Comment from Lindy Nards

Excellent

I have no six star anymore, that I would have given. This is a poem from the heart, that will be appreciated by anyone suffering from a heartbreak. Then I want to ask, does it always have to be a love triangle ? what is the equation yet to be solved? why would I love you and you want another? Memories of the heartbroken.

Thanks for sharing. wish he could come back to you.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.

Comment from Maritza M. Mejia

Excellent

You nailed it the Writing Prompt.
You wrote a poem about a candlight and the inscription in the image is well described in your lines.
I enjoyed the last two lines:
"Well, don't come crying to me when she tears your world in two.
Remember that you told me there ain't a thing I do for you. "
Good luck!

 Comment Written 05-May-2015

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reply by the author on 05-May-2015

Thanks for your comments.

reply by Maritza M. Mejia on 05-May-2015

You're very welcome!

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Super love event. Great ingredients for the mix. A slight sway as you continue subject, maybe tug might adjust. A wonderful experience, thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 05-May-2015

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reply by the author on 05-May-2015

Thanks for your comments.

Comment from alexisleech

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem very much, but I'm a little confused. In the second stanza you say 'So, tonight I'm gonna leave you and I'll try not to cry.' but in the sixth stanza you write 'The day that you walked out on me is the day I lost my mind.' Am I missing something?

Apart from that, the poem is great, and flows and rhymes beautifully.

Alexis x

 Comment Written 05-May-2015

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reply by the author on 05-May-2015

The second refers to the man walking out and the first to the woman finally leaving him behind.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your lyrics and hope you have set them to music. I particularly enjoyed the way you told the lost love story in rhymed quatrains and your choice of the "sea" metaphor. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 05-May-2015

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reply by the author on 05-May-2015

Thank you for your comments.

Comment from emkoutny

Excellent

I really liked this. The pain and heartbreak of the speaker was evident. The first line was very compelling. I liked the image of saving a bag of memories. Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

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reply by the author on 05-May-2015

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Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

It looks like the idea of a candle just slipped in. This poem is really churning up all the aspects of being kicked to the curb. The saying in the graphic is interesting. Happy day.

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

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Comment from angel123

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your emotional poem. I could relate to it. It flows and rhymes well and good alliteration of words. Your artwork choice is excellent.

Angel123

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

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reply by the author on 05-May-2015

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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Good job!
-good rhythm
-action flows smoothly
-descriptive language used
-excellent format and picture (I would make the font bold)
-excellent character development
-held the reader's interest

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

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reply by the author on 04-May-2015

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Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

We make our own beds and then we have to lie in them.

This was a very well rhymed poem. This composition is rife with pain and heartache, bitterness, and the emotion are clearly conveyed. It's often been said that there's a fine line between love & hate. I think this poem speaks to that age old saying quite well.

~Dean

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

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reply by the author on 04-May-2015

Thank you for your continued support and comments. Always enjoy hearing your point of view about my writing.

reply by Dean Kuch on 04-May-2015

Anytime...