Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

That's a lot of instruction and detail for a poetic form, and to deal with all those rules and produce a clear message with minimum stilting sounds
like a labor of love. Without doublechecking any rules, I found this read well. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Yeah, not everyone's cup of tea twisting the words to fit patterns, but I have always been a pit of a puzzler...

Thanks for the warm review.

Steve

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

This is an amazing Rondeau Redouble Steve. I think you have mastered the rhyme and meter perfectly. It does look a bit tricky with its variations. Very nicely done.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Janet, thanks so much for the great review and the six stars.

If you can find your way to the Page and Spine site, I have another of these on there...

Steve

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem. Good job with a seemingly difficult format that I have not tried. That being said, I will comment on what I do understand. The rhyme was great. I like the way the verses flow--smoothly. The repeated line fit in seamlessly. The artwork is perfect. I see no changes. Good job and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thanks for the great review.

Steve

Comment from foreverbutterfly

Excellent

This very much reminded me of my dad and his sense of humour. I really enjoyed reading this and I feel that it flows really well. It makes you want to read it from beginning to end. Well done.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thank you. Whenever I try one of these, it ends up with this kind of humour...

Steve

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I've never seen this style before, though I do like the Rondeau style. And, you're so right so many ways to die so get out there and enjoy before that bolt of lightning strikes, is my take on this great read. Like the artwork, with him up there waiting to strike.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thanks, Pearl - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I am not a judge on rondeau Redouble but with the rules you stated, you have followed it to a T.
A very complicated piece but the final piece is worth it all.
Nicely written. Rhyme and rhythm were very good and Flow seemed spot on.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thanks, Barb. Glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Exceptional

The sixth star is for achieving great success with this difficult challenge of complying with this complex form of poetry, Steve. I'm sure it wasn't easy and took considerable doing. You did a fine job.

Loved the ironic humour in this write; in particular "You're just as dead when snugly in your plot, if ending came with fearsome shout or sigh". :) Yup, dead is dead!! I laughed at SNUGLY. :) Another fave line ... "or big 'ol C has twined you in his knot".

Myself, I'm chicken, and prefer to die in my sleep. :)

Connie

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thanks, Connie.

I don't even ant to think about dying - I've always been a great denier and I shall deny to the end, even as the body starts to fail me.

Steve

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Very well written in good Rondeau Redouble form. The repeated lines are not forced and do not sound at all contrived to suit this poetry form. A grizzly subject and so long as the reader is not suffering from anything mentioned in the poem he will find it highly amusing - otherwise a stoic personality is a good thing LOL. Well done. Regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thanks, Dorothy.

I guess as we all age, the topic does cross our minds from time to time.
Not yet, I say.

Steve

Comment from RodG

Exceptional

This superb Rondeau Redouble was a joy to read. I really like your sardonic humor and your willingness to mock a grim topic--Death.
Your inventiveness with rhyme did not go unnoticed either.
A challenging format brilliantly handled.
Rod

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Rod, thanks so much for the great review and the six lovely stars!

I really like this form. I have another on the Page and Spine website and one entered for a contest somewhere...

Steve

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

It is complex and It is too early in the morning for me to get my head around it. You did a wonderful job whether you stuck to the rules or not.Great picture for the poem. You are saying to go out in a blaze of glory but I'm saying thats bound to hurt! I'd rather be asleep and snoring in my cozy cot Thank you Steve. This is a six . Well done. Nancy

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thanks, nancy.

You may be right about the blaze of glory - sometimes my muse has odd things to say!

Steve