Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Warmth"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
59 total reviews
Comment from GeorgieBoy
No matter the circumstances, a deep warm sleep with pleasant dreams can come to all of us. You have said this with poignancy and grace. Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
No matter the circumstances, a deep warm sleep with pleasant dreams can come to all of us. You have said this with poignancy and grace. Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much GeorgieBoy, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Was, this is so well done with interpretive flashes circling the room like a strobe light, catching for a moment a myriad of snapshots of life.
Very well done, but I do have a presentation suggestion. Everything is very cool, except the font is so small it's tough on the eyes of we old fossils. I'd increase it some to allow everyone read this comfortably.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
Was, this is so well done with interpretive flashes circling the room like a strobe light, catching for a moment a myriad of snapshots of life.
Very well done, but I do have a presentation suggestion. Everything is very cool, except the font is so small it's tough on the eyes of we old fossils. I'd increase it some to allow everyone read this comfortably.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Will change the font. I am a fossil too and know how it is. Thank you for this wonderful detailed review!
Comment from skye
Beautifully crafted free verse with a touching example of the quilt used in the dream and in the reality of the homeless woman. It shows that His love warms us all, in many situations.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
Beautifully crafted free verse with a touching example of the quilt used in the dream and in the reality of the homeless woman. It shows that His love warms us all, in many situations.
Excellent.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you skye, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from billmetz
A very nice poem. I find Lots of different meanings in this poem. Some happy, and one sad. I like the flow of the verses. I'n not very knowledgeable about poetry but this is nice. The rhymes are nice, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
A very nice poem. I find Lots of different meanings in this poem. Some happy, and one sad. I like the flow of the verses. I'n not very knowledgeable about poetry but this is nice. The rhymes are nice, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your kind words and generous review Billmetz! I must stop by and read your work too:)
Comment from TAB_that's me
When we see someone sleeping on the ground, it gives us so much to be thankful for. This is a very good faith poem for the contest - good luck:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
When we see someone sleeping on the ground, it gives us so much to be thankful for. This is a very good faith poem for the contest - good luck:)
Teresa
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you Teresa, for this kind and compassionate review!
Comment from livelylinda
playinaround: this is a brilliant poem! You don't use the word 'faith' even once within it yet the focus on the warmth of the quilt for yourself and the homeless woman on the street is quite spiritual. After reading, I was left with a palpable sense of safety and warmth on this cold day in Florida. Lovely writing! I would think this poem a good contender in the contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
playinaround: this is a brilliant poem! You don't use the word 'faith' even once within it yet the focus on the warmth of the quilt for yourself and the homeless woman on the street is quite spiritual. After reading, I was left with a palpable sense of safety and warmth on this cold day in Florida. Lovely writing! I would think this poem a good contender in the contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much livelylinda, once again for your kindness!!
Comment from Ben Colder
Too many lay dreaming on when sometimes dreams come true. I like this poem. The deep meaning is right on. Thanks for sharing. Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
Too many lay dreaming on when sometimes dreams come true. I like this poem. The deep meaning is right on. Thanks for sharing. Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you for reading Ben Colder, and for this lovely review!
Comment from nomi338
Aha, I like what you did. In a world of dreams anything is possible. You can be a king or a queen instead of the toad you are when awake. That may well be why some prefer dreams to reality. The real world can be demanding, demeaning and totally unforgiving. Wonderful effort, I loved it.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
Aha, I like what you did. In a world of dreams anything is possible. You can be a king or a queen instead of the toad you are when awake. That may well be why some prefer dreams to reality. The real world can be demanding, demeaning and totally unforgiving. Wonderful effort, I loved it.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you nomi338, for your kind words and generous review!
Comment from thee-name
Good writing. Poem has lots of faith and emotion.
I DRIFT, I DRIFT- FAR AWAY
THIS TENDER EVE THE BOAT DID SWAY
SO GENTLY
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
Good writing. Poem has lots of faith and emotion.
I DRIFT, I DRIFT- FAR AWAY
THIS TENDER EVE THE BOAT DID SWAY
SO GENTLY
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you thee name, for your kind review!
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THANK YOU!
Comment from RGstar
A warm write. To each is own for the warmth a dream gives. Realities are closer linked than one would indeed believe. Another's heaven may be someonelses reason to exist., a safe place inside the mind.
Best wishes,
Nice write.
RGstar
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
A warm write. To each is own for the warmth a dream gives. Realities are closer linked than one would indeed believe. Another's heaven may be someonelses reason to exist., a safe place inside the mind.
Best wishes,
Nice write.
RGstar
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you RGstar, you are right on with the meaning of my poem. Thank you for reading and your kind review!