Panic and Adrenaline
What do you do?36 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
i know the feeling in them words over here in ireland with massive queues you were right about one thing."Is anyone here a doctor?" I scream.very enjoyable story really enjoyed the read excellent piece of writing
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i know the feeling in them words over here in ireland with massive queues you were right about one thing."Is anyone here a doctor?" I scream.very enjoyable story really enjoyed the read excellent piece of writing
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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I'm glad I could bring you some enjoyment, thank you for taking the time to read and review!
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A GOOD WRITE,and needs no suggestion of change. I enjoyed your story and has a well descriptive,,piece AND THE ART WORK BLENDS WITH THE STORY. MARY
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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A GOOD WRITE,and needs no suggestion of change. I enjoyed your story and has a well descriptive,,piece AND THE ART WORK BLENDS WITH THE STORY. MARY
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Mary,
Thanks for the excellent review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So the first part was a scenario during the planning. Very clever, and I'm glad he shot his uppity partner. LOL! My guess is that you will get a lot of "huh? what happened to the girl? did she die? etc." Good luck with those readers, and good luck in the contest. This is a powerful entry. :)
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So the first part was a scenario during the planning. Very clever, and I'm glad he shot his uppity partner. LOL! My guess is that you will get a lot of "huh? what happened to the girl? did she die? etc." Good luck with those readers, and good luck in the contest. This is a powerful entry. :)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Wow...thanks for the awesome review. Yeah I was a little worried people wouldn't understand the shift but it seems to be doing ok.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
You did a fantastic job of writing this story, and holding the reader's interest throughout. Not a dull moment. Good luck with your entry!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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You did a fantastic job of writing this story, and holding the reader's interest throughout. Not a dull moment. Good luck with your entry!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Fantastic. Thanks Linda for taking the time to read and review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this si very well written, derived better, you did an excellent job writing this story about the change of plans during the bank robbery. I enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
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this si very well written, derived better, you did an excellent job writing this story about the change of plans during the bank robbery. I enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you very much for the excellent review.
Comment from J Patience
Wow, good stuff! I like the twist, it's well written, (except I noticed that "sync" has an "h" in it near the beginning), and gripping. The change in perspective keeps it interesting but not confusing. As much as I enjoy a positive story rather than bloodshed and apathy, this is certainly a story worthy of the contest. Good luck to you.
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Wow, good stuff! I like the twist, it's well written, (except I noticed that "sync" has an "h" in it near the beginning), and gripping. The change in perspective keeps it interesting but not confusing. As much as I enjoy a positive story rather than bloodshed and apathy, this is certainly a story worthy of the contest. Good luck to you.
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Yep, I fixed that "h". Thanks for the excellent review.