Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Great Gawd, Gert, this form looks like a page from an algebra book. I will assume it follows the prescribed layout, and just read the poem for content. Looks fine to me.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work and I apologize for not replying sooner!

luna

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This a well written alliterisan about a wizard battling a dragon. A happening in some fantasy stories. I know one is hard to write for I have tried.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work and I apologize for not replying sooner!

luna

reply by dragonpoet on 06-Dec-2016

No problem.

Joan

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

Very interesting. I might try this tomorrow, but it sounds difficult.
I like the story you've chosen for your poem. It's like a fairy tale. Almost.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work and I apologize for not replying sooner!

luna

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

Luna,

Very nice theme. The art was also nice. Emotional reflections are insightful and impressive. Good impact and rhythm. This style looks very tricky to me. You seemed to do a good job with it.

It is spotless.

Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016

Hi, Oatmeal.

I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the poem and art so much. I just know you'd do well with it.

I'm looking forward to seeing you again, as well.

Thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio!

luna

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

Hello Jeni:
Thanks for composing this charming creation for thoughtful contemplation. From the start I was spellbound by such supernatural sorcery. I'm so drawn in by damsels and dragons. I don't ever get disinterested in these descriptions.

Your friend and fan,
Bill ~

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016

Dear Bill,

I'm happy that you are enchanted with damsels and dragons. So am I, and also with the Greek and Roman gods and goddesses. They should appear shortly around the bend.

Take good care, and thanks!

Comment from mkflood

Excellent

interesting poem. i wanted to thank you for selecting my work. its an honor to be included with yours. great job and thanks again..mkflood

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016

I'm sorry that I didn't credit you in the notes. It was an oversight which I'll correct shortly. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

reply by mkflood on 28-Nov-2016

oh no problem. fanstory always list the artist..im n illustrator and having writers using my work is my goal. i make about 800 illustrations availble to you writers here on fanstory that has a large range of topics. i also do music videos with y illustrations. if ya get the chance i have about 15 music videos now that can be viewed on my profile at fanartreview or you can view the on youtube.com under the name "MKFlood Presents" wide range of music and stories as well. get a chance checkem out..thanks again..mkf

Comment from Thal1959

Excellent

Very well done with a good use of alliterations. I always enjoy a Dungeons & Dragons theme. I doubt I would care to write such a style of poem, though I used an alliteration in a poem I titled "Two Teeter Totter Toddlers." Very smooth work that is easy to read. Thanks.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016

Thanks for the good word on my poem! Dungeons & Dragons are always dope! I like your poem title.

Thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio!

luna

reply by Thal1959 on 28-Nov-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

OH wow this one took a little studying and I hope you do some more so I can see the hang of what you are doing. I don't understand the syllable instructions with the piece you did and it is absolutely wonderful yet very complex. I love the flow even with the different cyllable count.
I have just discovered what the - and + syllable is. It is in comparison to the 8 count. Is there a count for the number of alleriterations per line?

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016

yes, you have to use four words, in other words, two alliterations per line. Go look at shadowpoetry.com. They give a ton more examples than the way I did mine. Mine was the number two out of about eight choices. I'd like to read it if you decide to write one. I bet it would be fantastic.

Thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio!

luna

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

A strong structure to this one. Still, Good continuation to your theme and imagery created within the boundaries of it. I must take my hat off to you for the amount of inspiration you have at this time to be able to write so many with such conviction....and why not if the imagination is at a high.
My best wishes
RGstar

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016

I had writer's block for about six years. It was awful, I'd try to write and Luna was just gone. There was no inspiration and what I did manage to write was so very lame.

I'm really grateful to the moon for encouraging my creative bent. And luna and the Dream Master too!

Thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio!

luna

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I like the picture and the poem, although, I have never encountered this poem before. I like the orange background and the way it twists the tongue as well. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016

I've only written this one. I'm gonna try it again, though. It was really fun to write. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.

Thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio!

luna