Act of Endurance
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Comment from poetsteve15
All of that for a dollar bill. I love it. Maybe some in Congress should get a copy of this but it most likely go over their heads anyways. or they blame on the other side. You did send good message to all of us on what we should give thanks for. GB
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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All of that for a dollar bill. I love it. Maybe some in Congress should get a copy of this but it most likely go over their heads anyways. or they blame on the other side. You did send good message to all of us on what we should give thanks for. GB
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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Glad this work struck the target although I feel subject raised two way street effect on its reader. They who must protect mostly as drunks in denial. Thanking you for way too generous rate but beloved comments pleasing.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
Your poem is written with a lot of expression. It shows how this world depends on the almighty dollar. It's a sad shame that so many people do without because of the greed in this world. I really enjoyed reading this very much. God bless you!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Your poem is written with a lot of expression. It shows how this world depends on the almighty dollar. It's a sad shame that so many people do without because of the greed in this world. I really enjoyed reading this very much. God bless you!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Funny write for me originally, what you read years of torments to somewhat properly present. Thanking you for generous rate and charming thoughts.
Comment from Cletus Hardiman
Hi. I have been off the site for quite awhile. Glad to be back. Enjoyed reading your "piece of work." Drop by and see me sometime when you have the time. I am not too active right now but will start posting again soon! I have quite a bit on here for you to read, however. Again, thanks for the nice piece of work you have contributed to the site! Cletus ( Clete ) Hardiman
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Hi. I have been off the site for quite awhile. Glad to be back. Enjoyed reading your "piece of work." Drop by and see me sometime when you have the time. I am not too active right now but will start posting again soon! I have quite a bit on here for you to read, however. Again, thanks for the nice piece of work you have contributed to the site! Cletus ( Clete ) Hardiman
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Glad you find interest or some measured thought about this write. I will touch your interest as well. Thanking you for your thoughts about this write and generous rate.
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You are very welcome! Cletus ( Clete ) Hardiman
Comment from Joyce Long
This is very well done. Poetry all the way and it says so much. Interesting how you move from the ones at the top making and writing the bills to the ones at the bottom trying to pay the bills. But, how we all sell out for the all mighty dollar bill. This a sad commentary about life. "How much good will you compromise or steal?"
I didn't see any errors or corrections to be made.
Joyce 10-16-15
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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This is very well done. Poetry all the way and it says so much. Interesting how you move from the ones at the top making and writing the bills to the ones at the bottom trying to pay the bills. But, how we all sell out for the all mighty dollar bill. This a sad commentary about life. "How much good will you compromise or steal?"
I didn't see any errors or corrections to be made.
Joyce 10-16-15
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
Those pits are there, this work was built off reviews such as yours. I too, am surprised. Thanking you! For generous rate and welcomed encouragement.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A nicely crafted creative work, very instinctive and very real. You run your argument so neatly that it gives the heart thoughts to ponder. The dollar bill and the Bill which is the law are both powerful but corruptive in nature. Both are used to oppress the less privilege people and to subvert justice. You clearly pointed out the evils that the two bills do to man.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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A nicely crafted creative work, very instinctive and very real. You run your argument so neatly that it gives the heart thoughts to ponder. The dollar bill and the Bill which is the law are both powerful but corruptive in nature. Both are used to oppress the less privilege people and to subvert justice. You clearly pointed out the evils that the two bills do to man.
ola thomas
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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I have finally spoken to be heard. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements
Comment from papa55mike
Awesome poem, my friend. Your right it's amazing what we would for a buck.
Interesting point of view on the subject.
Have a great day and God bless, mike.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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Awesome poem, my friend. Your right it's amazing what we would for a buck.
Interesting point of view on the subject.
Have a great day and God bless, mike.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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Thanking you for generous rate and glad you found some interests in this work
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Desires of World
A chapter in the book Endurance
~A Bill: A Story Poem~
by TPAC
This poem is about money and if you learn to live without it you could have time to travel and have fun.
People worship money more than they worship God.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Desires of World
A chapter in the book Endurance
~A Bill: A Story Poem~
by TPAC
This poem is about money and if you learn to live without it you could have time to travel and have fun.
People worship money more than they worship God.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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A truth with valid points, appreciate generous rate and reflecting comments
Comment from dlw1925
Certainly there are many things both good and bad that people have done for a dollar bill. You have touched on many in this poem. I had a hard time understanding where you're meaning was going in this part.
"I need to have greater hopes than them,
a grand slam bill,
to have a few bills."
It seems there's a word or two I might suggest that might help the flow. Lady's arm, or would you kill?
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Certainly there are many things both good and bad that people have done for a dollar bill. You have touched on many in this poem. I had a hard time understanding where you're meaning was going in this part.
"I need to have greater hopes than them,
a grand slam bill,
to have a few bills."
It seems there's a word or two I might suggest that might help the flow. Lady's arm, or would you kill?
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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thank you for your welcoming insights, I do assume, appreciate generous rate and positive inputs
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I like this a lot. I love the social commentary in your poem. I think you have gone about it in a very creative way. Well written and enjoyable.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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I like this a lot. I love the social commentary in your poem. I think you have gone about it in a very creative way. Well written and enjoyable.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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thanking you for this generous thought, I come to find a lack in certain line defining but structure of this work established
Comment from st francis
'Carnal flesh god of men,
desires to obtain our shame and destined ills,..' this sums it up I think. We make money our god to gain self fulfillment for our fleshly and disordered desires. O how tragic that we are so short sighted and falsely believe we were not made for more.
A thought provoking poem with guts and the ending so perfect because we recognise these truths but our ego seems to win every time. Sometimes we settle for very little at a huge price to our well being 'Yes I think I will for a dollar bill'. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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'Carnal flesh god of men,
desires to obtain our shame and destined ills,..' this sums it up I think. We make money our god to gain self fulfillment for our fleshly and disordered desires. O how tragic that we are so short sighted and falsely believe we were not made for more.
A thought provoking poem with guts and the ending so perfect because we recognise these truths but our ego seems to win every time. Sometimes we settle for very little at a huge price to our well being 'Yes I think I will for a dollar bill'. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanking you for generous rate and warm thoughts about the read, I did enjoyed this work, the potential for statements