Shadow of Action
Being an ingrate is deadly to one's existence and success65 total reviews
Comment from Kingsland
There is no future, because it never comes. There is only the here and now. I liked the humor in this poem. It really has a truth about it. This was an excellently written piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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There is no future, because it never comes. There is only the here and now. I liked the humor in this poem. It really has a truth about it. This was an excellently written piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Njorgensen
Oh, the message here is so true! Your approach to the subject enables it to jump right at the reader, shake him and make him wake up! Very nice work on this 5-7-5 poem.
I enjoyed it.
Njorgensen
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Oh, the message here is so true! Your approach to the subject enables it to jump right at the reader, shake him and make him wake up! Very nice work on this 5-7-5 poem.
I enjoyed it.
Njorgensen
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thanks a million. I really appreciate your words
Comment from akulkumol
Beautiful scary thought expressed in this short poem. Sometimes a nightmare disturbs me someday the sky might fall down so I never dare to play with it. Beautifully expressed thought loved reading it and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Beautiful scary thought expressed in this short poem. Sometimes a nightmare disturbs me someday the sky might fall down so I never dare to play with it. Beautifully expressed thought loved reading it and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Comment from DR DIP
just realised it was a 5-7-5 poetry contest.
as a writer of so called rhyme personally i find these partameters to work in very difficult so kudos to you. they are either hit or miss.
can you mind explaining the correlation between the picure and the poem? I read your authors notes and are still rather perplexed sorry OLA I just must be thick.
let me read it a few more times and take it in under the context I know i will eventually get it.
There's some pretty heavy metaphorical and cryptic lines going on here and I know its good
sincerely, dip
I'm definitely changing my style lol
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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just realised it was a 5-7-5 poetry contest.
as a writer of so called rhyme personally i find these partameters to work in very difficult so kudos to you. they are either hit or miss.
can you mind explaining the correlation between the picure and the poem? I read your authors notes and are still rather perplexed sorry OLA I just must be thick.
let me read it a few more times and take it in under the context I know i will eventually get it.
There's some pretty heavy metaphorical and cryptic lines going on here and I know its good
sincerely, dip
I'm definitely changing my style lol
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you. The correlation between the image and the poem is that, every one is connected to nature (as you see in the attachment like fruit) and our activities individually or collectively will go a long way to affecting our environment and us
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent, such a clever and brilliant 5-7-5 contest entry, you have my vote for this one. If everyone was to do their part, all this would eventually heal itself and be safe for our children and their children. Good luck in the contest! xsx sandra
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Excellent, such a clever and brilliant 5-7-5 contest entry, you have my vote for this one. If everyone was to do their part, all this would eventually heal itself and be safe for our children and their children. Good luck in the contest! xsx sandra
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Great message here. Beating up the sky which is our shelter is dangerous. And those ingrates get punished (smile). We should appreciate what we've got, and evey morning say to ourselves: "There are so many things we should be grateful for." An interesting picture to accompany your words.
One little nit in your subject line:
Being an ingrate is deadly to ones existence and success
I think you meant "one's existence and success".
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Great message here. Beating up the sky which is our shelter is dangerous. And those ingrates get punished (smile). We should appreciate what we've got, and evey morning say to ourselves: "There are so many things we should be grateful for." An interesting picture to accompany your words.
One little nit in your subject line:
Being an ingrate is deadly to ones existence and success
I think you meant "one's existence and success".
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you for that observation, it's an error! Thanks
Comment from DonandVicki
I get the feeling of Karma at work in your well constructed 5-7-5. Nicely said and the art work a very pretty choice for your work. Don
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I get the feeling of Karma at work in your well constructed 5-7-5. Nicely said and the art work a very pretty choice for your work. Don
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much
Comment from artisart4u
Your poem about the environment, made its point when you said "beating up the sky."
It has the 5-7-5 syllables.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Your poem about the environment, made its point when you said "beating up the sky."
It has the 5-7-5 syllables.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Comment from ELumpkins
Weird picture presenting this piece. I agree with the implication that we must take care of what we were give. That would be asking a lot from some of these ingrates living under the very sky we are talking about.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Weird picture presenting this piece. I agree with the implication that we must take care of what we were give. That would be asking a lot from some of these ingrates living under the very sky we are talking about.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Lothlorien
I really enjoyed reading this poem, as I can relate. I'm always thinking about how my actions will affect the future. Its a great 5-7-5.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I really enjoyed reading this poem, as I can relate. I'm always thinking about how my actions will affect the future. Its a great 5-7-5.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you