Truly Baffling
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Comment from ravim
If this is a contest entry (it doesn't look like), forgive me. My review counts for nothing. As a general poetry, it lacks the rhyme, the poetic verses, a profound message and even a professional touch. OR I'M ABSOLUTELY CRAZY. Can you let me know if I've missed anything subtle?
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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If this is a contest entry (it doesn't look like), forgive me. My review counts for nothing. As a general poetry, it lacks the rhyme, the poetic verses, a profound message and even a professional touch. OR I'M ABSOLUTELY CRAZY. Can you let me know if I've missed anything subtle?
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review. Yes, your review counts for something, and thank you for sharing your thoughts.
It is a 5-7-5-7-7 poem (5 syllables, then 7 syllables, then 5 then 7 then again 7) in which the idea is to use only those 31 syllables in 5 lines to create a compelling picture with words.
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Thank you. Now it all falls in place - abruptly!
Comment from Oatmeal
Mark,
A cute little number. I enjoyed this poem very much. Reading it was a pleasure. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
no errors.
Oatmeal is not just for breakfast anymore!!!
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Mark,
A cute little number. I enjoyed this poem very much. Reading it was a pleasure. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
no errors.
Oatmeal is not just for breakfast anymore!!!
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Bryan G
Your poem is great with suspense. Why did he leave so suddenly? Did he want her to follow? Is he a villan? Maybe this is the night that she dodged the icy hand of death. A great suspense story if ever I saw one.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Your poem is great with suspense. Why did he leave so suddenly? Did he want her to follow? Is he a villan? Maybe this is the night that she dodged the icy hand of death. A great suspense story if ever I saw one.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review. As fan of Alfred Hitchcock, I feel flattered you like the suspense in my work.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
There must be something wrong somewhere.she is attractive but he left. There is a subtle contradiction there. But the writing is great and beautiful and condensed,
Very nice in deed.
Beeharry Beeharry
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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There must be something wrong somewhere.she is attractive but he left. There is a subtle contradiction there. But the writing is great and beautiful and condensed,
Very nice in deed.
Beeharry Beeharry
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from ChelseaAnel
Hi Mark,
A contradiction of the whirlwind of emotions and thoughts to the mask/s we wear to reflect an aura of confidence either in truth or denial.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Hi Mark,
A contradiction of the whirlwind of emotions and thoughts to the mask/s we wear to reflect an aura of confidence either in truth or denial.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from DR DIP
An SSCOB Poem! a SON OF A BITCH poem!
A picture tells but 20 words
The words only substantiate her sadness
Her sadness is reinforced by her melancholy mood
For she is alone
Alone in a feeling of loneliness
Just her and her sorrow wine
Alone in her bewilderment
alone in her puzzlement
Why did he leave?
Leave so suddenly?
Who know how a man thinks?
We are a diffrent breed!
thanks for sharing lol
dipster
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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An SSCOB Poem! a SON OF A BITCH poem!
A picture tells but 20 words
The words only substantiate her sadness
Her sadness is reinforced by her melancholy mood
For she is alone
Alone in a feeling of loneliness
Just her and her sorrow wine
Alone in her bewilderment
alone in her puzzlement
Why did he leave?
Leave so suddenly?
Who know how a man thinks?
We are a diffrent breed!
thanks for sharing lol
dipster
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review and witty words.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Mark:)
In a 1911 quote Arthur Brisbane said, "Use a picture. It's worth a thousand words."
In this case your delightful poem and the picture seem to fit like a hand in a glove. I think your poem by its self may have the power of one thousand words. That is the magic of good poetry ; to multiply the power of a few words to create imagery and a message that will become memorable.
When you add this picture, the words become unfathomable.
Great presentation.
Roger
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Hi Mark:)
In a 1911 quote Arthur Brisbane said, "Use a picture. It's worth a thousand words."
In this case your delightful poem and the picture seem to fit like a hand in a glove. I think your poem by its self may have the power of one thousand words. That is the magic of good poetry ; to multiply the power of a few words to create imagery and a message that will become memorable.
When you add this picture, the words become unfathomable.
Great presentation.
Roger
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from DALLAS01
This poem speaks to many. But I think it speaks particularly to women who think they don't have too much to offer, suggesting that it can happen to all of us, at one time or another. You have tapped into vulnerability at its best.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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This poem speaks to many. But I think it speaks particularly to women who think they don't have too much to offer, suggesting that it can happen to all of us, at one time or another. You have tapped into vulnerability at its best.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Michaelk
Maybe she is a doctor's wife, or a fireman's. Maybe he left so quickly to go get the car because she accepted the invitation to go back to his place. She is quite attractive, I can't imagine just leaving her. Since you said that no answer can be given, maybe I should just say, great poem, i really enjoyed it, and quit trying to guess.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Maybe she is a doctor's wife, or a fireman's. Maybe he left so quickly to go get the car because she accepted the invitation to go back to his place. She is quite attractive, I can't imagine just leaving her. Since you said that no answer can be given, maybe I should just say, great poem, i really enjoyed it, and quit trying to guess.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Oh! The poor thing. Why would anyone leave her alone??? The photo brought the few words of this piece to life, well and truly. Great choice of artwork. I don't think she'll be alone for too long...
Thanks for the nice thoughts...
Anthony
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Oh! The poor thing. Why would anyone leave her alone??? The photo brought the few words of this piece to life, well and truly. Great choice of artwork. I don't think she'll be alone for too long...
Thanks for the nice thoughts...
Anthony
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your review.
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You're welcome, Mark.