Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This theme is frightening! It would make a great Halloween poem :) good pantoum sonnet form. Great iambic pentameter and rhymes. Great repeating lines. Love the enjambment in line 8 and 11. This is a terrific entry. Good luck to you in this contest!

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Hi Joy,

I am happy you found it frightening since that was my intent. Halloween--well that is too far away. Thank you for the detailed and encouraging review, as well as the good luck wishes.

Debi

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Ah, grim as any Grimm. Still, I'm certain there have been
many parents who supected their perfect child
was switched with a fiendish imposter in the middle of the night. My parents, for instance.

Best of luck with The Committee.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you for the entertaining and encouraging review, Lee. I am glad you liked it. I love your commentary. Watch out for fairies tonight.
Debi

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

What a lovely haunting and spiritual piece of poetry, the flow is excellent, the rhyme only faulters on one line, may I politely suggest;

For when you least suspect, they creep in unseen.

Only a suggestion for your already magnificent poem.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you for the great review, Eric1. I am flattered by your kind comments.

I appreciate you making suggestions to make the writing stronger too. In this case I think it may be a matter of regional pronunciation. To me "been" rhymes with win, sin, bin, grin and
"seen" rhymes with bean, clean, scream.

I see your point though and I am going to add "been" to my list of words that might not be good to use at the end of a line for that reason. I truly appreciate the suggestion and the review. Thank you so much for stopping by.
Debi

Comment from MagKing

Exceptional

Beautifully done!
Your piece is indeed as brilliant as noon day its self.
Lovely done with fine end rhymes and a matching excellent syllable scheme.
You deserve the Six!
Good luck in the contest!

MagKing

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you for the generous six stars--and the amazing comments, MagKing. Thank you for the good luck wishes. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

lock those doors and keep the children safe for those little trolls, imps and fairy's are triple trouble if you get them riled up

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you for the fun comments and the generous stars. Watch out for those fairies tonight. Debi

reply by country ranch writer on 21-Jun-2014

ALL MY KIDS ARE GROWN AND MOVED AWAY SO IF THEY WANT HUBBY HE HE THEY CAN SWITCH HIM OUT IT MIGHT BE FUN HE HE

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This poem introduces interesting lore. I've always wondered what changelings were. I love fairies so hate to think of them in evil terms. So many cases in America in the last decade have occurred involving babies and small children disappearing from their beds. Maybe that happened many years ago causing this legend to be born.

the rhyming is nice and tight with the every-other-line rhyme.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you for the great review, seaglass.

The legends are from medieval time and mostly Scandinavian and European. The reasons for taking the human child vary as do the creatures left in place of the child. My understanding is that it was used to explain why a child was a bit odd, mentally of physically weak, or why a child grew sick and died. Some of the legends even have the fairy child raised by humans until adulthood and then returning to their fairy parents. As many tales as people almost.

Thank you for the kind comments. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

reply by seaglass on 21-Jun-2014

It probably explained crib death before they understood it. the parents raising a fairy child tickles my muse, I will give that some thought

Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

This is a very well written piece of work. You give us a history of a changeling, and then scare us with our own thoughts. I really enjoyed reading this one. It was excellent, my friend.

Always with respect,

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 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you for an excellent review, Eigle Rull. I am happy to hear you found it a bit scary and enjoyed reading it. Debi

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Oh, I remember those ghosts when I was a child. The mind can play great tricks on ya. You picked a good first line to repeat. It starts with a good beat and the rhythm never fades. Great job! Les

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 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you for the encouraging comments, Les. You made me smile with your insights and the kind comments about the writing. I appreciate it.
Debi