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Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "70 years on since Anne Frank wrote"Words to pass on to my children
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Comment from OLA THOMAS
Good tribute for a long forgotten heroin. She was gone with the wind of forgetfulness as many others. the world remember you when you are still 'on the stage' and forget you even your shadow immediately you step down from the stage.'
Thank you for bringing this to memory.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Good tribute for a long forgotten heroin. She was gone with the wind of forgetfulness as many others. the world remember you when you are still 'on the stage' and forget you even your shadow immediately you step down from the stage.'
Thank you for bringing this to memory.
ola thomas
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thanks Ola for your excellent review I really appreciate it. Mary
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Jackarrie, An expressive poem and an atrocity that should never be forgotten. Of note:
The monsters never cringed or even apologized,
merely obeying orders, from the leader they idolized.
(How weak were all of these men?! Not all were believers, but they followed orders to survive. If only they could have found that same strength to oppose and overcome that One monster ... There is strength in numbers. It's sad that strength could not have been used to expose and extinguish evil.)
And so ...
The beauty and the spirit of a fifteen-year old girl lives on into eternity.
A time in history that should never be repeated.
Excellent writing. Keep the blue waters flowing and keep exposing evil. Feel the power of the pen. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Hello Jackarrie, An expressive poem and an atrocity that should never be forgotten. Of note:
The monsters never cringed or even apologized,
merely obeying orders, from the leader they idolized.
(How weak were all of these men?! Not all were believers, but they followed orders to survive. If only they could have found that same strength to oppose and overcome that One monster ... There is strength in numbers. It's sad that strength could not have been used to expose and extinguish evil.)
And so ...
The beauty and the spirit of a fifteen-year old girl lives on into eternity.
A time in history that should never be repeated.
Excellent writing. Keep the blue waters flowing and keep exposing evil. Feel the power of the pen. LateBloomer
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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ThanksLateBloomer for your exceptional review I really appreciate your great comments. I agree with all you have written. Mary
Comment from scd41
Anne Frank left behind her diary to tell the world about her indomitable courage and love for writing. The brutal torture and killings by the monsters in the holocaust have been condemned by all civilized people and they have paid a tribute to Anne by making her book a huge success. Your poem narrates well the history in the simple, smooth flowing and rhyming verse.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Anne Frank left behind her diary to tell the world about her indomitable courage and love for writing. The brutal torture and killings by the monsters in the holocaust have been condemned by all civilized people and they have paid a tribute to Anne by making her book a huge success. Your poem narrates well the history in the simple, smooth flowing and rhyming verse.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you so. much for your excellent review and great comments which I appreciate Mary
Comment from MacMhuirich
This is an amazing write for the true heroine that is Anne Frank. The bravery, the determination are all there in your words, good rhyme and flow, excellent poem.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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This is an amazing write for the true heroine that is Anne Frank. The bravery, the determination are all there in your words, good rhyme and flow, excellent poem.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I am so pleased that you enjoyed my poem and gave it an excellent review. Mary
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, jackarrie, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the horrors of the holocaust. great imagery presented here....
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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this is an excellent write, jackarrie, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the horrors of the holocaust. great imagery presented here....
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I am so pleased your enjoyed my poem about Anne Frank, and you have rated it a six I really appreciate it. Mary
Comment from Brett Matthew West
The holocaust was a horrific experience in the human existence, no doubt. Adolph Hitler, and his cronies, should have received even worse than they dished out. Well written poem depicting some of these atrocities.
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The holocaust was a horrific experience in the human existence, no doubt. Adolph Hitler, and his cronies, should have received even worse than they dished out. Well written poem depicting some of these atrocities.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thanks Brett for the excellent review and great comments. Mary
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Mary.
Though it's obvious what you mean in 16th line, I felt the wording of 'gas station' wasn't quite right, with respect.
Maybe: '...all humans; gas annihilation.'
I know meter isn't a priority for you, so I haven't addressed that in this or any other lines, as I don't want to be a pain in the butt. :-)
I won't be at all offended if you ignore me. :-)
'monsters' to describe the Nazis is spot on.
Excellent descriptions of poor Ann's predicament, feelings and sad fate.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Hi, Mary.
Though it's obvious what you mean in 16th line, I felt the wording of 'gas station' wasn't quite right, with respect.
Maybe: '...all humans; gas annihilation.'
I know meter isn't a priority for you, so I haven't addressed that in this or any other lines, as I don't want to be a pain in the butt. :-)
I won't be at all offended if you ignore me. :-)
'monsters' to describe the Nazis is spot on.
Excellent descriptions of poor Ann's predicament, feelings and sad fate.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thanks Ray for your excellent review and for your comments I did change the line that was not quite right. Thanks for the suggestion. I always appreciate your reviews.
Mary
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That's much better now, Mary, IMO.
Thanks for your gracious reply.
Ray xx
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
I really wish I had a six left. I would give it to you for that is what you deserve. But I do not. So I have to settle on giving you a High Five!!!!! This is a fabulously written poem. Kudos on a job well done. I sincerely doubt we will ever forget the Holocaust. The tragedy of it lingers. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I really wish I had a six left. I would give it to you for that is what you deserve. But I do not. So I have to settle on giving you a High Five!!!!! This is a fabulously written poem. Kudos on a job well done. I sincerely doubt we will ever forget the Holocaust. The tragedy of it lingers. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my poem about Anne Frank and your virtual six I really appreciate it Mary
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
What a wonderful story you have told of the life of Anne Frank in your amazing poetry.I agree that we must never forget that or allow it to be perpetrated again. Well done with the rhyming and phrasing, Giddy
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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What a wonderful story you have told of the life of Anne Frank in your amazing poetry.I agree that we must never forget that or allow it to be perpetrated again. Well done with the rhyming and phrasing, Giddy
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thanks Giddy for the excellent review and the wonderful comments which I appreciate. Mary
Comment from Jacob Collins
I can't believe that there are still those out there who still deny that the holocust ever happened. You are right, we must never forget the victims and certainly not allow history to repeat itself. You captured Anne's bravery well in this piece, I'm sure you'll make many think of what kind of life she would have lived had she been permitted to. Excellent writing, thanks for sharing...Jacob
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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I can't believe that there are still those out there who still deny that the holocust ever happened. You are right, we must never forget the victims and certainly not allow history to repeat itself. You captured Anne's bravery well in this piece, I'm sure you'll make many think of what kind of life she would have lived had she been permitted to. Excellent writing, thanks for sharing...Jacob
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your excellent review much appreciated, along with your great comments. Mary