are. kindest regards, Meiax
Comment from Teri7
Jeni, This is a great poem about the seasons and how they change. You used very good descriptive wording in each one and great imagery for the mind! I enjoyed reading and reviewing it! blessings and love, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Jeni, This is a great poem about the seasons and how they change. You used very good descriptive wording in each one and great imagery for the mind! I enjoyed reading and reviewing it! blessings and love, Teri
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you so Much, Teri. I appreciated your noting my descriptive wording and great imagery. 'Blessings.
Comment from Pantygynt
This captures the key features of the seasons round the year. My first thought was that the Amish farmer was taking it easy stopping work as early as half past three buthen I remembered that these guys work with horses and they are situated somewhere quite northerly so they would need that last hour of autumn daylight to stable the horses.
You say no fixed meter but the rhythm is strong. It is always tetrameter thoufgh, smostly iambic but sometimes catectic trochaic. the thing is -- it works.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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This captures the key features of the seasons round the year. My first thought was that the Amish farmer was taking it easy stopping work as early as half past three buthen I remembered that these guys work with horses and they are situated somewhere quite northerly so they would need that last hour of autumn daylight to stable the horses.
You say no fixed meter but the rhythm is strong. It is always tetrameter thoufgh, smostly iambic but sometimes catectic trochaic. the thing is -- it works.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Wow, I'm just thrilled at this review.ZI'm do happy thst you thought I worked it-
