2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "haiku(soaked earth smells like rain)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from GentleWind
Love the colors and the imagery it helps to portray. I could sense every word and feel every color. The 'child smiles' brought a smile to my face as well. Good job
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Love the colors and the imagery it helps to portray. I could sense every word and feel every color. The 'child smiles' brought a smile to my face as well. Good job
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I really appreciate your review and kind words. :)
Comment from Ben Colder
More than children would smile here if it rains. Burning ban on and can not burn the rubbish. Great poem. Great contest piece. Hope you win. If you do, send the rain.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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More than children would smile here if it rains. Burning ban on and can not burn the rubbish. Great poem. Great contest piece. Hope you win. If you do, send the rain.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I really appreciate your review and kind words. :)
Comment from scd41
Font colors have been used imaginatively to relate to the seven colors VIBGYOR of rainbow. The picture is breathtakingly beautiful. The last line sums up nicely leaving smiles on everybody's face.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Font colors have been used imaginatively to relate to the seven colors VIBGYOR of rainbow. The picture is breathtakingly beautiful. The last line sums up nicely leaving smiles on everybody's face.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I really appreciate your review and kind words. :)
Comment from mermaids
I like your use of colors in your poem. A child smiles is a wonderful last line that captures the feeling that a colorful rainbow brings to all of us. Excellent use of words that creates a clear scene.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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I like your use of colors in your poem. A child smiles is a wonderful last line that captures the feeling that a colorful rainbow brings to all of us. Excellent use of words that creates a clear scene.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from nacwriter
Nice Haiku about rainbows. However, when I look at the accompanying picture, I don't think of a child smiling. The mountains and water just seem more adult-oriented. Without the picture, it's a good haiku.
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Nice Haiku about rainbows. However, when I look at the accompanying picture, I don't think of a child smiling. The mountains and water just seem more adult-oriented. Without the picture, it's a good haiku.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate it very much. :)
gypsy
Comment from BeasPeas
No matter what age, child or adult, rainbows charm and excite--"oh look, a rainbow!" Your colorful haiku stresses this delight we all feel.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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No matter what age, child or adult, rainbows charm and excite--"oh look, a rainbow!" Your colorful haiku stresses this delight we all feel.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate it very much. :)
gypsy
Comment from jmdg1954
soaked earth smells like rain
as rainbow peeks between clouds
a child smiles
I think a rainbow makes adults smile also. Nicely done.
John
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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soaked earth smells like rain
as rainbow peeks between clouds
a child smiles
I think a rainbow makes adults smile also. Nicely done.
John
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate it very much. :)
gypsy
Comment from LanceHill
Very nice use of colors in this haiku. Played into the theme of the contest. You have chosen a beautiful picture as well. It was a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Very nice use of colors in this haiku. Played into the theme of the contest. You have chosen a beautiful picture as well. It was a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate it very much. :)
gypsy
Comment from Jackarrie
This is a very good entry into the Rainbow contest. I love the way you have the text all the colours of the rainbow. Also soaked earth smells like rain a clever line. Well done, I wish you the best of luck in the contest Mary
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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This is a very good entry into the Rainbow contest. I love the way you have the text all the colours of the rainbow. Also soaked earth smells like rain a clever line. Well done, I wish you the best of luck in the contest Mary
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate it very much. :)
gypsy
Comment from Leineco
What adorable imagery :-)
the gloom of rain exits
spreading a farewell rainbow
and smiles
:-)
(I Like your ROYGBV presentation ;-)
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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What adorable imagery :-)
the gloom of rain exits
spreading a farewell rainbow
and smiles
:-)
(I Like your ROYGBV presentation ;-)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate it very much. :)
gypsy