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Comment from robina1978
A very original and nice form you designed here and gave it a catching name. Yes it rhymes, I don't know how it would sound without rhyme. I liked the sentence so only use every yellow door.
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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A very original and nice form you designed here and gave it a catching name. Yes it rhymes, I don't know how it would sound without rhyme. I liked the sentence so only use every yellow door.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thank you Ine, I got a bit mystic with this one.
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welcome and yes you did:) Ine
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welcome and yes you did:) Ine
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welcome and yes you did:) Ine
Comment from Rondeno
What an ingenious new poetic form! And you use it so skilfully! When everybody's trying to write one, I'll remember where I saw it first.
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What an ingenious new poetic form! And you use it so skilfully! When everybody's trying to write one, I'll remember where I saw it first.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thank you so much Rondeno. You make me smile!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Treische,
Short and Sweet in quite a new memorable Style!
The poem as 'a word weave' is perfect. Its language is simple, but with deep inner sense having spontaneous flow with nice rhyming scheme, lively imagery and pictorial quality.
"Yellowed Door", I think it refers to a door having yellow color due to time factor i.e. Old Door or any old entity of this world through which we can gain light, energy and strength to exist and lead a better life. 'Old is Gold.'
Its 1st two lines are particularly notable.
Marvelous! Superb!!
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Hello Treische,
Short and Sweet in quite a new memorable Style!
The poem as 'a word weave' is perfect. Its language is simple, but with deep inner sense having spontaneous flow with nice rhyming scheme, lively imagery and pictorial quality.
"Yellowed Door", I think it refers to a door having yellow color due to time factor i.e. Old Door or any old entity of this world through which we can gain light, energy and strength to exist and lead a better life. 'Old is Gold.'
Its 1st two lines are particularly notable.
Marvelous! Superb!!
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thank you ROSaxena. Yes, you captured it perfectly.
Comment from NicciFaye
You have accomplished the word weave my friend. My thoughts have been lost in the weave of words. Lol you have achieved what you set out. Don't be afraid to explored that yellow door.
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You have accomplished the word weave my friend. My thoughts have been lost in the weave of words. Lol you have achieved what you set out. Don't be afraid to explored that yellow door.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thanks Nicci, yes. You got it.
Comment from CR Delport
Word weave? Never heard of it before, but this is quite cleverly done. I am sure it took a lot of thought though? NIce poem.
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Word weave? Never heard of it before, but this is quite cleverly done. I am sure it took a lot of thought though? NIce poem.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thank you CR. Yes. It does get a bit mystical.
Comment from Glasstruth
A very tight, well woven poem. Loved everything about it except I'm a bit confused about the yellowed door. It definitely made me read it again. Thanks for sharing. Les
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A very tight, well woven poem. Loved everything about it except I'm a bit confused about the yellowed door. It definitely made me read it again. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thanks Glasstruth. Yellow door, history, ancient truths. Pore is absorb it into our being.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, treishel, you did an excellent job writing this format. it looks easy but it sounds hard, especially making the rhyme too. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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this is very well written, treishel, you did an excellent job writing this format. it looks easy but it sounds hard, especially making the rhyme too. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Thank you sweetwoodjax. I'm getting mixed reviews on meaning..
Comment from Selina Stambi
This is not your usual, Treischel. I have to confess you had me scratching my head in bewildered perplexity.
I love the weaving of the words though. Full marks for masterful creativity! :)
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This is not your usual, Treischel. I have to confess you had me scratching my head in bewildered perplexity.
I love the weaving of the words though. Full marks for masterful creativity! :)
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Thanks Reachingforthestars. I guess I got a bit mystical on this one.
Comment from visionary1234
hmm, a '5' for effort and initiative my dear, but not really for content - it's a bit like throwing magnet words into a bucket and sticking them on the fridge - definitely lost me at "Pore" - sorry!
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hmm, a '5' for effort and initiative my dear, but not really for content - it's a bit like throwing magnet words into a bucket and sticking them on the fridge - definitely lost me at "Pore" - sorry!
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Thanks visionary. I meant to convey, getting under your skin.
Comment from misscookie
This is a very deep poem
I believe I got your message Correct me if I'm wrong.
Through this old weary yellow door many
foot steps came and gone
now the sprits come through open windows
ever lasting shadows send heat and strengthen for ever more.
Thank you for sharing.
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This is a very deep poem
I believe I got your message Correct me if I'm wrong.
Through this old weary yellow door many
foot steps came and gone
now the sprits come through open windows
ever lasting shadows send heat and strengthen for ever more.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Thanks miss cookie. That pretty close.
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Whew!
Your very welcome, until next time.
