Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "In Dreams"a place to gather my poetic forms
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Comment from LIJ Red
I assume monorhyme quatrains are the heart of a monotetra. The repeating half-line must also be a characteristic of the form. Live and learn, say I. Excellent rhymes.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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I assume monorhyme quatrains are the heart of a monotetra. The repeating half-line must also be a characteristic of the form. Live and learn, say I. Excellent rhymes.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Dear LlJ Red,
I'm going to begin putting the intended structure of the poems in my author's notes, so the reader can determine if I have been compliant in my effort!
I appreciate your comment regarding my rhymes...
I appreciate your attention to my work...Thanks to the moon and back!
Comment from Jumbo J
Oh Luna((((((((((((... So loved this magical ride on moonbeams- long,
where thought and memory live through song...
a poem with a lyrical tune that sing,
with moon and stars that memories bring...
dreams and love of yesterday,
when simpler days were set in clay.
Truly enjoyed this beautiful poem... read it multiple times.. and enjoyed it more and more... but if I can... may I suggest one thing? Well I'm going to take your silence as a yes... smile)))))))))))) so...
We ride upon wing-ed horse...
consider white-wing-ed horse for a continuity of the meter... but no matter, only a suggestion... it is a beautiful imaginative poem... loved it!
With our thoughts we create,
dreams that free the mind.
James vx's.
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Oh Luna((((((((((((... So loved this magical ride on moonbeams- long,
where thought and memory live through song...
a poem with a lyrical tune that sing,
with moon and stars that memories bring...
dreams and love of yesterday,
when simpler days were set in clay.
Truly enjoyed this beautiful poem... read it multiple times.. and enjoyed it more and more... but if I can... may I suggest one thing? Well I'm going to take your silence as a yes... smile)))))))))))) so...
We ride upon wing-ed horse...
consider white-wing-ed horse for a continuity of the meter... but no matter, only a suggestion... it is a beautiful imaginative poem... loved it!
With our thoughts we create,
dreams that free the mind.
James vx's.
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Dear James vx's
I'm thrilled by your poetic review of my poem and grateful for your suggestion. I must take a look at that line!
With our thoughts we create,
dreams that free the mind.
I love that!
I appreciate your attention to my work...Thanks to the moon and back!
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for sharing yet another new form, the monotetra! I like the galloping meter especially with the repeated four syllables in the last line of each stanza. May the boogeyman stay away and may we find fun and play in our "nocturnal sleigh" !
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Thanks for sharing yet another new form, the monotetra! I like the galloping meter especially with the repeated four syllables in the last line of each stanza. May the boogeyman stay away and may we find fun and play in our "nocturnal sleigh" !
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Dear lyenochka,
I'm thrilled that you chose to award this poem a six-star review! I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem and it's meter and repeats.
Thanks for the comment on the boogeyman and our nocturnal sleigh. Again, I'm truly grateful for this kind and gracious review.
I appreciate your attention to my work...Thanks to the moon and back!
Comment from Janet Foor
Lovely artwork and a very creative and clever poem. I have read one of these before and enjoyed the experience.
Excellent mono rhyme in each stanza.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Lovely artwork and a very creative and clever poem. I have read one of these before and enjoyed the experience.
Excellent mono rhyme in each stanza.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Janet, for the warm and gracious review. I'm happy that you enjoyed the read, and am grateful for your comments on the rhyme scheme!
I appreciate your continued attention to my work...Thanks to the moon and back!
Comment from CEO2020
Another high-quality poem.
"Yet then again, we just may find
the boogeyman inside our mind.
To us, that dream feels unrefined ~
Oh, rest unkind, oh, rest unkind!"
The boogeyman inside our mind!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Another high-quality poem.
"Yet then again, we just may find
the boogeyman inside our mind.
To us, that dream feels unrefined ~
Oh, rest unkind, oh, rest unkind!"
The boogeyman inside our mind!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Dear CEO2020,
I'm so happy that you found this poem enjoyable, and I thank you for pointing out the stanza with the dreaded boogeyman.
Ofttimes the boogeyman resides in my head!
I appreciate your continued attention to my work...Thanks to the moon and back!
Comment from jusylee72
Lovely true story about the diversity of dreams and life. I think you did a great job in the Rhythm and rhyme scheme. Just a pleasant poem to start my day with. Thank you.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Lovely true story about the diversity of dreams and life. I think you did a great job in the Rhythm and rhyme scheme. Just a pleasant poem to start my day with. Thank you.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Thank you, my friend, for this lovely review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi there. I like the message you are conveying here, but I have to say I don't know a lot about all the poetic forms, so I can't help you there. I do like to read poems though , and at times try my hands on it. I liked this a lot. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Hi there. I like the message you are conveying here, but I have to say I don't know a lot about all the poetic forms, so I can't help you there. I do like to read poems though , and at times try my hands on it. I liked this a lot. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Dear Ulla,
I am beginning to put the mechanics of the form in the author's notes so all readers can judge for themselves so that all readers can learn about, and let me know where I succeeded and did not so at the guidelines. I love your reviews, and will be fanning you soon so that I can catch your work as well!
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Great, that will be great. I will fan you as well as I would like to follow your work. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from sandy montgomery
Lovely imagery. I liked the refrain in each line. This piece had a lyrical feel. I loved the way it sang to me as I read it. Good job. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Lovely imagery. I liked the refrain in each line. This piece had a lyrical feel. I loved the way it sang to me as I read it. Good job. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Dear sandy,
I'm happy that you enjoyed the refrains and thought this piece had a rhythmical feel. It sang to you? Awesome.
Thank you, my dear.
Jeni
Comment from Pantygynt
A poem in quadruple rhyme sometimes referred to as monorhyming quatrains, is not the most common form of rhyme used and some might say it verges on being too much of a good thing especially over as many as five quatrains. Maybe even more so when the fifth line is leonine and repeating.
however this is a dream sequence and one can get away with a great deal in dreams of course. It is cleverly done here and to be honest is not intrusive.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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A poem in quadruple rhyme sometimes referred to as monorhyming quatrains, is not the most common form of rhyme used and some might say it verges on being too much of a good thing especially over as many as five quatrains. Maybe even more so when the fifth line is leonine and repeating.
however this is a dream sequence and one can get away with a great deal in dreams of course. It is cleverly done here and to be honest is not intrusive.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Dear friend,
I learn as I go. I appreciate your comment on "too much of a good thing," but I'm happy you didn't in this case finding it intrusive. And I think you're correct, most anything can get a pass in dreams!
Thank you so much.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely bounce poem, Jeni, (or do you prefer Luna?) You take us to the moon and back, see a galaxy of stars, hope we don't meet the boogeyman, and just enjoy the night in our dreams. It's lovely. I am so sorry to read about your loss. I have two sons, and can't begin to imagine your pain. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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What a lovely bounce poem, Jeni, (or do you prefer Luna?) You take us to the moon and back, see a galaxy of stars, hope we don't meet the boogeyman, and just enjoy the night in our dreams. It's lovely. I am so sorry to read about your loss. I have two sons, and can't begin to imagine your pain. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Dearest Sandra,
It's Jeni when you want, luna when you want. I literally go 50% by both. Some of my best friends call me luna (better than spider woman, eh? That's another story). I thank you for your sincere condolences and pray, my friend, that you never, ever have to experience this feeling. Hugs to you as well, dear friend.