Old Beauty
The first dog in my life40 total reviews
Comment from Spiritual Echo
You put a tear in my eye and a lump in my throat. To do that in 50 words is remarkable. These stories on a word budget are hard to do well. You did so exceptionally.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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You put a tear in my eye and a lump in my throat. To do that in 50 words is remarkable. These stories on a word budget are hard to do well. You did so exceptionally.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you, my friend. I'm going to miss you if you leave this site. I love doing these short-short stories, they are such a challenge. Thanks for the six stars too, they are appreciated.
Comment from Lu Saluna
What a sweet, sad story. Poor old, dog. They know. Their feelings run deep and hurt if they feel set aside. but it sounds like all was forgive in your very well written story.
Best of luck in the contest.
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What a sweet, sad story. Poor old, dog. They know. Their feelings run deep and hurt if they feel set aside. but it sounds like all was forgive in your very well written story.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you. Dogs always forgive humans for most anything. Old Beauty was our family dog and the first dog I can remember. I do recall feeling sorry for her when my dad brought the beagle pup home.
Comment from marinadawn
Yes dogs have characters just like humans , I always remember my very first dog as a child a German shepherd called Lucy , she knew meal times and would go get her bowl and bring in her mouth , I always thought that a real neat trick
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Yes dogs have characters just like humans , I always remember my very first dog as a child a German shepherd called Lucy , she knew meal times and would go get her bowl and bring in her mouth , I always thought that a real neat trick
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you. Yep, dogs are such great creatures. What would the world be without them?
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh, what a nice story. I have multiple animals and make sure to dote on each one throughout the day. Dogs especially are like little babies and need our attention. Yours is a very sweet story that I enjoyed. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Oh, what a nice story. I have multiple animals and make sure to dote on each one throughout the day. Dogs especially are like little babies and need our attention. Yours is a very sweet story that I enjoyed. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Bea. Dogs are such wonderful and smart animals. It sometimes amazes me the things they know.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written and a beautiful short story you full filled the challenge of the contest well I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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Yes this is well written and a beautiful short story you full filled the challenge of the contest well I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you. Dogs are God's gift to man. I can't imagine the world without them. Can You?
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no I have had my Staffordshire bull terrier since he was 4 weeks old I wouldn't be without him ... Jill
Comment from lyenochka
Sweet story and fully told in just fifty words. I love that way you draw out sympathy from the reader in just simple sentences that explain what happened. The ending is indeed just perfect as I can imagine a child doing exactly that.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Sweet story and fully told in just fifty words. I love that way you draw out sympathy from the reader in just simple sentences that explain what happened. The ending is indeed just perfect as I can imagine a child doing exactly that.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you. I remember dad getting a beagle pup and Old Beauty being quite upset about it. Animals do feel jealous, I have witnessed it often.
Comment from F. Wehr3
I thought this was well done for only using fifty words. I think this one will do well. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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I thought this was well done for only using fifty words. I think this one will do well. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Old Beauty is the first dog I can remember. I know Beauty was very upset when dad got a beagle pup.
Comment from w.j.debi
Animals have feelings too and can be jealous or hurt when they are left out. Great job bringing out the emotions and giving it a happy ending. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Animals have feelings too and can be jealous or hurt when they are left out. Great job bringing out the emotions and giving it a happy ending. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you. I have often witnessed jealousy in animals. They do have more feelings than most give them credit for.
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty word story, Old Beauty, does what I think microfiction should do. It evokes the memory of similar situations in everyone and explodes your story into cascading yesterdays. I am tearing up as I recall our old blue tick hound Skipper. He followed me when I was about twelve years old, like him, as I hiked from one town to another in the severe July heat. I kept telling him to go home but he wouldn't. He eventually fell behind and I forgot about him. I found him in the road on the way back, hours later. He had died of heat exhaustion. You never appreciate a dog's loyalty until it shocks you. I've never forgiven myself. This is the impact of a story like yours.
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This fifty word story, Old Beauty, does what I think microfiction should do. It evokes the memory of similar situations in everyone and explodes your story into cascading yesterdays. I am tearing up as I recall our old blue tick hound Skipper. He followed me when I was about twelve years old, like him, as I hiked from one town to another in the severe July heat. I kept telling him to go home but he wouldn't. He eventually fell behind and I forgot about him. I found him in the road on the way back, hours later. He had died of heat exhaustion. You never appreciate a dog's loyalty until it shocks you. I've never forgiven myself. This is the impact of a story like yours.
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you. What a tragic story you just told me. The poor dog just wanted to be with you.
Comment from zanya
Yes the joy and love our four legged friends bring us and they too can feel being ignored a lovely story of loyalty
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Yes the joy and love our four legged friends bring us and they too can feel being ignored a lovely story of loyalty
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you. Old Beauty was the first dog I can remember in my life. When dad got a beagle. Beauty was extremely upset.