The Boat
A 5-7-5 poetry contest entry.214 total reviews
Comment from annatberry
Well done, I loved it and the wonderful wording of this poem. You did a great job with such a few words. Good luck in the contest!!!!!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Well done, I loved it and the wonderful wording of this poem. You did a great job with such a few words. Good luck in the contest!!!!!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for this review and the comments on it! :P it is appreciated.
Comment from Princesseunice
Hmm, i do agree.
With the smooth ride and calmness, we sometimes feel relaxed. But there may come a time when it seems we have missed the way.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Hmm, i do agree.
With the smooth ride and calmness, we sometimes feel relaxed. But there may come a time when it seems we have missed the way.
Excellent.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much princesseunice, you review is treasured and I appreciate it! :P
Comment from Sanku
it is a Classic imagery .the boat and the boatman .here you have given this a slight twist .a crucial moment before embarking .about to take the plunge the question -why am i doing this or where am i actually heading? the boat is your destiny .you can either guide it to your chosen destination or you let it drift and go with the flow.i am very sorry i ran out of my quota of sixes .so here are virtual ones-*****.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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it is a Classic imagery .the boat and the boatman .here you have given this a slight twist .a crucial moment before embarking .about to take the plunge the question -why am i doing this or where am i actually heading? the boat is your destiny .you can either guide it to your chosen destination or you let it drift and go with the flow.i am very sorry i ran out of my quota of sixes .so here are virtual ones-*****.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for your virtual sixes (I'm hoping it is that way with everyone! :P)
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Thank you very much for your virtual sixes (I'm hoping it is that way with everyone! :P)
Comment from Bryana
Yes, thought provoking. Well you can get
to the pier, no problem, it would be if
you start the boat and get to the ocean
if you don't know how to steer.
Very interesting. You poem meets the
rules of the 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Yes, thought provoking. Well you can get
to the pier, no problem, it would be if
you start the boat and get to the ocean
if you don't know how to steer.
Very interesting. You poem meets the
rules of the 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments.
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Thank you very much for your review and your comments.
Comment from Bobby Jo
I get it, and yet I wonder this in my own life. Even though my life is good. Wondering how I have ended up right here, right now. Wondering where I will be tomorrow, as my kids hit the older grades and later into college. I don't want right now to ever end.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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I get it, and yet I wonder this in my own life. Even though my life is good. Wondering how I have ended up right here, right now. Wondering where I will be tomorrow, as my kids hit the older grades and later into college. I don't want right now to ever end.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Completely understandable, I just wish that time could stop sometimes, those are the moments of impact, that change you. :P
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Completely understandable, I just wish that time could stop sometimes, those are the moments of impact, that change you. :P
Comment from Hitcher
Stone still on the pier
yet I know not how to steer
how did I get here
a 5-7-5 poem should offer up a concrete image in the minds eye of the reader, the visuals should dazzle and not need an explanation. Without your notes, one would be left wondering; what the? With the notes... it makes sense, just a thought friend!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Stone still on the pier
yet I know not how to steer
how did I get here
a 5-7-5 poem should offer up a concrete image in the minds eye of the reader, the visuals should dazzle and not need an explanation. Without your notes, one would be left wondering; what the? With the notes... it makes sense, just a thought friend!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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I added the notes for what I could not fit into the poem, thank you for your review and your help! :P I really appreciate them, I always take every reviewers help into consideration, I just don't know how I could make it clearer, (some get it, some don't, then the readers notes help.) without having to completely disassemble it.
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I added the notes for what I could not fit into the poem, thank you for your review and your help! :P I really appreciate them, I always take every reviewers help into consideration, I just don't know how I could make it clearer, (some get it, some don't, then the readers notes help.) without having to completely disassemble it.
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Thank you for your review and your comments. I understand completely where you are coming from, and I feel the same way! Its about half and half for people understanding what I was trying to say, and then those that didn't understand I help with the notes. :P Its the best option I could come up with considering that I didn't have any more space. I will take your comments to heart though ok?
Comment from fairy77
Nice nature scene.I love the pic and pier.I could visualize this and your words carefully selected.I loved it and enjoyed the piece!Well done!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Nice nature scene.I love the pic and pier.I could visualize this and your words carefully selected.I loved it and enjoyed the piece!Well done!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for your comments and your complements! :P you review is appreciated.
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Thank you very much for your comments and your compliments! :P you review is appreciated.
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Thank you for your comments and your compliments.
Comment from cinderbella
The artwork is beautiful and perfect for your poem. Your little 575 expressed perfectly what you intended, according to your author's notes. I am unsure if I really like the title, just personal opinion; I do get your point, but for me you captured the moment of being "stone-still" rather than stepping into a boat. Maybe I just do not have enough imagination. lol
Nevertheless I absolutely loved it. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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The artwork is beautiful and perfect for your poem. Your little 575 expressed perfectly what you intended, according to your author's notes. I am unsure if I really like the title, just personal opinion; I do get your point, but for me you captured the moment of being "stone-still" rather than stepping into a boat. Maybe I just do not have enough imagination. lol
Nevertheless I absolutely loved it. :) Sandra
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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You did it perfectly, no lack of imagination. I have had multiple people saying that and I just don't know what else to name it. I'm glad you loved it.
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Hey you are the lady that makes all of the bella writings! :P I'm glad you got to review my poem! :P
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Yes, I am Bella, short for cinderbella.I would love to read more of your work, it is such a pleasure. I will fan you. :) Sandra
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Thank you :P I'm getting a membership soon.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Yes, I think I understand what you are driving at. I felt that moment of bewilderment in your poem... that moment when you blank out and wonder, which way was I about to go? Giddy
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Yes, I think I understand what you are driving at. I felt that moment of bewilderment in your poem... that moment when you blank out and wonder, which way was I about to go? Giddy
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the review it is much appreciated. I for some reason find myself feeling like that all the time!
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lol
Comment from mmayen
This is exactly where I am right now. I remember feeling like I had all my game together. Now I don't know if I'm strong enough to keep moving. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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This is exactly where I am right now. I remember feeling like I had all my game together. Now I don't know if I'm strong enough to keep moving. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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You can always find strength. You just have to do exactly that, find it. :P I am your neighbor here on fan-story so if you need help, I don't mind, and I know thats kinda stepping out of the way, but I'm southern, its what I do. :P (I'm a 17th century poet born into a southerners body, not literally of course though)
