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Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "For You Are"poems inspired by Psalm 23
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Beautiful artwork, very nice presentation, and good poem.
-Your ideas are presented very well with this format.
-Good progression from one stanza to the next.
-The poem begins well with the broken bread, offering "the gift of all eternity."
-The lines you chose to repeat are good and add to the flow of the poem.
-Good ending:
"Bright hope has won the victory.
Pure love is where your path has led"
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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-Beautiful artwork, very nice presentation, and good poem.
-Your ideas are presented very well with this format.
-Good progression from one stanza to the next.
-The poem begins well with the broken bread, offering "the gift of all eternity."
-The lines you chose to repeat are good and add to the flow of the poem.
-Good ending:
"Bright hope has won the victory.
Pure love is where your path has led"
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the detailed review and all the encouraging comments. I am happy you liked the poem. Thank you for mentioning the progression and presentation. I appreciate you pointing out eh flow and the ending. Thank you!
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You are very welcome for the review, and I appreciate your comments about it. That means a lot to me.
Comment from Joy Graham
You did great Debi :) A lovely theme and great repeating lines. Good and sensible rhymes with terrific variety. My only question is, what happened to your pentameter? I thought the rondeau redouble calls for iambic pentameter? At least that's what I thought.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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You did great Debi :) A lovely theme and great repeating lines. Good and sensible rhymes with terrific variety. My only question is, what happened to your pentameter? I thought the rondeau redouble calls for iambic pentameter? At least that's what I thought.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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You were always better at meter and me. Point out which line need fixing. I hate to say it, I thought it was in iambs
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your meter is fine, it's iambic tetrameter and not pentameter. I thought the form calls for ten syllable lines?
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Whew! Shadow Poetry, which is where I went for instructions had examples in both tetrameter and pentameter. I chose the tetrameter. But you do raise a good question. Now I will be looking for more examples.
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sometimes shadow poetry confuses me. They'll say the form calls for strict meter, but the examples they give are all over the place with bad meter.
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Yes. I was trying to find the last Rondeau Redouble contest on the site. I know I wrote a poem for it but missed the deadline. It was in tetrameter, but you have me wondering. I'm going to keep looking.
Poetry dances says a Rondeau can be tetrameter or pentameter, but it doesn't have Redouble description.
I wish Brooke were around to ask. She know.
Comment from c_lucas
Jesus promises to be with his own and to protect them. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Jesus promises to be with his own and to protect them. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and your insights on the theme. I appreciate the encouragement.
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You're welcome, Debi. Charlie
Comment from Ricky1024
just remind me writer of a piece I wrote last week five poems at once called blessed so be was not honoring the Savior so much for the dedicated home tonight my wife is passed away and also my son so thanks for this Ricky 1024 out
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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just remind me writer of a piece I wrote last week five poems at once called blessed so be was not honoring the Savior so much for the dedicated home tonight my wife is passed away and also my son so thanks for this Ricky 1024 out
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the kind words. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from foxangie123
This is marvelous and so uplifting. A great witness and testament you have written here as well as your selection of artwork chosen to go with it. Please keep writing always and tribute ng the Lord. Your pen is touch readers indeed...
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This is marvelous and so uplifting. A great witness and testament you have written here as well as your selection of artwork chosen to go with it. Please keep writing always and tribute ng the Lord. Your pen is touch readers indeed...
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the great review. I appreciate your kind words about the writing and especially your insights on the theme. You kindness is appreciated. Thank you for stopping by to read and review.
