Perennials of War
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Comment from Heidi M
Shana only thought she would be leaving soon. Anderson showed good foresight in putting her room opposite his in the apartment. She will go a little stir crazy if she can't leave the apartment every once in a while. She doesn't sound like the type to stay put.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Shana only thought she would be leaving soon. Anderson showed good foresight in putting her room opposite his in the apartment. She will go a little stir crazy if she can't leave the apartment every once in a while. She doesn't sound like the type to stay put.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Shana will get herself in trouble. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is very well penned and thoroughly engaging. You keep the story moving along by heightening the tension just a notch or two at a time. It will be interesting to find out exactly what these men want her for, but I am sure you will keep us in suspense for a bit on that one. You have a small typo:
"I fly home tomorrow, so your life will get back to normal." - I think this should be I'll.
Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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This is very well penned and thoroughly engaging. You keep the story moving along by heightening the tension just a notch or two at a time. It will be interesting to find out exactly what these men want her for, but I am sure you will keep us in suspense for a bit on that one. You have a small typo:
"I fly home tomorrow, so your life will get back to normal." - I think this should be I'll.
Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Kelseyyy
This is the only part of your story that I have read, but it has already captivated me! You have successfully included an increase of tension, which draws the reader in. I can't wait to know what happens next. Your extract is easy to read (in a positive way) and understand.
To improve, you could include move description of the setting/surroundings and slightly less speech. This way, the readers can imagine the events and it is as though they are beside the character. Happy new year!
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This is the only part of your story that I have read, but it has already captivated me! You have successfully included an increase of tension, which draws the reader in. I can't wait to know what happens next. Your extract is easy to read (in a positive way) and understand.
To improve, you could include move description of the setting/surroundings and slightly less speech. This way, the readers can imagine the events and it is as though they are beside the character. Happy new year!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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I don't like reading a lot of descriptions so I don't use a lot, just enough to let my readers use their imagination. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
Each chapter brings more suspense and my curiosity is about to explode. Not knowing what is going on is driving me crazy. You are doing a terrific job with this and I plan to see this one to the end. As I said, great work with this. I anxiously look forward to the next post.
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Each chapter brings more suspense and my curiosity is about to explode. Not knowing what is going on is driving me crazy. You are doing a terrific job with this and I plan to see this one to the end. As I said, great work with this. I anxiously look forward to the next post.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review and your support. Many questions will be answered in a few weeks only to bring out more questions.
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Thank you for the kind review and your support. Many questions will be answered in a few weeks only to bring out more questions.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, things haven't changed much since last year, but if I were a betting man, I would wager that this story is just getting started. LOL! Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
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Well, things haven't changed much since last year, but if I were a betting man, I would wager that this story is just getting started. LOL! Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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It sure it. You can place your bets. LOL In a few weeks things hit that proverbial fan. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
I like the way your protagonists own dogs, and very intelligent dogs, ever heroes in the story Barbara. I like your character list, very handy until the reader gets used to the names of the characters. Anderson is determined to protect Shana, keeping her at his opulent residence, well done Barbara, good scribing dear girl, blessings, Roy
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I like the way your protagonists own dogs, and very intelligent dogs, ever heroes in the story Barbara. I like your character list, very handy until the reader gets used to the names of the characters. Anderson is determined to protect Shana, keeping her at his opulent residence, well done Barbara, good scribing dear girl, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I pray you have a very blessed New Year.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sankey
A great read again. Been hanging about waiting for you to get done with the festivities, hehe. I would like to recommend a fairly new lady I have met on here. MelB She is a Counsellor with an interesting history. You might have met already. Also a Sis in the Lord. One spag this time. have (a)feeling she's a feisty lady."
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A great read again. Been hanging about waiting for you to get done with the festivities, hehe. I would like to recommend a fairly new lady I have met on here. MelB She is a Counsellor with an interesting history. You might have met already. Also a Sis in the Lord. One spag this time. have (a)feeling she's a feisty lady."
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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I have not met her. I will check her out. I have been spending time with family over the holiday. I felt that was more important. I will fix that spag. Thank you.
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Yes, of course Christmas and New Year is most definitely family time. I recently posted some poems my late Uncle wrote and put them to music on my website if interested. First one (Number 6 is to a well-known tune..Number 7(next one) I composed the music for the NINE Stanza poem he wrote as a tribute to my Aunty Miriam (his wife.) Hope you have PC. can provide alternate media player if needed. check out the other stuff if you like. http://funnymentaloz.witnesstoday.org/songs.html
Comment from c_lucas
Anderson seems to have a personality that doesn't take no for an answer. Stay on top of this even if you have to post bi-monthy. You are doing a very good job.
MC, HNY and HBD,
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Anderson seems to have a personality that doesn't take no for an answer. Stay on top of this even if you have to post bi-monthy. You are doing a very good job.
MC, HNY and HBD,
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review, but I have no idea what MC< HNY< and HBD mean
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MC-Merry Christma
HNY - Happy New Year
HBD--You are getting older.
Comment from mbroyles2
A great continuation that leaves us in great suspense.
More questions arise as Anderson tries to figure out why these men are so interested in Shana. Could it be simply about the art or something much larger. The plot is definitely thickening.
Michael
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A great continuation that leaves us in great suspense.
More questions arise as Anderson tries to figure out why these men are so interested in Shana. Could it be simply about the art or something much larger. The plot is definitely thickening.
Michael
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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We should know in a few weeks more of what this is all about. Or at least I hope we do. LOL Thank you for the kind review.