ABC's of My Life
A random, quick look at my life as it is near ending.61 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
This deserved six stars, the message is so strong and honest, the experiences were captured and the reflections conveyed on being happy despite the ailing and ebbing body is something positive that the readers have to think on and perhaps emulate. Thanks for sharing, God bless.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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This deserved six stars, the message is so strong and honest, the experiences were captured and the reflections conveyed on being happy despite the ailing and ebbing body is something positive that the readers have to think on and perhaps emulate. Thanks for sharing, God bless.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from emjaihammond
I love the spirit this is written in. You have a profound message to share and you do so unselfishly. I love that you share so openly and honestly. We all take something special away from your words. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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I love the spirit this is written in. You have a profound message to share and you do so unselfishly. I love that you share so openly and honestly. We all take something special away from your words. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from FrannyG
This is an interesting and entertaining ABC poem. Its main weakness is the uneven rhythm and the inconsistency of the rhyme. But it;s in interesting life story probably worthy of being told with a bit more consistency. But well done.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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This is an interesting and entertaining ABC poem. Its main weakness is the uneven rhythm and the inconsistency of the rhyme. But it;s in interesting life story probably worthy of being told with a bit more consistency. But well done.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Another author whose cup is always half empty. . .ever hear of free verse?
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Yes, I have. Free verse has no end rhyme at all. Poems need to have some degree of consistency or they are neither one thing nor the other. If you don't want honest reviews then don't post your poems. You are the third ungracious replier I've encountered on this site who clearly only wants praise and is not really interested in learning and improving. Such a shame as everyone else is so nice and appreciative of my attempts to help them, as I am of others' efforts to help me. I'll be sure not to review you again.
Comment from Mteske
Great word choice- collective, grand, initiative, overcome, vanishing, strife etc. Good luck in your contest! You are going to kick some serious butt! You have great description also!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Great word choice- collective, grand, initiative, overcome, vanishing, strife etc. Good luck in your contest! You are going to kick some serious butt! You have great description also!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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I got one vote. . .thanks for reading.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent abcderian form
good alliteration and humor in days of the dinosaurs
more good alliteration follows, like in grands and great
good internal rhyme in tears from fears
a very thoughtful look at your life and the changes it has undergone and the challenges you face :-) I love that you can write with warm humor even with those challenges :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Your poem is in excellent abcderian form
good alliteration and humor in days of the dinosaurs
more good alliteration follows, like in grands and great
good internal rhyme in tears from fears
a very thoughtful look at your life and the changes it has undergone and the challenges you face :-) I love that you can write with warm humor even with those challenges :-) Brooke
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Writing keeps me going. I have filed away all the emotional parts of this experience so that I can be the "strong one" for those I'll be leaving behind. Thanks, Brooke.
Comment from Cookie333
I had written one but it was not nearly as readable as this one. In parts if this the form took a back seat and the story/images unfolded
Good luck
Thank you
Karen
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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I had written one but it was not nearly as readable as this one. In parts if this the form took a back seat and the story/images unfolded
Good luck
Thank you
Karen
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from mermaids
You did an excellent job with this difficult form. Excellent rhyming and flow of words, the reader feels like she is looking into your world through your vivid descriptions of coping with illness yet enjoying life with a positive attitude.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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You did an excellent job with this difficult form. Excellent rhyming and flow of words, the reader feels like she is looking into your world through your vivid descriptions of coping with illness yet enjoying life with a positive attitude.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Aging does not hurt us, it the dwelling on aging that does. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Aging does not hurt us, it the dwelling on aging that does. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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I have received NO votes! Thanks for reading.
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You're welcome.
Comment from elchupakabra
The random nature of the piece combined with the rudimentary nature of some of the linework without really alluding to a moralistic declaration is admirable but falls short of what I'd consider to be a five star rating. I think the piece could be improved by creating better allusions, much of this feels forced and crammed in to match the structure of the contest. Good work overall, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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The random nature of the piece combined with the rudimentary nature of some of the linework without really alluding to a moralistic declaration is admirable but falls short of what I'd consider to be a five star rating. I think the piece could be improved by creating better allusions, much of this feels forced and crammed in to match the structure of the contest. Good work overall, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Irish Rain
i love the positive tone throughout your abecdarian poem, despite your affliction, you're still happy...and truly that is all there is! blessings to you tonight!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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i love the positive tone throughout your abecdarian poem, despite your affliction, you're still happy...and truly that is all there is! blessings to you tonight!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you.