How This Critter Crits
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Down & Out--The Adventure Continues"GROWTH? ADULATION? HURRY -- CHOOSE!
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Comment from doggymad
Great write. Makes for a nice fast paced read. Your chanting'I didn't know' certainly matched the young girls catch phrase.
It is amazing how memories inspire stories in their own sweet time
Freda
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Great write. Makes for a nice fast paced read. Your chanting'I didn't know' certainly matched the young girls catch phrase.
It is amazing how memories inspire stories in their own sweet time
Freda
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Freda. So happy you enjoyed this. I'll publish more of it from time to time.
Comment from LIJ Red
You must have edited this several times. No nits I can see. I like the quotes in the art. That was the age I was when I worked in the auto garage just enough
to keep my wheels turning. Youth, wasted on the young. Excellent storytelling.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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You must have edited this several times. No nits I can see. I like the quotes in the art. That was the age I was when I worked in the auto garage just enough
to keep my wheels turning. Youth, wasted on the young. Excellent storytelling.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thanks Red. No Nits good, right boss? Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I never tire of your stories, Jay
I'd never heard of the name Mongolian before. It's a wonder that back then the poor girl was allowed to wander free. Your first old house reminded me of the first rooms my husband and I had (I was just 18) - what I thought was a larder in the kitchenette was the toilet, so you could sit on there and watch the potatoes cooking on the stove - that, a lounge with an open fire, and along the landing, a bedroom - that was it for about 2 years, but then, that's all there was back then. My, how times have changed - we have it all now!!
She didn't say anything,(not) even ayeeeeeeeent-a-kidd'n
a-kidd'n so often it became as invisible as the chirping of birds two months into spring. - dare I say - it wouldn't become "invisible" but "unnoticeable"
Loved it.
Margaret
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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I never tire of your stories, Jay
I'd never heard of the name Mongolian before. It's a wonder that back then the poor girl was allowed to wander free. Your first old house reminded me of the first rooms my husband and I had (I was just 18) - what I thought was a larder in the kitchenette was the toilet, so you could sit on there and watch the potatoes cooking on the stove - that, a lounge with an open fire, and along the landing, a bedroom - that was it for about 2 years, but then, that's all there was back then. My, how times have changed - we have it all now!!
She didn't say anything,(not) even ayeeeeeeeent-a-kidd'n
a-kidd'n so often it became as invisible as the chirping of birds two months into spring. - dare I say - it wouldn't become "invisible" but "unnoticeable"
Loved it.
Margaret
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Margaret. Your keen eye picked two biggies. Got 'em fixed. Thanks for that!
Comment from Adri7enne
I'm still wondering what the point of the story is. I wondered how the parents of a 'challenged' child might feel reading this. It brings back the era when children such as these were hidden in attics. At least the world has evolved somewhat.
Well written, Jay.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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I'm still wondering what the point of the story is. I wondered how the parents of a 'challenged' child might feel reading this. It brings back the era when children such as these were hidden in attics. At least the world has evolved somewhat.
Well written, Jay.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Adrienne. I considered how such parents might feel. I was being as honest as I could. Are you saying I should have softened it, or not written it? I hope not. Thanks again for reading and for your straight-forward comments.
Comment from ellie6
So the adventure continues. You have both made it as far as San Antonio. not bad going. Where is the next pay cheque coming from? I must confess, I did a double take when you mentioned 'Mongolian Idiot' Isn't it amazing how political correctness has got us all in a stranglehold. Back in the day this expression wouldn't have raised an eyebrow.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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So the adventure continues. You have both made it as far as San Antonio. not bad going. Where is the next pay cheque coming from? I must confess, I did a double take when you mentioned 'Mongolian Idiot' Isn't it amazing how political correctness has got us all in a stranglehold. Back in the day this expression wouldn't have raised an eyebrow.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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I'm amazed at how many people have never heard of it. Yes, it was the accepted classification. Thanks again for reading.
Comment from krprice
Good essay.
What an adventure! Sure hope you found some food and a job. Guess you survived since you're here to write about it.
Karlene
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Good essay.
What an adventure! Sure hope you found some food and a job. Guess you survived since you're here to write about it.
Karlene
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Karlene. It seemed quite tame at the time. There will be more adventures to follow. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from jpduck
A poignant tale, which I enjoyed reading. Political correctness is such a strange business. Today's only available phrase becomes tomorrow's unfeeling outrage. I loved the Mark Twain quote; it certainly resonates for me.
Adrian
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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A poignant tale, which I enjoyed reading. Political correctness is such a strange business. Today's only available phrase becomes tomorrow's unfeeling outrage. I loved the Mark Twain quote; it certainly resonates for me.
Adrian
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Adrian. Glad you enjoyed it. Those were some interesting times. More to follow as soon as I write them. Those two were written over a year ago.
Comment from royowen
Is it mongoloid or Mongolian Jay? they would've been called all sorts of things in those days, there didn't appear to be restraint on thing s like that then, enjoyable write, I see it wasn't fiction so it must be true! Well written, the past for you must have interesting for you as it was for me, well done, my friend blessings, Roy.
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Is it mongoloid or Mongolian Jay? they would've been called all sorts of things in those days, there didn't appear to be restraint on thing s like that then, enjoyable write, I see it wasn't fiction so it must be true! Well written, the past for you must have interesting for you as it was for me, well done, my friend blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Mongoloid I believe was the term used after Mongolian Idiot. Mongolian because of the resemblance to the indigenous people of Mongolia. Idiot was part of a scale of intelligence, because the limited verbal (primarily) skills of the DS child.
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Well done
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Interesting. I recall when we called DS folks Mongoloids, and I also recall the old categories of retardation being Moron, Imbecile, and Idiot, but forget the order. I never heard anyone called a Mongolian idiot, though, but it makes sense. Sounds like she was homeless, no less. Pity.
I'm surprised to find this in your critting book, tho. Guess I missed something along the way, but what does it have to do with reviewing?
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Interesting. I recall when we called DS folks Mongoloids, and I also recall the old categories of retardation being Moron, Imbecile, and Idiot, but forget the order. I never heard anyone called a Mongolian idiot, though, but it makes sense. Sounds like she was homeless, no less. Pity.
I'm surprised to find this in your critting book, tho. Guess I missed something along the way, but what does it have to do with reviewing?
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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What happened was my "How This Critter Crits" turned a corner after about the 10th post since I was trying to show the new critter what to look for in a prose piece, and some told me they were learning how to improve their writing from my post. So I included more on writing (like Spitfire did today on writing thrillers). I started also including posts on strategies to keep writing. Finally it came around to my early experiences as a writer. Until this one, they were intended as one-subject blog. This one might be ongoing if I continue to get good feedback from it.
Comment from Curly Girly
Well done, Jay, for this amusing read. People with disabilities were labelled with terrible nicknames back in those days, it's just how it was. These days, many of those people live alone in their own government houses, a few under periodic supervision, and they are free to roam. There was one that used to follow me whenever she saw me--laughing at me--yikes!
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Well done, Jay, for this amusing read. People with disabilities were labelled with terrible nicknames back in those days, it's just how it was. These days, many of those people live alone in their own government houses, a few under periodic supervision, and they are free to roam. There was one that used to follow me whenever she saw me--laughing at me--yikes!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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That would have been scary, Nicole. His name wasn't B.J., was it? Wow! Thanks so much for the six stars
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Lol!