cocaine and psychedelics
contest entry (see author notes)52 total reviews
Comment from Liberty Justice
What the heck man? What planet you from? That poem captivated my very soul. The vivid photo colorful and painted artistic verses shocked my heart and held me captivsted til I drank every last sobering word. Bravo! Does the World know your name??!! liberty justice
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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What the heck man? What planet you from? That poem captivated my very soul. The vivid photo colorful and painted artistic verses shocked my heart and held me captivsted til I drank every last sobering word. Bravo! Does the World know your name??!! liberty justice
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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I need more comments like yours. HAHA. the poem is a little bit out there but I enjoyed writing it. Thanks so much for the six stars. It is very encouraging. Have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from Pantygynt
Sometimes I am, glad to be a boring old fart who has never been tempted to sample the so called delights "substances". I'll just stick to the ones I know, wine, women and song. Yes, yes, I know the'll all kill me in the end, except perhaps song, but that can give you a sore throat, but what the hell who wants to live forever.
I think you have probably attempted to describe the impossible here but I couldn't really say could I?
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Sometimes I am, glad to be a boring old fart who has never been tempted to sample the so called delights "substances". I'll just stick to the ones I know, wine, women and song. Yes, yes, I know the'll all kill me in the end, except perhaps song, but that can give you a sore throat, but what the hell who wants to live forever.
I think you have probably attempted to describe the impossible here but I couldn't really say could I?
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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thank you for taking the time to read the poem and giving such a kind review. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, You seem to have a very strong knowledge of this subsstance lol, seriously, this is a really well written free verse poem on a not so good subject, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Hi Mystery author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, You seem to have a very strong knowledge of this subsstance lol, seriously, this is a really well written free verse poem on a not so good subject, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
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Your are so welcome my friend.
Comment from randman58
Well written, flows nicely.
Particularly liked "racing up white capped mountain peaks"
Would have liked to see reference to crashing down other side only to race up another mountain peak in reference to "bumping" in an effort to maintain your high.
Not sure the fourth stanza fits my memories of the cocaine high, this description seems more psychedelic, but that is just nit picking because I do like the descriptions there in. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Well written, flows nicely.
Particularly liked "racing up white capped mountain peaks"
Would have liked to see reference to crashing down other side only to race up another mountain peak in reference to "bumping" in an effort to maintain your high.
Not sure the fourth stanza fits my memories of the cocaine high, this description seems more psychedelic, but that is just nit picking because I do like the descriptions there in. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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You are right about describing the psychedelic experience. I was thinking more of just painting a wonderful picture that dissipates. have a merry Christmas. :-)) PS- many couple psychedelic drugs with cocaine.
Comment from livelylinda
Author: an extremely powerful poem about cocaine effects. The picture you have chosen and the black background enforce the fierceness of these effects. The lay-out of this poem lends to the " . . . darting elusively . . . " effect.
Well written and designed. I have never used cocaine, saw some on three different occasions, but your words made it a lot more real to me.
Best wishes in the contest. Linda
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Author: an extremely powerful poem about cocaine effects. The picture you have chosen and the black background enforce the fierceness of these effects. The lay-out of this poem lends to the " . . . darting elusively . . . " effect.
Well written and designed. I have never used cocaine, saw some on three different occasions, but your words made it a lot more real to me.
Best wishes in the contest. Linda
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review. I enjoyed writing the poem and hope it shows a glimpse to others of the pain of addiction. Thx for the six stars too !!! have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from rjuselius
This is a brilliant entry for this particular writing prompt dear anonymous! You describe well the mechanisms of drug addiction.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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This is a brilliant entry for this particular writing prompt dear anonymous! You describe well the mechanisms of drug addiction.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for reading the poem . it was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas
Comment from SarJ93
So before I even read this I had scrolled to the bottom because of a technical error on a previous page (just to make sure everything was good) and as I did so I saw your formatting and immediately thought "I can't wait to read this" and you did not disappoint. I absolutely loved your stanza with all the different colors. It really portrayed your concept visually as well as poetically. Cocaine is dangerous and your piece demonstrates that beautifully as well as the collapse of the victim.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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So before I even read this I had scrolled to the bottom because of a technical error on a previous page (just to make sure everything was good) and as I did so I saw your formatting and immediately thought "I can't wait to read this" and you did not disappoint. I absolutely loved your stanza with all the different colors. It really portrayed your concept visually as well as poetically. Cocaine is dangerous and your piece demonstrates that beautifully as well as the collapse of the victim.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Excellent portrayal of the images and, the consequences of using cocaine. I was a casual user of the substance, back in my younger years, when I was in a rock band. The descriptions and reasons for using it are all well done. I like the use of white letters as metaphors for cocaine. It numbs the mind until you don't care about anyone else--even yourself, for that matter. I have seen it ruin lives. Thank you for reminding me of the horrors of substance abuse. A well-crafted poem, I must say.
Peace on Earth, Jesse James
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Excellent portrayal of the images and, the consequences of using cocaine. I was a casual user of the substance, back in my younger years, when I was in a rock band. The descriptions and reasons for using it are all well done. I like the use of white letters as metaphors for cocaine. It numbs the mind until you don't care about anyone else--even yourself, for that matter. I have seen it ruin lives. Thank you for reminding me of the horrors of substance abuse. A well-crafted poem, I must say.
Peace on Earth, Jesse James
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
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It was my pleasure.
Have a happy Christmas and a merry New Year. Jesse
Comment from Dean Kuch
I gotta admit, I've checked the portfolios of everyone I thought might have written this chilling and elaborately presented piece of poetic expressionism on the many dangers and pitfalls of drug addiction, and I'm at a loss at figuring out who wrote this.
Your carefully chosen, eloquently decadent wording and over-the-top composition should serve you quite well in keeping you in favor with voters.
Good luck in the booths. Well done...
~Dean
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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I gotta admit, I've checked the portfolios of everyone I thought might have written this chilling and elaborately presented piece of poetic expressionism on the many dangers and pitfalls of drug addiction, and I'm at a loss at figuring out who wrote this.
Your carefully chosen, eloquently decadent wording and over-the-top composition should serve you quite well in keeping you in favor with voters.
Good luck in the booths. Well done...
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. i enjoyed writing the poem but the subject is very serious. have a merry Christmas :-))
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Of course the topic is quite serious. Why would I think otherwise?
Happy holidays to you as well.
~Dean
Comment from writeapoem
This is a good description of the effects of coke. I never have had the experience but I have seen the end result on several finds as their minds are deceived. Thanks twice for sharing and acknowledging God is the only way out.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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This is a good description of the effects of coke. I never have had the experience but I have seen the end result on several finds as their minds are deceived. Thanks twice for sharing and acknowledging God is the only way out.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
