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Comment from mfowler
What a slick ending! I was feeling the compassion, marveling at your subtle touch in describing Henry's sexual encounter, and then you dropped me right into the heat of a court case. Of course he was found not guilty, but who expected him to disappear? First class story told with compassion and cleverness. Best of luck in your comp.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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What a slick ending! I was feeling the compassion, marveling at your subtle touch in describing Henry's sexual encounter, and then you dropped me right into the heat of a court case. Of course he was found not guilty, but who expected him to disappear? First class story told with compassion and cleverness. Best of luck in your comp.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Touching story. She was already dead, of course. The court could have tried him for necrophilia... probably not allowed in the hospice either. But he knew she was "alive" for those moments, and he could still see her walking with him on the beach. He went to join her. Sweet ending. :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Touching story. She was already dead, of course. The court could have tried him for necrophilia... probably not allowed in the hospice either. But he knew she was "alive" for those moments, and he could still see her walking with him on the beach. He went to join her. Sweet ending. :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much. No, she wasn't dead. LOL
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I thought she was dead bec she was so COLD.
Comment from foxangie123
An interesy
interesy story in iysel f2f as for contest and imfo there of. I know you are very exoressive and good with authoring.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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An interesy
interesy story in iysel f2f as for contest and imfo there of. I know you are very exoressive and good with authoring.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Lance
= Excellent entry. Nice romantic story.
= Although, the patience I've been around in hospice so close to passing, aren't even aware of their surroundings--let alone communicate.
= However, that's the beauty of a novel. The writer has full control. (*<*)
= Good luck in the contest.
<> Typo: Change =I= to =it=??
= lazy-boy chairs they keep for guests when [I](it) happened.
* A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! *
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Hi, Lance
= Excellent entry. Nice romantic story.
= Although, the patience I've been around in hospice so close to passing, aren't even aware of their surroundings--let alone communicate.
= However, that's the beauty of a novel. The writer has full control. (*<*)
= Good luck in the contest.
<> Typo: Change =I= to =it=??
= lazy-boy chairs they keep for guests when [I](it) happened.
* A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! *
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jay Squires
A cogent, well-written story, Lance. If the reader tries to look at the situation the way the doctors and nurses did, as well as Dora's family might have, Henry was very lucky he didn't end up serving a life sentence. I'm also imagining this same story from Dora's POV, or from a totally objective viewpoint. So many ways you could look at this.
I liked the way you did it, though, Lance.
We were together and we happy again. [... and we WERE happy again.]
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A cogent, well-written story, Lance. If the reader tries to look at the situation the way the doctors and nurses did, as well as Dora's family might have, Henry was very lucky he didn't end up serving a life sentence. I'm also imagining this same story from Dora's POV, or from a totally objective viewpoint. So many ways you could look at this.
I liked the way you did it, though, Lance.
We were together and we happy again. [... and we WERE happy again.]
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from damommy
What a wonderful, beautiful story. The love between those two is so special, something very few people have.
Your story reads very well, and it certainly keeps the reader's attention.
I enjoyed it very much. 8-)
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What a wonderful, beautiful story. The love between those two is so special, something very few people have.
Your story reads very well, and it certainly keeps the reader's attention.
I enjoyed it very much. 8-)
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much