The Confessional Booth
100 Word contest Entry- This is strictly fictional35 total reviews
Comment from PearlW
Oh gosh, this made me giggle. I do not know how priests, after hearing years upon years of confessions (and probably a lot of depravity) don't go stark-raving mad.
"I've been to confession and I must admit that you've made the confessional box much more inviting." Suddenly the priest yelled, "get out of there now, you're on my side." -- You need a new paragraph after "inviting."
In dialogue, every speaker gets their own paragraph.
Good job with this, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Oh gosh, this made me giggle. I do not know how priests, after hearing years upon years of confessions (and probably a lot of depravity) don't go stark-raving mad.
"I've been to confession and I must admit that you've made the confessional box much more inviting." Suddenly the priest yelled, "get out of there now, you're on my side." -- You need a new paragraph after "inviting."
In dialogue, every speaker gets their own paragraph.
Good job with this, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much Pearl for your great review and suggestion about starting a new paragraph. I took your advice and made the change. Would you possibly consider upgrading the rating since I have made the correction. Thank you very much for your help my friend.
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Oh absolutely :) Done.
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Thank you very much Pearl for your help. I really appreciate your assistance. Your name "Pearl" was my mothers name "Katie Pearl." God rest her soul. Thanks again my friend.
Comment from Muffins
You sure left the best for last. A classic skill a lot of writers forget or fail to learn. I didn't know what to make of the interesting confessional decorations and was as confused as the narrator. What a voltage charged ending. Ha!Ha!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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You sure left the best for last. A classic skill a lot of writers forget or fail to learn. I didn't know what to make of the interesting confessional decorations and was as confused as the narrator. What a voltage charged ending. Ha!Ha!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much Muffins, I appreciate all your nice comments. I'm glad you laughed and enjoyed it. That makes it all worthwhile. Thanks again...
Comment from Leen1
I have to admit when I got to the last line of your story, I couldn't help myself from bursting out in loud laughter. I loved it! Very well written, clever story fitting right within the writing prompt. Thank you for giving me the biggest laugh of the day. Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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I have to admit when I got to the last line of your story, I couldn't help myself from bursting out in loud laughter. I loved it! Very well written, clever story fitting right within the writing prompt. Thank you for giving me the biggest laugh of the day. Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you my friend for your nice comments and I'm so glad you got a good laugh from it. Have a great day.
Comment from Domino 2
I paused for a moment at the end...and then the penny dropped. Hahaha!
So much for perfect preaching priests...if there is such a thing. :-)
Thanks for the LOL.
Cheers, Ted
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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I paused for a moment at the end...and then the penny dropped. Hahaha!
So much for perfect preaching priests...if there is such a thing. :-)
Thanks for the LOL.
Cheers, Ted
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you for your excellent review. Have a good day.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
That's very funny and you pull it off with great style.
good luck, the writing is very good, though I'd suggest there's more than one paragraph break in this 100 word story that you posted in a single block.
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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That's very funny and you pull it off with great style.
good luck, the writing is very good, though I'd suggest there's more than one paragraph break in this 100 word story that you posted in a single block.
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you my friend for your excellent review and suggestion. Have a great day.